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A Short Story - Perchance to Dream

Updated on September 12, 2015

Perchance to Dream


As he quietly watched her sleep, her slow breathing was suddenly punctuated by a tiny, feminine snore, something that had always amused him. On the north wall was her computer desk, with its tiny blinking lights. He had often wondered why electronic manufacturers included so many colored lights, even when their equipment is off. Maybe they just liked lights.

It was the same computer she had used to communicate with him while he did his tour in Afghanistan. It had a video camera built into the monitor, and he had been thrilled to see her face and that of the children all the way from his base. Her parents bought it for her when they learned about it, and without her asking. She was always too proud to ask, but her brother had let them know. She treasured it like a fine piece of furniture, and she was now using it to write. She had sold two articles to magazines, and her new enthusiasm made him smile. She needed that sort of thing, and badly.

Her red-gold hair fanned out over the pillow, while a stray, curled lock lay on her damp forehead. She had always perspired slightly as she slept, a trait she thought unfeminine. But there was nothing unfeminine about his Mary Jo.

He rose and walked down the hall to check on the children. He entered Jimmy’s room first, and his son was wrapped around Snuggles, his ragged and heavily patched teddy bear. At seven, he was on the borderline of deciding when to give up Snuggles and move up a notch in boyhood. But that could wait for later; there was no rush.

On the dresser was a model of an F-15 Eagle, the fighter his father had flown in Afghanistan, complete with the correct numbers and his father’s name in tiny letters. He smiled at that. He had wondered why Mary Jo had wanted to know those little details.

Mary was curled up at the foot of the bed again, but she was warmly dressed in her fuzzy, pink pajamas with feet, so it didn’t really matter. She had her mother’s red-gold hair, but it was curly, like his own. Her tiny lips were slightly parted, and a thin line of drool ran down her cheek and pooled on the sheets. She would be starting school in the fall. Where did the time go?

He glanced at the kitchen clock. Time to go, so he walked back to the master bedroom and stood over Mary Jo, watching her for one more, long sweet moment. Then he bent over and brushed her forehead with his lips. “See you tonight, my love,“ he whispered. For a moment, he thought he saw a faint smile cross her lips, and then he turned, padded down the hall, and out the door.

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He stood silently with the others, rigidly at attention for the morning raising of the colors. Johnson was on his left as always, and Davis stood silently to his right. They watched as flag was raised to the top, and then lowered to half mast. The line saluted in perfect unison, as always, and then he felt himself passing through the green grass, sand and pebbles as he settled into the restful quiet of his military issue coffin.

“Tomorrow,’ he told himself, “will be another night.”

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      Brenda Barnes 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      Dang it WillStarr. Now you made me cry and I had just done my makeup to go out. What a beautiful story and sadly beautiful families like that are left alone to grieve and try to rebuild. You wrote a lovely story.

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Will, this is five star. Beautiful.

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      Nan Mynatt 5 years ago

      Beautiful tribute to a gone soldier. I marked you up on this one. So many people are suffering the loss of their loved ones. I know that we all hate war, and for what we don't know. You put a lot into the climatic goodby. Sad but true!

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      So sad... but yet so beautifully written.

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      Old Poolman 5 years ago

      WillStarr, this was a beautiful, if sad story. I'm know many feel the pain of their loss of a loved one daily. You sure did this one if fine style.

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      marellen 5 years ago

      How beautiful Will. How sad and what so many families are or have gone through.

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      pedrn44 5 years ago from New Berlin Wisconsin

      Very beautifully written...sad :( but so true for many families. Thanks so much for sharing this moving story.

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      writer20 5 years ago

      Great writing Will, you had me hanging on to the sad end

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      drbj and sherry 5 years ago from south Florida

      Beautiful ... sad ... and unfortunately, true to life.

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      John MacNab 5 years ago from the banks of the St. Lawrence

      Stunning, WillStarr - absolutely stunning.

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      Becky Katz 5 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      So beautiful and so sad.

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      A very sad reality. Beautifully told.

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      Martie Coetser 5 years ago from South Africa

      Captivating! So sad. A+ and awesome.

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      Gail Sobotkin 5 years ago from South Carolina

      Oh my, this gave me chills. Absolutely heartbreaking. Your attention to detail, every loving gesture and thought of the main character is exquisite and so real that I felt like I was inside his head. Who among us hasn't felt an outpouring of love as we gazed upon a sleeping spouse or child?

      And to know that there are so many military families who have experienced the ultimate sacrifice is truly haunting.

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      FitnezzJim 5 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

      This was so too vivid and real, it gave me goosebumps and chills.

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      Dexter Yarbrough 5 years ago from United States

      Will, you certainly have the talent to provoke extreme emotions - even in men. Voted up, up and away - and standing at attention.

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      applejack2 5 years ago

      Very good Will, as always i enjoyed your writing. just wish i was as good.

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      breakfastpop 5 years ago

      This unbelievable piece will stay with me forever. So sad and so moving. Up and beautiful and awesome.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Hyphenbird,

      My father-in-law rests in the National Memorial Cemetery here in Phoenix, where the flag is always at half-mast.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, mckbirdbks, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Nan Mynatt. Are they still with us, in spirit? Someday we will all know. Or not.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Just Ask Susan, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Mike.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, marellen.

      The sacrifice is paid by many.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, marellen.

      The sacrifice is paid by many.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, pedrn44, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, writer20. Thank you for reading.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, drbj. Thank you for commenting.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, John MacNab, and thanks for dropping by.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Becky Katz,

      Fathers and husbands like to watch their loved ones sleeping.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Sueswan, and thank you as always.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, MartieCoetser, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Happyboomernurse, and thank you for your splendid comments.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, FitnezzJim, and thank you for reading.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Dex, and good to see you, my friend.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, applejack2, and thank you for the kind words.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Very impressive WillStarr!! Thank you for sharing!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, breakfastpop, and thank you for all you do in the cause of freedom.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Sunshine625. Thank you, but the truly impressive ones are those who serve.

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      Clairepeek 5 years ago

      Hi Will,

      This was an amazing read from start to finish. You have such a particular style that says more by saying less. You take the reader and put - in this case - her in the shoes of your character. From the first words I felt the atmosphere, the languor and love of that man for his family. The observation of every details... I agree with Mike, 5 stars rating... I was looking for the button "amazing" but did not find it. Thank you for this, it was a wonderful read.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      The ones who serve are beyond impressive, they are truly phenomenal. Bless them all.

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      50 Caliber 5 years ago from Arizona

      Will, a most excellent writing honoring the fallen and the families that remain. Sad but somehow, fulfilling. Voted up, as a fine hub and thoughtful as tomorrow is 11/11/11, ten years have passed seemingly too fast for me,

      Blessings,

      Dusty

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      diogenes 5 years ago from UK and Mexico

      You did it again, Wlll, just like "Ghost" On a more prosaic note, I have always wondered if there is some world-wide consipiracy at work by utility companies to ensure all electronic appliance manufacturers include lots of warning lights on the products. Must use a fortune in wasted power...Bob

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      Oh No! You had me there for a while! He went to his own funeral, I can't believe it! You are so talented, I just love the gentle sway and build up with the mystery.

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      Pamela Oglesby 5 years ago from United States

      Beautifully, touching sad story that will haunt me for a while. Beautifully written.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Clairepeek, and thank you for your kind words.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Sunshine625, and I agree.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Dusty,

      Yes, I had 9-11 in mind when I wrote it.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, diogenes,

      We have a few electronic devices in our bedroom, and my wife covers up all the LED's because she like to sleep in a dark room.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Cardisa, and thanks for reading.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Pamela99, for your kind words.

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      SusieQ42 5 years ago

      I was hoping this story wasn't going to have a sad ending...now look what you gone and did! Shame!!! This is sad, and now that my youngest son is going in the Marines I'm really not liking it! But I love ya anyways. Susieq

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, SusieQ42,

      We'll be praying for your son's safe return, and we thank him for his service.

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      Merle Ann Johnson 5 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

      So different from your usual Western, but very well done, and a reminder to all "Ten Years have gotten behind you, no one told you when to to run, you missed the starting gun"...something like that in a song...

      May God Bless us all and all the brave ones's gone ahead of us...:O(

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, G-Ma Johnson.

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ....always a pleasure Sir Will - you are the quintessential writer's writer here in residence at the Hub!

      lake erie time 10:58pm ontario canada

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Epi.

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      Ghost32 5 years ago

      Beautifully done, Will. I actually picked up on this one while Hub hopping, nearly went on past--then noticed the author's name.

      "Oh,okay," I thought. "If Will wrote this, it'll be worth reading."

      It was.

      Voted Up and all but Funny. Though I suppose for those who think Death is real, the joke is on them.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Fred,

      It's my 9-11 contribution.

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      James W. Nelson 5 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      OMG, Will, your writing ability! I started feeling tears long before the end because I somehow expected it, so at the end there was no stopping them. Thank you, sir, for so honoring our military.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, SubRon7.

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      A real tearjerker, beautifully written.

      Thank you Will.

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      Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Ohhh…Will ; you got me, as you always do. Not only through the story but in the final moments that stir the heart, the imagination and take us there with your characters as if we were seeing, watching and feeling within them. Beautiful story and heart-rending tribute. Up, awesome, and much more.

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      Beth Perry 5 years ago from Tennesee

      WillStar, what a beautiful story! I love your reads.

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      O Wow Will. The story was just starting to really begin and then...Sir, you remind me of those great short story writers on the Alfred Hitchcock compilations. What a writing talent you are. Beautiful. Not spooky at all; but you write about the neighborhood very well.

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      Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Almost forgot...I also liked the Hamlet reference "...perchance to dream."

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Movie Master,

      It was a reflection on today and how much it has cost us.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Genna East,

      Here is a father and husband whose only contact with his loved ones is while they sleep...and dream.

      Or is it his dream while he sleeps...forever?

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Alastar Packer,

      Thank you for the kind words.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Beth,

      I take that as a lovely compliment, coming from such a fine author.

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      This really makes you think Will. Well written also, as all your short stories are. You should be somewhere writing and being published. You certainly have a talent Mr. Will. Til next time.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, thelyricwriter, and thank you for your kind words.

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      writeronline 5 years ago

      Great job as usual, Will.

      As others have said, the 9/11 context means the ending is almost anticipated from the start. But rather than lessening the power of the resolve, understanding early on the exquisite sadness of the story, based as it is in tragic reality for so many families, makes the end, when it comes, even more powerful. Like the crescendo in a stirring piece of orchestral music. Or the mournful Last Post by a solitary bugler.

      I didn't cry, but I didn't escape untouched either.

      A very powerful piece, one of your best, imho.

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      Let 5 years ago

      Hi Will! that was beautifully written! u had me from the beginning to the end. i vivid description indeed. you made me sad.

      Keep up the good work.

      Love lots.. LET

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      Annette Donaldson 5 years ago from Northern Ireland

      Will I love this side of your talent. You are a very gifted writer and I have admired you from afar for such a long time. You teach me so much Will, this is an awesome hub my dear friend. I always glad to follow where you lead. x

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      attemptedhumour 5 years ago from Australia

      You really do have a talent for intrigue Will. It's a sad story that affects so many families. I heard today that over six thousand US service men or women have died in Iraq and Afghanistan, plus many from other nations too. If only the world could find a better way to tackle these disputes. Cheers

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, writeronline, and thank you for the thoughtful comment.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, LET, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Annette, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, attemptedhumour,

      I'm afraid that man isn't made that way. There will always be tyrants willing to use force to dominate, and they will always triumph if we are not willing to rise up against them.

      The US was at peace on 9-11.

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      Rosie Rose 5 years ago from Toronto, Canada

      OMG Will, this almost made me cry.. so touching. My heart feels very heavy, so maybe I'll go cry. As always, you are awesome, fabulously awesome.

      Have a nice day,

      Rosie

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      PenMePretty 5 years ago from Franklin

      What a heart felt story. I am so sentimental...I could cry me a river. Only you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Rosie,

      We miss seeing your cheerful face around here.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, PenMePretty, and thank you.

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      Christina Lornemark 5 years ago from Sweden

      This hub was fantastic as usual but yet different! Although I loved the way you wrote this with every feeling described, it was almost too sad. I know it will stay in my mind for a long time. Great story as always!

      Tina

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, thougtforce,

      Some things are sad, and we must accept them, no matter how painful they may be.

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      b. Malin 5 years ago

      Oh Will, how Beautiful and Sad, and Poignant...You handled this delicate subject of death so well...for the families and loved ones left behind. Thanks for sharing such a tender one. Voted UP my Friend.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, b. Malin, and thank you, dear.

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      Hear Me 5 years ago from Somewhere in Florida

      As sad as this is I found it comforting in an way. To me, there is a sense of comfort knowing that our departed loved ones are still with us and watching over us. You told this story in a beautiful and very touching way.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hello, Hear Me, and thank you.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      This poem sank so deep into my heart I can offer only one word 'Exquisite'

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      rockdresses 5 years ago from Turkey

      Tomorrow will be another night. I like this word!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Rosemay50.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, rockdresses, and thank you.

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      Truckstop Sally 5 years ago

      I agree with your previous followers. Beautiful . . . heartfelt . . . powerful . . . Now, to dream.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Truckstop Sally, and thank you.

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      Pollyannalana 5 years ago from US

      Wow, so unexpected...very good.

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      femmeflashpoint 5 years ago

      Awww Will .... you touched a nerve. I've attended more military services than I can remember, and each time I work one, I feel so deeply privileged to help with something that's always so terribly sad.

      I've been accused of showing favor to the military families, and to an extent that might be a bit true, because, they are 'my own'. However, I feel compassion and a desire to help for all families who've lost a loved one and are in my care.

      But, for our veterans, young and old, currently in action and former, there is a place in my heart that only they can reach.

      It is a sad, sad story, and yet .... beautiful. Thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Pollyannalana, and thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, femmeflashpoint, and thank you for the great comment.

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      Chris Merritt 5 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

      What amazes me is that how you can take 500 words and make such a masterpiece. You did so much with so few words....beautiful stuff.

      You continue to show your brilliance....

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you very much, CMerritt.

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      suziecat7 5 years ago from Asheville, NC

      I finally have gotten around to reading this. Just heart-wrenching and beautiful. Certainly worth the wait. Thank you so much for honoring our heroes.

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      Diana Owens 5 years ago from My Little Hole In The Wall, HubPages, USA

      Hey Mr Bill,

      I'm speechless. Yea, hard to believe, I know. I didn't anticipate the ending. You made me cry, cowboy. *sniff*

      Brilliant piece. Just brilliant.

      Voted Up, U, A & B

      Much love and many hugs, darlin',

      Diana

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, Diana, and thank you.

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      Barbara Bethard 5 years ago from Tucson, Az

      dadgumit Will I already cried once tonight and here I really am bawlin' !!

      but oh my what a wordsmith you are and what a wonderful teacher!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Barb. Good to see you.

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      Julianna 5 years ago from SomeWhere Out There

      What a touching story. Your characters are so colorful and you bring each one of them to life. What a wonderful short story. :)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, AEvans.

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      Barbara 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      A lovely portrait. Thank you.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Barb.

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      september girl 5 years ago

      Beautiful story WillStarr. I didn't expect the ending. Made me want to cry. Voted up and awesome!! :)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, september girl!

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      quester.ltd 5 years ago

      too many families with a parent visiting only in spirit - thanks you for remembering.

      q

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hello, quester.ltd, and thank you!

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      Maria Jordan 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Will,

      This made me feel reverent and peaceful that our loved ones do watch over us. Such a touching and comforting tale that brought rears to my eyes, beautiful.

      Voted UP & AB-- have a good weekend, mar.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, marcoujor, and thank you.

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      Kelly Umphenour 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      WillStarr - this was nothing less than brilliant. This is one to be book marked. It is beautiful and beautifully written.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, RealHousewife.

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Will- You have SUCH talent! This was amazing. Soldiers and military have a special place in my heart - this really hit me. Thank you, thank you, thank you for your beautiful words!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, LABrashear.

      Thank you for your kind comment.

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      feenix 5 years ago

      Hello, Will,

      This short story is actually a big story and thank you very much for writing and publishing it. It is a beautiful tribute to the brave ones who make the ultimate sacrifice for this great nation of ours.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      I wonder how true it might be?

      Someday, we will know.

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Will, you have some of the best endings in Literature my friend. As always, I never saw it coming. Always worth the read. Voted up.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, thelyricwriter!

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      Aka Professor M 5 years ago

      @WillStarr: This was an Outer Limits episode if I ever read one, Will! There are so many stories that sadly have ended in that fashion for families in the military these days.

      I hope that these stories will soon once again be only stories written by exception authors like yourself, my friend! Voted up and pushed all the buttons that apply here, Will! Regards Mike! (Aka Professor M!) ;D

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Mike.

      This one is special tribute.

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      quester.ltd 5 years ago

      This is a tribute to those men and women who have paid with their blood the 'line in the sand' that must be drawn from time to time.

      We need to always remember that our freedoms which are being erased as fast as DC can make them disappear were paid by our military since before this country was a country.

      Well done, Will.

      q

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, quester.ltd, and thank you.

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      Nadine M AuCoin 5 years ago from the Island of Cape Breton to the Eastern Shores near Halifax, NS

      Oh Will, you got right in there and struck the heart cords--so very touching--so meaningful--these men are missed and surely do miss. A very lovely piece!!! Dying knowing they somehow saved their loved ones--made sure they are safe and sound--that's what makes sense to all those that do fight for their countries--I can wish it never had or has to happen..

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Nadine.

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Very sad ,and wow you are indeed some writer Will.

      I am so glad to be able to read your hubs,amazing without a doubt; and I am obviously not the only to think this-lol

      I vote up up and away.!!

      Take care Will and have a great day.

      Eiddwen.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Eiddwen.

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      Bella Nina 5 years ago from USA

      Beautiful.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Bella Nina.

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      Robert Sacchi 22 months ago

      Touching story. The fantasy ending was a real surprise.

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      WillStarr 22 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Robert!

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