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Breathe - A Tritina Poem

Updated on April 28, 2017
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Breathe


I plant my feet and take a deep breath

I tell my brain to be quiet

Raising my arms, I salute the sun


I lift my heart to the sun

Filling my lungs with breath

In and out, my mind quiets


I am centered in the quiet

Inhaling and exhaling, I reach to the sun

Hearing only the sound of my breath


Breath slow and quiet, I give thanks to the sun.


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How to Write a Tritina Poem

With just 10 lines, the tritina is a less complicated version of the more well-known and challenging sestina. For those new to poetry and seeking to experiment with different forms, the tritina provides a simple yet elegant structure for a creative exercise.

The tritina consists of three tercets (three-line stanzas) and a concluding line. Each tercet uses the same three end words, one for each line. The end words are used in a different order in each tercet following a recurrent pattern. The closing line contains all three words.

The pattern, known as a lexical repetition, is as follows (the numbers represent the three end words):

1

2

3


3

1

2


2

3

1


1 2 3

There is no rhyming scheme and the lines may be of any length, as long as they follow the lexical pattern. The end words may be varied slightly, as in changing the tense of a verb or making a noun plural.

To write a trintina, choose the three end words first. Concrete nouns and active verbs work best. Then write out the end words for each of the three stanzas, following the pattern set out above. Build out each line and tercet as you tell the story your chosen words evoke. Finally, capture each end word in the concluding line.


Additional Reading

For another example of the tritina form and a truly beautiful poem, you will enjoy reading Embracing the creative wonder of solitude:an inspirational tritina poem by midget38.

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      Deborah Neyens 3 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you, Vellur. I appreciate you reading and commenting.

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      Nithya Venkat 3 years ago from Dubai

      Beautiful poem and clearly explained. Voted up.

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Kim. Welcome to Hubpages!

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      As one who must remind herself to breathe, I especially enjoyed your poem. Voted up. Kim

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Peggy. Glad I could teach you something new. I appreciate the lovely comment and the votes.

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      Peggy Woods 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

      I had never heard of this type of poetry but now thanks to you I have had a most beautiful introduction. I liked your thoughts as well as your beautiful photos. Thanks! Up, useful and interesting votes.

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks for the comments, cclitgirl, midget and Angelo. I'm glad you enjoyed the explanation. It's a fun exercise to write a tritina.

      Midget, thanks again for sharing and linking.

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      Angelo52 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Very nice. Enjoyed the reading very much. The explanation on how to make your tritina poem is also very useful.

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      Michelle Liew 4 years ago from Singapore

      Deb, thanks for the linkup!! A fantastic poem I'm sharing again.

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      Cynthia Sageleaf 4 years ago from Western NC

      I absolutely loved the poem, but I also loved the explanation for a tritina that you gave - I want to get into writing poetry and have no idea where to start and this gives me some great information. Plus, the fact that you include what a tritina gives it even more meaning for me. :)

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Denise. Please do give it a try. It's a great way to challenge yourself as a writer.

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Michelle, thank you so much for the nice comment. And thank you for linking to my poem from yours. I've added a link back to your poem.

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      Deborah Neyens 4 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks for reading and commenting, rasta. Glad you enjoyed it.

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      Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Deb-this is beautiful and interesting. I've never heard of this type of poetry and followed Michele's poem to yours. It is something I'm interested in trying...a nice challenge. Your poem is lovely. Thanks for the explanation in this article. UP/A/U/I/B and shared.

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      Michelle Liew 4 years ago from Singapore

      Deb, I love this, and so need to read it this morning! I feel the peaceful vibes within. Thanks for sharing and making my morning so much better with this. Sharing!

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      Marvin Parke 4 years ago from Jamaica

      Thanks for the lesson. I really enjoyed the poem too.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks to you both, imaudraleigh and ignugent17. I hope I have inspired you to try your hand at a tritina. It's a fun exercise.

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      ignugent17 5 years ago

      This is very refreshing and I love the pictures too. Thanks DeborahNeyens for the information I might try to write a tritina.

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      iamaudraleigh 5 years ago

      I have never written a a tritina ...hmmm

      You did a nice job of writing one while incorporating such pretty pictures!

      I like this..thank you!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you, girishpuri!

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      Girish puri 5 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      An awesome piece of poetry, voted up

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, b. Malin. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I look forward to checking out your work, too.

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      b. Malin 5 years ago

      Very Interesting form of Poetry Deborah. I've always Enjoyed learning, and Expressing myself through my Writings. I Enjoyed your Beautiful Poem, and Explanation of how it's done. It's Amazing how many Wonderful ways we have to Express ourselves.

      I now look forward to Following your Hubs.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Well, thank you, xstatic. It's nice to meet you. I'll check out your work, too.

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Wonderful poem and great explanation of the form. Saw a comment on Chris Hugh's Hub and wanted to see your work.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks so much, KD. I enjoyed my tritina experiment, but I'm not sure if I'm ready for the sestina just yet!

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      KDuBarry03 5 years ago

      beautifully and heartwarming, Deborah! Yes, you are right, the sestina is much more of a challenge, but I think a tritina can be just as challenging to convey a message. I see you had no problem there, though! Well done :) I enjoy your poetry.

      -KD

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Docmo! I appreciate the read and comment.

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      Mohan Kumar 5 years ago from UK

      Great work here Debs- beautifully chosen tierces that unravel a gentle ,natural cadence. A really mellow chanting that warms the heart. Very well done indeed. Voted up!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you both for reading and commenting, Vinaya and Jools. I enjoyed working within the structure of the tritine. It was like putting together the pieces of a puzzle with words.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Great poem Deb. I find the less complex the form, the harder it is to do -I'm too wordy :o)

      Voted up, etc.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I'm new to this poetry form. Thanks for sharing the descriptions. I loved your composition.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you, Audrey. I appreciate your support. The response to my little poem has been so positive and encouraging that I have a feeling it won't be too long before I try my hand at another one.

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      Audrey Hunt 5 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      Thanks for teaching me about the tritina form for poetry. This is beautiful and so inspiring. I completely resonated with "I am centered in the quiet

      Inhaling and exhaling, I reach to the sun

      Hearing only the sound of my breath."

      Thank you and voting up and across except for funny!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks so much, Ruchira. I can't wait to read your tritina!

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Deborah...you captured breathe well in this poem. Tritina style sounds exciting. Will give it a try!!!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you for reading and commenting, Nell, Sunshine, Susan, and fpherj48. I appreciate the votes and shares. I'm no poet, given this is the first poem I've written in probably 25 years, but I'm delighted it's been so well received. I enjoyed the creative process and will be looking for other poetry forms to explore.

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      Paula 5 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Deborah....I am always in awe of poets and the intriguing ways they use words to form phrases that tell a wonderful story...that all have profound meaning and decorate our souls. Thank you..

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      I really like this style of poetry and will have to try writing a tritina.

      Beautiful Poem!

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Way to go Deb! Thank you for the tritina lesson. I just might give this a try. One day. Awesome poem and photos!

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      Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

      Well I learn something new everyday! lol! such a simple method of poetry, and yet your poem was lovely! I will definitely have to try this, wonderful! voted up and shared! nell

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks so much, Gypsy Rose Lee. I'm glad you enjoyed it and hope you use the info for your own poem someday.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Movie Master! I'd love to see what you can do with the tritina form. And it feels great when one of the best photographers on HubPages compliments my photos. : )

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      I'm glad you stopped by Audrey. It was because of your National Poetry Month challenge that I wrote this. I said there was no way that I'd be able to write 30 poems, but I wanted to try writing at least one. And I enjoyed doing it so much that I probably will write more! Thanks for inspiring me.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Victoria Lynn. I hope you do try it some day; I'd like to read the results! : )

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, jonmcclusk. The funny thing is I wrote it one day when the power went out and I couldn't do anything with my computer so I got a pen and paper and started writing. So that's maybe where calming feeling came from, because I wasn't plugged in.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and beautiful. Great poem and thank you for much for the information. Lovely pics.

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      What a lovely poem, I am keen to try this style, thank you for explaining the structure.

      Loved the photos too!

      voted up/awesome

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Lovely feel to this! And Great use of the form!

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      Victoria Lynn 5 years ago from Arkansas, USA

      Wow! the poem is peaceful, and the photos are beautiful. I enjoyed the lesson and may have to try this type of poetry sometime!

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      Jonathan McCloskey 5 years ago from Cinnaminson, New Jersey

      This poem is inspirational and calming, a good read at the end of a a long hard day. I thank you for sharing this with us.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Christy! One of the best things about publishing this poem as a hub was being able to use some of the photos that I love.

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      Christy Birmingham 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      With a simple structure your poem tells of a powerful message - sit back and relax. Your photos are great too Deb!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Rosemay, aviannovice, and Tams. I hope I've inspired you to try writing your own tritina. It's a fun exercise.

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      Tams R 5 years ago from Missouri

      Interesting. I learn so much about different types of poetry here on HP. I'd never heard of tritina. Thank you for the educating experience and beautiful poem.

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      Deb Hirt 5 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      I was not acquainted with the tritina.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Beautiful poem and a very interesting format.

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you, braviorwarrior. I'm happy I experimented with poetry and definitely will write more!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks, Curiad. Since I haven't written much poetry, it made it less intimidating to have a structure to work within. Like a sodoku with words. : )

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      Shauna L Bowling 5 years ago from Central Florida

      Curiad pretty much took the words out of my mouth! I was not aware of this type of poetry. Mine has always been non-structured and seems to just spill out of me. A first line pops into my head and it just flows from there. Sometimes I rhyme, sometimes I don't, but they usually take no more than a few minutes to write because the thoughts just seem to spew out of me! Nonetheless, this particular poem is absolutely beautiful! I say, write more!

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      Mark G Weller 5 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      Beautiful Deb! I never studied poetry and found that your description of the type of poetry and the rules interesting. When I write poetry I just write what I feel with no regard to any conventions.

      Voted Up!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thank you, Bill. I'm not much of a poet (I haven't written a poem in years), but with all the beautiful poems I've been reading here on HubPages, I wanted to give it a try. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Glad you enjoyed it!

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I will leave the beautiful poetry to you. Well done my friend; simply lovely!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks so much for the comment, Pollannalana. I wanted to write a poem for National Poetry Month and the tritina applealed to me because of its simplicity and because it provided a structure to work within. You definitely should give it a try. It's a fun creative challenge.

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      Pollyannalana 5 years ago from US

      Your first wow! I think I will try it too. I am so long winded in mine, I need to learn something about less said!

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      Deborah Neyens 5 years ago from Iowa

      Thanks so much, Debbie. I was a little nervous about publishing my first poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      what a beautiful; poem... I am so glad I found this I may try it soon

      Blessings

      Debbie