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Ed:Gone to see the Elephant, a Carbons Creek story

Updated on April 6, 2015

Ed Meets Bridget

Your knowin’ it’s a long time since Pa and I had seen each other. We spent some time swappin’ lies before I headed back to Carbons Creek. We said our goodbyes at the railroad station. I had left me horse at the livery in Galestown where there is a rail connection.

In a few days I can be back to mindin’ me own business in more ways than one. So I gets on the train and wave goodbye to Pa.

And don’t you know, I’m jus’ walking down the aisle of the passenger car and see a most stunning Colleen. And she be sitttin’ there by herself and with nobody else. She had reddish brown hair that fell out from under the tan hat she wore. I would bet she had brown eyes too. I sat me self down opposite her, hopin’ she wouldn’t find it too forward of me.

“Pardon, miss,” I says. I was hopin’ she was a miss, not a Mrs. Herself had been looking out the window and was unaware of me joining her. She was a bit startled when I spoke. Then her face flushed showing a bit of embarrassment. I thought the freckles on her face made her even more attractive.

‘Sorry, I am. I didna’ see you there.’

“Tis but me own fault,” says I. “But I was taken by your beauty and felt I must get to know such a fair lass as yourself,” I says. Blessed if she doesn’t blush more,

“And may I be getting’ your name sir?”

“Me name is Ed. Ed Stock,” I tells her.

“Ah,” she says,” That has the sound of the English. And you with so much of the blarney about you. It cannot be.”

“Ah, but it is lass. Me great, great grandma had the misfortune to fall in love with an Englishman, who in turn passed his name down to the rest of us. Now, may I be knowin’ the name you be called?”


“Wouldn’t you be knowing that me name is Bridget. Bridget Murphy.”

“Then you be named for the blessed St. Bridget herself. When I see’s you here I says to me self that there is something special ‘bout the lass sittin’ there. And sure enough you prove me words.”

She tells me she is headed for Galestown for to work at the hotel as a maid. It lifted my heart knowing that she would be so close to Carbons Creek. It being time for lunch we proceeded to the dining car but were thrown off balance when the train lurched and with wheels screeching against rails, come to a halt

When I left home I said I wanted to see the elephant, but I didna’ expect to really see one, specially on the railroad tracks. When I got off the train to see what stopped the train, there she was. She was the biggest animal I have ever seen, No wonder the train had to stop. Despite her size she had a kind of charm and appeal with her big ears spread out and her trunk held high. What in the world was she doin’ here? Two men and a woman were trying to entice the animal away from the track. To see if I could help any I went to talk to them. She was, in fact, an elephant belonging to a traveling circus that was heading to Galestown. The elephant’s name was Lulu. Her handlers were not sure why, but when she saw the train coming decided to sit down and wait for it. Might be the trains had good memories for her. The only thing Lulu really hated according to her circus handlers is guns. I seems that irresponsible hunters had killed her mother. She was found half starved and gets very hyper at the sight or sound of guns.

It is laterI learned for sure that they were with a circus, but who else would have an elephant out there? As soon as they were clear of the track the engineer gotthings going again. The circus people and the elephant named Lulu moved pretty much alongside us. The young lady trainer was riding on the elephant. I later saw how the elephant lifted her up with its trunk. Yet, they couldna’ keep up. Bridget could not keep her eyes of the elephant and the circus wagons. We did learn that the circus was on its way to Galestown. Bridget was thrilled with the idea of seeing the circus. We had to hustle to get back on the train as it was picking up speed.


We went to the dining car to get the lunch that we missed out on earlier. It was the ideal opportunity to ask Bridget if I might see her again and escort her to the circus when I get back to Galestown. I explained that I had business to take care of in Carbons Creek but would return to Galestown after.

It was light of heart I was, knowin’ I would see Bridget again in a few days. That is until I gets back to Carbons Creek. There’d been trouble brewin’ there. I dearly wish no reporters or book writers had ever heard of me. Seems that every young gun thinks they can get famous it they shoot me. I tell you after a couple of them it gets tiresome. These young rowdies’s plumb wear a man out. I suppose if they was in the big city out east they’d join the bowery boys and fight amongst themselves. This one came to town while I was gone and started braggin’ in the saloon of which I am part owner.

I don’t want any gunfights. I don’t want to kill anybody and I definitely don’t want to be killed right after meeting such a fair lass as Bridget. I surely do not want some wet behind the ears punk to spoil me date with Bridget.

Wouldn’t you know that be just what the overgrown lad would be up to. He was not hard to spot whenever he followed me waitin his chance. He might have back shot me if he could make it look like a fair fight, but I didn’t figure him to be that smart.

I stabled me horse and rented a carriage with a driver, who took us to the circus. Bridget wanted to see the animals, especially the elephant before we went in to the big top. Out of the corner of me eye I sees the kid who was after me. I pushed Bridget out of the way and stood ready to defend me self. He made the mistake of getting his back to Lulu. I later found out that elephants have a great sense of smell and Lulu must have smelled the freshly oiled revolver the kid drew out. she snatched it out of his hand with her trunk and flipped it into a pile of garbage. Since he would have to get past Lulu to retrieve it he was smart enough not to try. I might have been fast enough to get a shot off and hit the kid, but I’m not as fast as Lulu.

The circus was great fun and being with such as pretty lass as Bridget made it the best circus I had ever seen. Surely glad I am I got to see the elephant.

© 2011 Don A. Hoglund


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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Good that you enjoyed it.I also appreciate the complement.

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      Nicole Canfield 6 years ago from the Ether

      Voted up and awesome, dahoglund. Really fun and entertaining piece. You cease to amaze me with your storytelling abilities!

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      I'm glad you enjoyed it.If one of the wannabe gun fighters doesn't get him, I'm sure Ed will persist in his courtship.

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      attemptedhumour 6 years ago from Australia

      Well Ed's a bit of a charmer too and we want to find out more about his new lady friend. The elephant was a colourful addition and added to the tale. Well done Don, another interesting chapter, fresh off the Carbons creek press.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      I didn't realize there were so many elephant fans around.Lulu is pretty unpredictable.Thanks for commenting.

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      Peggy Woods 6 years ago from Houston, Texas

      Good idea...that of keeping Lulu in the story for a while. Am certain that you can think of more ways to interweave her into another story.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids


      Thanks for the comment and votes.Lulu might have to stay around for awhile.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids


      The elephant seems to be the favorite so far.Thanks for your comment.

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      Dexter Yarbrough 6 years ago from United States

      Lulu is terrific! Great story! Voted up, up and away!

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      prasetio30 6 years ago from malang-indonesia

      Nice story, brother. I love elephants. Thanks for share with us. Vote up and useful. Take care!


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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      One trouble with trying to write dialect stories is my mind gets numb. Even after spell check and a manual review I miss things. even now I don't know if I caught everything.

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      Rand Zacharias 6 years ago from Kelowna, British Columbia

      Great story, dahoglund! I was sure it was going to be a Republican I should have known better. What a great use of the 'going to town to see my girl' slant.

      Let us know how your eBook attempts are working. Some editing for this piece with clean it up, my friend, sorry, yes, stickler editor, but the story is so good--it gotta be done, pardner.

      Carson's creek at the opening paragraph and just spacing, but you know, the devil's in the details--just trying to help keep the polish on the stories that you wax on for us so well.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      "see the elephant" is a western saying that sort of means finding new things. I thought I'd throw in a literal elephant. Ed is in for a long distance relationship in a day without telephones or high speed transportation.Thanks for commenting.

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      Susan Haze 6 years ago from Sunny Florida

      Lulu sounds quite loveable. I also like the bit of attraction between Ed and Bridget. Their future is left up to the imiganation. Great job. Up and awesome.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      I did put out an ebook to try out how it works. It is not the Carbons Creek stories but another western that I had written. Here is a link to it.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

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      Becky 6 years ago

      Good to see another Carbons Creek story. I have been missing them.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Glad you enjoyed it.Thanks for commenting.

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Great story! Very enjoyable.

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      Don A. Hoglund 6 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Thank you much.Even when I venture into something mildly political it usually bring out some venom. I imagine it is especially so as we near elections. Keep up the good fight.

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      TheManWithNoPants 6 years ago from Tucson, Az.

      Ahhh .. beautiful my friend. I'm in lov with Lulu .. this was a nice story. I've been dealing with a not so nice situation in the comments section of one of my hubs, and this was a nice change. Up, awesome and beautiful!