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Between The Sheets - poem

Updated on December 10, 2012
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Between the sheets

You

Me

Naked

Free

Skin

Scent

Touching

Breathing

Sighs


Between the sheets

Me

You

Heat

Sweat

Rolling

Writhing

Moans

Passion

Unrestrained


Between the sheets

You

Me

Deception

Lies

In

The End

Someone

Always

Cries



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      Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

      Dana,

      Wow! You've really painted a picture with your words. I would hope, however, that deception and lies were not always there, that someone didn't always cry.

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Voting up awesome! what a shame that it sometimes has to end this way.

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      Mohan Kumar 4 years ago from UK

      Oh my. Warmed my winter frosted body and soul with some sizzling wordplay. I hope the 'cries' are always of passion... great work, Dana.

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      Janine Huldie 4 years ago from New York, New York

      Wow, this one definitely left me a bit hot and bothered. Great poem Dana!!

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      Mark G Weller 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      Wow dana, this makes me want to meet you:)

      The ending happens, but hopefully only rarely. The passion and spiritual connection you share is awesome.

      Mark

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      CrisSp 4 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      Passionate yet poignant drama in between the sheet. Good one Dana!

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Nice work. The ending catches one off guard. very effective. Thank you

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Hello Daisy - I believe that deception and lies are not always there, but when they are there will always be tears. Thank you for the great comment. You are so good to me! hugs.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      lovedoctor926 - Sometimes it does, but not always. Thank you for the vote.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Docmo - I can always count on you for a great comment. Thank you so much for stopping by, I know you are incredibly busy at the moment.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Janine - wow! Thriled to hear this got you hot under the collar. Silly me thought I was writing something rather ordinary. Glad I was wrong!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Curiad - My goodnes,Mark. All that from one little poem that I just sat and wrote in one short sitting. Moments like those seem to bring out my best....

      Too bad you are on the opposite side of the country. We could arrange that meeting. For now I will be following you in HP. I thought I was already and was shocked to see I wasn't. That has been remedied. I will be seeing you around.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      CrisSp - Thank you so very much! What a compliment. And silly me thought it might be too ho hum. Truly glad you like it!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Mhatter99 - I'm honored.... I wrote the end before the middle. And as I was reading the poem I thought how mean of me to take the reader on such a journey only to end it like that. But that is where it went. AndI am glad. Who wants to be a predictable poet.

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      Michelle Liew 4 years ago from Singapore

      I agree with Daisy's comment there. You did a great job of catching the reader unawares.....and so true too, how some take love from someone, only to return it with hurt and tears. Passionate, yet filled with truth there. Sharing.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Beautifully done, Dana! Great twist at the end..... Thanks for sharing.

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      livingsta 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Wow, so beautifully written. Voted up, awesome and sharing!

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      Gypsy48 4 years ago

      Love the ending of this poem! At times quite truthful. Well done:)

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      AudraLeigh 4 years ago

      Have you ever thought of writing a screenplay...seriously?? I would love to seeyou expand on this brilliant poem! You are truly remarkable!

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      Amazing...you started out by warming us up and exciting us, then dropped us on our collective heads! Brilliant.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Bumpsysmum 4 years ago from Cambridgeshire

      One always hopes to be crying with joy or passion, sadly not always the case - well captured here.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      midget38 - Thank you, Michelle for your thoughtful comment. And thanks for the share.

      Here is simething to think about: Are the lies necessarily between the lovers in the poem? Is it one of them crying? Must they be tears of sadness? This can go so many ways, more the longer I think about it.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      La Thing -

      livingsta -

      Gypsy48 -

      Thank you for the compliments. As a writer, it means a lot to know that my work is enjoyed. And I truly appreciate you taking the time to let me know it.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Audra - First a record producer, now I should write screenplays. Wow. You sure think highly of me. Thank you! I better keep up the good work. I wouldn't want to dispappoint you!

      This really could be expanded. maybe i could work it in to the romantic series I am writing, scene by scene. At the rate I am going, it will be a novel in about ten years!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tillsontitan - thank you. The funny thing is that I really didn't plan this out. I wrote the first section, then the last, and the middle ust wrote itself. I am shocked that it has been so well received. Thank you so very much for voting.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Bumpsysmum - Sadly life sometimes includes the unhappy sort of tears. Best we can do is be sure we are not the cause of them, and to weather them with grace when they befall us... Thank you for the compliment. It is always nice to hear good words from a fellow poet.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up. Incredible poem. I agree that it seems in modern romance there is always some crying to be done.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Gypsy Rose Lee - I think whenever we open our hearts in the way we should if it is true love, we open them up to hurt. Hopefully we make it past the tears of sandess and cry tears of joy... I appreciate the comment and the vote.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      So much happens between the sheets, birth, death, love, passion, deceit, pleasure, pain. You've brought them all together beautifully in this clever poem. Great work.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Dana such passion and beauty mixed and then heart break.. Oh my you described life wonderful..

      many blessing'

      voted up and sharing'

      Debbie

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      Live To Write 4 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      You really put some heart (your heart , it seems ) into this poem, and rather or not we feel it now or later... we all feel this this joy/pain passion as some point...

      Beautiful my friend

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tobusiness - wow. What a wonderfully insightful comment. You are right. we live so much of our lives between the sheets. I love sheets. Maybe that is why.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Deborah - Hello sweet friend. Thank you so very much for sharing. I hope some others enjoy this as much as you did.... Wishes of happiness and warmth for you.,

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Laurinzo - Yes, if it is a life well lived, all of these things will be a part of it. They have been a part of mine, of those I love. My heart is in this 100%. I am glad I could share it with you.

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      Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain

      Beautiful words, gently laid on the page.. Well done., so beautifully well done.

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      Boo hoo..

      sad..

      don't like crying..

      like happy..

      and horny..

      and YOU!

      very well done, Dana...original...voting up/across and paying it forward..

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      Nell Rose 4 years ago from England

      So cynical but oh so true! lol! loved the poem Dana, and yes it does end like that most times!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Dim Flaxenwick - what a beautiful comment. thank you so very much!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Leslie - No one likes to cry sad tears. But those of happiness, of joy, those are good ones.... I am a big fan of happy and horny too! And of yours. You know I enjoy your works, I am pleased that I could return with something you enjoyed as well.... Thanks a million for voting and sharing. A thumbs up from you always brings a smile to my face.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Thanks for checking in NELL. Most times? I hope not! But it does happen. C'est la vie!

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      Live To Write 4 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      I remembered this one and had to share it again...absolutely beautiful Dana!!!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Laurinzo - thank you for the repeat visit and share. it means so much that you like it enough to do that.... i am well over due to write sometthing new. when i do, i will let you know.

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Really good poetry here! Glad to read it.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      xstatoc - thank you so much for this comment. i know the feeling when i am glad i have read something, and i know the feeling when i am not.... i am so very pleased and honored.that you liked this that much...... this was inpsired by feelings i had penned up inside. writing them down was a cathartic experience. some of my best work is born that way.... thanks again!

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hot and sultry.... just like the each word here...

      Awesome writing :)

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      Paula 4 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Between you and me Dana....I read Between the lines......and I'm now Between Dreams and Reality.....Excellent! and a bit steamy....UP+++

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      rahul0324 - My sweet angel, should you be reading "hot and sultry" fare? Of course you should!!!

      thank you very much xxxx :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      fpherj48 - hello Paula! Glad you like this. It was inspired by something I was going through at the time. Writing it turned out to be theraputic AND as far as I can tell from comments, a pretty darn good poem :)

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      ExoticHippieQueen 4 years ago

      Hi DanTeresa! Thought I would stop by and read one of your works. This poem sizzles and twists, like a hot pretzel. I will be back to read more!

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      All the comonents and ingredients here for a wonderful, exciting adventure under and over the sheets. I love every descriptive word you used except crying at the end of it all. I would like to think after such a connection, two people would be happy and not crying, however maybe you ment crying with joy. LoL Lovely poem, voted up tweeted and shared.

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Brilliant! Voted up awesome!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      ExoticHippieQueen - Thank you so much for stopping by! I am glad you like what you found. Hopefully you will enjoy more of my work. It always thirills me to know I am creating things that others are enjoying.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Vincent - I know what you mean. It would be lovely if the wondeful excitement always lasted. I wrote this from a place of bitterness, because sometimes things sneak in between that turn things the other way. Love is not always happily ever after, but that is no reason not to hope it will be... Thanks a million for sharing this one.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      lovedoctor926 - Thank you!

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      Martie Coetser 4 years ago from South Africa

      Excellent choice of words! The fact that someone always cries at the end, if not at an open grave in a divorce coart, is the reason why time spend between sheets should be enjoyed and appreciated....

      We have a folk song, directly translated: "Your blanket and my matrass - and there lies the thing......"

      Voted up and hot :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      MartieCoetser - I love your take on my poem. Yes, it is important to enjoy those moments. Thank you for sharing the folk song lyrics. Always great to learn new things. Appreciate the votes too :)

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