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Burning Embers

Updated on June 22, 2010

Etched into my soul

Wretched and weary

The details of that night, make me weak, make me teary

We were but children, aged neigh twenty-one

The night the dark knight had decided to come

He snorted and scowled, and pointed his bony finger

From then on the coldness continued to linger

I thought he was coming, coming for me,

I knew it then, knew it immediately

The screaching and howling, they dared not hide his fury

The burning embers they hissed, like a serpent so near

There was not a bone nor a muscle that did not quake with fear

The night was a great one, all sun no wind

How quickly it changed, how quickly we sinned

Hidden from eyesight, we were up in smoke

Eyes all bloodshot, Timmy trying not to choke

See it was his first time, the only one he had

We convinced him to stay, to take the last drag

The cut of maryjane was rough, even on those who thought they were tough

He finished the spliff and set the roach adrift

Flung from his skrawny fingers, the entire cabin he had lit

Aflame in a second, the thundering sound

of an oil drum or gas tank, an explosion abound

The burning embers they scared us, they sent us in flight

I remember the fury, and screach of the dark knight

Timmy he lay flat on his back, we all knew we wouldn't be taking him back

A call to the sherriff, to parents, and priests,

The only thing I remember is the heart wrenching grief

For the burning embers they teased to no end

What signaled the symbol of the death of a friend.



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    • Enigmatic Me profile imageAUTHOR

      4 years ago from East Coast Canada


      Much appreciated, I liked your running article. Well done!!

    • Larael profile image


      4 years ago

      I'm very intrigued by this poem. I enjoyed the journey it took me on. Well done Enigmatic! Thank you for sharing. :)

    • D.Juris Stetser profile image

      D.Juris Stetser 

      5 years ago from South Dakota

      D.J.'s fine, and just 'Dotti' is even better...hope your Monday is everything But 'Blue' !

    • Enigmatic Me profile imageAUTHOR

      5 years ago from East Coast Canada

      Thanks again D.J. (hope that's not too informal).

    • D.Juris Stetser profile image

      D.Juris Stetser 

      5 years ago from South Dakota

      This is so powerful, and full of genuine emotion, not only are you a skilled poet but a master story-teller at one and the same time. Thank you for sharing this 'experience'. I felt every second....

    • Deborah Brooks profile image

      Deborah Brooks Langford 

      5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Well when a poet can make you cry and feel like you have done then that is the means of a great poet. and sir you are a great poet.

      have A wonderful day


    • Enigmatic Me profile imageAUTHOR

      5 years ago from East Coast Canada

      Thank you Deborah doe your kind words. I must, however, admit, this is a fictional poem. One I never experienced. I know of many a tragic tale of squandered youth, so this fits the genre, but, I know of no one who had this fate.

    • Deborah Brooks profile image

      Deborah Brooks Langford 

      5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      this is so sad but beautiful.. I am crying for your dead friend... the things we do when we are young.. the regrets are so many. I love your poem.. voted up and awesome and sharing


    • Enigmatic Me profile imageAUTHOR

      5 years ago from East Coast Canada

      I've been slack.

      blaise25 as always, thanks for commenting. This is not a true recounting. I often write from a fictional place, one that goes places I have never been. But in the process I 'feel' the emotions connecting me to the words.

      BenWritings: It means a lot you thought so much of this. From one writer to another, thanks.

      thepinkumbrella: I'm really glad you enjoyed.

      To all: I will have more coming in the very near future. Much of it previously written by hand and kept in dust cover notebooks, but will have a different life on the net.... please be patient ;)

    • the pink umbrella profile image

      the pink umbrella 

      7 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

      this impressed me. ill be back for sure.

    • BenWritings profile image


      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      that's pretty amazing, in emotion, storytelling, and impact.

      very nice, i'll make sure I read more, thanks for your comments


    • blaise25 profile image

      Fehl Dungo 

      7 years ago from close to you...

      A very sad memory so hard to forget..Reading it, cuts me inside. You have the enigma and that is so beautiful. :)

    • Enigmatic Me profile imageAUTHOR

      8 years ago from East Coast Canada

      thanks prasetio30... feel free to read more and comment!

    • prasetio30 profile image


      8 years ago from malang-indonesia

      Beautiful poem. I liked it very much. Thanks for share.


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