i need hub page help

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   lust makerposted 14 years ago

   hello i need someone to hep me make my hub better i just want them to take a look at  it it called demons are real believe me i need some more people to comment and put in their two cents

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      JY3502posted 14 years agoin reply to this

      SteveMC had some good advice. Breaking up your content into more capsules will add to your SEO.   using images with caption headings will also.
      Check your grammar and spelling.  Misspelled words and grammar will chase a reader off quickly.
      
      On your content.  answer your questions with and attribute your sources. The entire content has to do with religious topics.  Did you refer to any scriptures?
      Just my 2 cents worth.

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   Cagsilposted 14 years ago

   Welcome to HubPages!
   
   Just for future reference, when you come to the Extreme Hub Makeover forum thread, you are allowed to post a couple of links.
   
   However, I have posted the hub that you wanted checked out.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/thiswebsiteisgr … tomakeahub

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   Cagsilposted 14 years ago

   Well, right off the bat.....
   
   (a) break up your text by using more capsules.
   (b) the URL you have chosen to use is weird and useless to the hub.
   (c) create paragraphs(smaller one than you have now.
   (d) check for spelling errors also.

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   readytoescapeposted 14 years ago

   Cags is right on the money
   
   Firstly, take the time to edit before publishing.
   
   Hub Title “demons are real belive me”
   Is this supposed to be, Demons are Real, Believe me
   Not many people will go past this and even start to read the hub
   
   Many sentences throughout the text are missing capitalization and punctuation.
   Example: The first four sentences of the hub.
   
   Re-write as you edit, sometimes when we type, the mind moves faster than the fingers. And we all do it.
   As below,
   
   Excerpt
   “Also,i have discovered that what demons do to when they feel like it.”
   
   Edit
   “Also, I have discovered what demons do to YOU when they feel like it.”
   
   Other than that break up the text by re-examining paragraph usage and add some art if possible.
   
   The subject matter seems pretty good just needs tweaking, maybe even lengthening given the topic is rife for expansion.

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   SteveoMcposted 14 years ago

   Where to start?  First, do all the things that Cagsil has suggested.
   
   While you are at it, try to remember that certain words are always capitalized:  First word in a sentence, the word I, names, etc.   
   
   A period is the end of a sentence.  A sentence is a complete thought.
   
   Let us look at your 1st paragraph:
   
   i believe demons are real because what I've seen and experienced. when i was at this abandoned orphanage checking it out because my friend said it's scary. i took my camera to take pictures and there was supposed to be a white flash of light but instead a black light flashed from my camera. by that point i was very scared so i made my way to the door. But when i got to it there was this silhouette of a man blocking the door. then it rushed towards me and i shut my eyes.then i ran out of the place scared as hell. not knowing if what i just saw was real but then after that i become demonology obsessed. i stared researching demons and i found out just about everything there is about demon. how they act where they live. and in all of my research still hardly anyone still knows what a demon is. some describe demons as malevolent spirit some as fallen angels some even say a evil or wicked person.
   
   Here are minor changes that make all the difference:
   
   
   I believe demons are real because of what I've seen and experienced.
   
   I was at this abandoned orphanage checking it out because my friend said it was scary. I took my camera to take pictures and there was supposed to be a white flash of light but instead a black light flashed from my camera. By that point I was very scared so I made my way to the door. But when i got to it, there was this silhouette of a man blocking the door. It rushed towards me and I shut my eyes. Then I ran out of the place scared as hell. I did not know if what I just saw was real. After that I became demonology obsessed.
   
   I started researching demons and I found out just about everything there is about demons. I learned how they act and where they live. In my research I discovered that hardly anyone knows what a demon is. Some describe demons as malevolent spirits, some as fallen angels, and some even say a that demons are evil or wicked persons.
   
   Although the text is somewhat juvenile, just making minor changes makes the read much easier and even more believable. 
   
   The tone of the piece changes considerably when you clean it up.

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      Diane Insideposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      You guys are so cool to do this for her, and you hit the nail right on the head,  with all your suggestions.

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         lust makerposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         actually im a guy

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   saleheensblogposted 14 years ago

   nothing left to suggest only can say best of luck

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