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The Desperate Need to Be Noticed: A Flash Fiction Short Story
The Desperate Need to Be Noticed is an original example of a flash fiction short story that effectively paints an entire landscape of the life and times of the subject, within 300 words. There really are several subtle messages to be taken from this piece. These include; that we all have a need to be accepted in some way or another by others, although often today that social need is for whatever reason, not always acted upon in a manner that is predictable, or easily understood by those whom we hope will appreciate our needs and who we are, overall.
One of the primary objectives demanded within the art of writing any flash fiction, is to not only tell the story within a relatively few words, but to do so in such a manner, as to provide the reader with an interesting and thought provoking few minutes of reading enjoyment. I hope that you enjoy this piece and appreciate that though it is fiction, the issues that relate to the story are indeed very real for many and as such, it is also the hope of the author that this story helps to draw attention to that relevance and importance of those issues in life.
A Flash Fiction Short Story.
'The Desperate Need to Be Noticed'
He seemed so nice
So polite, so understanding
Each day she watched him care for others
On the train, on her way to school
Secretly wishing he would notice her
Acknowledge her presence, make eye contact
Care enough to smile and ask her
How she was on the day
Perhaps ask her name, a phone number
Or find some way to become involved in her life
He seemed to appear more and more
Silently dropping into her thoughts
As if to call out, “Surprise!!”
Then disappear again, for ever shortening periods
She trusted her best friend with her secrets
Yet for some reason chose to not mention him
Her parents would never have approved
Not that they had even noticed her feelings
Besides, she made her own decisions
Perhaps today her hopes, would be fulfilled
Her parents were devastated at the news
Initially, details had seemed almost surreal
It seemed the police didn’t know her at all
She was not that irresponsible, nor unhinged
It simply must have been a terrible accident
A train crash, a random event, beyond her control
Completely out of character, so they must be wrong
Her best friend asked if they had read her diary
She had hoped they may do so, together
Surely her reasons, would be there
He seemed so nice, so polite, understanding
He cared, though clearly was also in deep shock
They liked him the moment they met, he seemed shy
Perhaps that helped them accept the tragic reality
They listened to his softly spoken recollection of events
Hauntingly the words perfectly matched those in the diary
Entries crying out to be loved, noticed
They learned her only spoken words to him had been
“Hi, surprise!! I’ve always loved you James!”
Then she had turned,
jumping in front of the oncoming train.
_________ ♥ ________ Fin.
* Original Flash Fiction by Pearldiver *
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