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A Story of Breaking Free (Narrative Poetry)

Updated on December 15, 2016

I'm Still Here. I'm Still Learning

I started here on hubpages after feeling like a failure at freelance. I wrote for different clients and distinct websites. Although I, at no time, received a bad review, I never moved up in order to make a living from it.

One day, I happened upon this site, and I saw that it had all unlike types of genres. It seemed like a good place to start fresh, but I didn't want to write the same-old thing. I was bored. So, I joined the creative writing genre; more specifically, the poetry part of that. I had maybe written one poem in my whole life, and I was uncertain, but determined to see how this all would play out for me.

It's been a few years now, and I wrote this poem quite a while back. Hubpages alerted me that it needed an update in order to be featured again. So, I then opened this page and discovered the hard truth of my own reality. I was bad at this. I wasn't terrible, but I was not so good.

I am certainly glad Hubpages takes the time to remove our hubs from featured spots. It helps us come back and realize our mistakes and make them better. I love that they help us grow this way.

I hope you like the upgraded version of this poem. It certainly was long, but I decided to keep it that way. Apparently, I was telling a story through poetry. By the way, I think I've gotten a little better. (winks)

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The Story of Us

Bring me to a place

of ease, where I don’t

think of you and feel

diseased.


You left me wounded

in a cold dark cave. I

huddled up, so decayed.


However, I have finally

inched my way to see

the light getting brighter,

the breeze setting me free.


No more a victim to your

slaughter. My mind found

the truth. My body is better.


I can no longer be your

whore to degrade. I loved

you; I trusted you. I am not

a slave.


Whatever happened to

you along the way; I shouldn’t

have suffered in your place.


I was present to ease your

pain. Nevertheless, you made

me to take the blame.


You failed to remember

my unconditional love.

Instead, you shut your

eyes, and turned from

us.


I truly fought hard to

make you see that you

were still you, and I was

still me.


I feel so lost without

you some days. I just

pray soon it will pass

this phase.


For one cannot love

a lost soul who refuses

to step back to life and

out of illusion.


Overcast eyes that are

under a spell.

Someday I hope to

find you again.


Maybe happy and

smiling without burden

or sin. Until then, I wish

you the best...


but for now I lay

us to rest...



© 2015 Missy Smith

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    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      19 months ago from Florida

      I relate to that, Mark Tulin. Thanks so much for stopping by to read this poem.

    • Mark Tulin profile image

      Mark Tulin 

      19 months ago from Santa Barbara, California

      I always found it hard breaking away, but when I finally did, I always asked myself, "Why didn't I do it sooner?"

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      Thank you Sherrye! Your comments mean so much to me. I think that is what a writer hopes the most for; honest, and good feedback. Thanks! :)

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      Sherrye Barrow 

      3 years ago from Duncan, AZ

      What a wonderful way to end one chapter of your life and move into the next chapter. Opening your thoughts and your heart and putting them into words, and then constructing a poem is a gift...and you are very good at it.

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      Thank you Jo. I do want to be proud of my work, and at times I feel proud, but something in me is not satisfied. However, I'm not so sure that's a bad thing. I think it just inspires me to try harder to dig deeper. I have so many thoughts in my heart and head, but I haven't quite figured out how to express them all yet. I hope I will one day. Thanks again! Your support means the world to me. :)

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      Jo_Goldsmith11 

      3 years ago

      I very much enjoy your depth of writing. You should be very proud in yourself for the amazing talent you have to write in this way.

      A Powerful and Blessed voice I hear in these words.

      Wishing you a life of Love, Joy and many Blessings! :-))

      Up= Beautiful, useful, Awesome and Interesting.

      Shared as well.

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      Kai 

      3 years ago

      interesting

    • haikutwinkle profile image

      haikutwinkle 

      3 years ago

      Thank you Missy Smith for commenting on my Hubpages.

      I often find my inspirations through nature and letting the words flow from there to all my senses. I'm always learning from new poetry styles, new vocabularies, new sensations from little things in life.

      Understand your comfort zones and take little steps outside to be inspired.

      Think of your comfort zones as having the elasticity and flexibility to expand or change.

      Have a blessed week ahead ;)

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      Thank you for reading my poems Gypsy Rose Lee. :)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 

      3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Enjoyed this. Very emotionally expressive. Nicely done.

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! :)

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      unconditional love 

      3 years ago

      Nice poem.

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      As always, Faith, thank you so much for your encouragement. It's what I love best about being on HP. I love the camaraderie shared here. It's Wonderful! :)

    • Missy Smith profile imageAUTHOR

      Missy Smith 

      3 years ago from Florida

      Hey Robin, I'm so glad you got the true meaning of this poem. I understand your whole beautiful critique, because I have lived this. As I'm sure that was evident. Thanks again!

      Hi, again Jodah, as always, I'm pleased to know you enjoy my words. And, you are right; they do spark a truth I've lived. Thank you so much!

      How are you Frank? Yes, I do indeed write from my emotions. I'm not sure I would know how to write poetry any other way. Thank you again!

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      Faith Reaper 

      3 years ago from southern USA

      Wow, Missy, you tell it! You have written a great truth here in your line ..."For one cannot love a lost soul that refuses to bring himself back from hell"

      Here' to a new Hello for you

      God bless you and keep you

      Up ++++ and away

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      Robin Grosswirth 

      3 years ago from New York

      They say through adage that death leads to a rebirth, ergo, an end to a new beginning.

      Sometimes we take on the role of absorbing abuse from others, akin to being a whipping post, being lashed verbally. Sad but true. Great piece. Voted up and beautiful!

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      John Hansen 

      3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Only someone who has loved deeply and been hurt can write this type of poem effectively and believably Missy. You are fast becoming one of my favourite poet here on Hub Pages. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 

      3 years ago from Shelton

      Missy, the words are very strong and the message clear .. you are an emotional poet.. awesome :)

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