My first product review here on HP - Need critics

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   lobobrandonposted 12 years ago

   Hi fellow hubbers, this is my first product review here on Hub Pages and I need both constructive and destructive critics to let me know how it is
   Looking forward to your views. In case the link is blocked the review is Zenni optical review can be found on my profile.
   http://lobobrandon.hubpages.com/hub/Zen … cal-review
   Thanks in advance
   Will be back in the morning tomorrow its 00:04am at present

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   MikeNVposted 12 years ago

   It's not really a review when you don't own it and express your own experiences with the product.
   
   It's more like a "Hear is what other people say about this".
   
   There was nothing compelling in the article that made me want to own the product.
   
   Anyone can list features, it's BENEFITS and EXPERIENCE that sell.
   
   For example.  I have a hub I wrote about KRK Rokit Speakers and using them for a computer.  It was easy to write because I own them.  I have had a lot of comments about the article because people want to know how to connect them and what will or will not work.
   
   I'm not saying you have to own or buy everything you review, but if you have no real world experience with a product then people are not going to believe what you say about it.
   
   If I were writing about Glasses... I'd write about Sunglasses because I own so many.  I could tell you why I like or dislike a particular lens or shade or frame... and if you were interested in sunglasses you would want to read more.
   
   A Feature is this:  Spring Frame
   
   A Benefit is this:  Because of the spring frame less pressure is put on the area above my ears, however the glasses still fit snugly and do not fall off. This is the thing I like the Best about this pair of sunglasses.

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   Uninvited Writerposted 12 years ago

   In my opinion you overuse the keyword. I would even say it is keyword stuffed.

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      Sally's Troveposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      True, but that stuffing did get a large AdSense Zenni ad displayed with the text, although below the fold.
      
      In terms of layout, move that sunglasses photo further down in your text so that the huge Zenni ad pops up where your text begins. It would be a good idea to credit that sunglasses photo, too.
      
      The Amazon ads have nothing to do with Zenni, far as I can tell. So not only are they a distraction, they are also screaming that you wrote this article only to sell something eye-related through Amazon.
      
      From my perspective as a reader who will be wearing prescription eyeglasses very soon, I want to know about ordering glasses online (pros and cons) and why Zenni is a good choice. If you tell me that, I guarantee I'm going to click on that Zenni AdSense ad.
      
      You gave a lot of good information, but you didn't address a reader's motivation.

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         lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         Ok thanks for the feedback. Will improvise on it now.

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         lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Sally, I got this pic from morguefile. There's no need of attribution.

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            MelissaBarrettposted 12 years agoin reply to this

            I get lots of pics from there... It's not required to attribute but I usually do.  Often the photographers like to get emails telling them where you use the photos.  I drop them an email sometimes just for politeness or if I like the pictures a lot.  I've gotten a couple of backlinks from their personal blogs that way (which I wasn't expecting) and a couple of facebook reposts... Plus they seem genuinely pleased to be credited.  They are just like us, trying to carve out a living (or at least a paying hobby)

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               lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

               Oh Good point. I'll attribute all my hub pics later today then

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               Sally's Troveposted 12 years agoin reply to this

               What she said.

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                  lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

                  Haha
                  I'm busy with an elance project when I get the time I have to do some major makeovers on some of my hubs

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