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The Pearly White Gates To Heaven - Access Denied

Updated on April 29, 2012

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As the little white light came to an end, I approached the big white gate. It was very similar to a wrought iron gate outside of a castle. Ironically, the parts leading away from the gate that should have been white fence was nothing more than big puffy white clouds.

So this was it. This is what happened after life. You approached this big white gate surrounded by clouds. I walked closer to the gate, keeping my eyes open for anybody, half expecting Saint Peter to be there waiting to greet me into heaven. But there I stood; nobody was around.

As I approached the front of the gate, I saw a touch screen computer. Confused, I went to the computer to see what it was for. Upon the screen was the words, “Instructions to get into Heaven.” Below was a button instructing me to push start.

I pushed the button and the first screen popped up asking me to put in my name and then push continue. A second screen popped up asking for my former address. On the next screen it asked for my previous job. Screen after screen came up. Some asking for personal information, others asking questions about my life, such as “how many times on average do you sin in a day?”

After standing there for what seemed like 3 hours, completing page after page, I started wondering if I would ever get into heaven. But then, the final page came up. In bold letters it asked me, “Are you ready for your final rest?” I pushed yes, anticipating the big pearly white gates to open. The computer screen started processing the pages upon pages worth of questions and data that I had just entered. I was excited - heaven awaits!

Suddenly the computer stopped processing. I looked at it with complete and udder annoyance. It seemed as if it was frozen. There was no restart button like the one I had at home. What could I do? Then, a message came up and said, “DENIED!” How could I have not been accepted? What have I done wrong with my life?

I felt a sharp shock in my chest. The pain shot through my entire body. Was this what it was like to go to hell? Everything started to turn red. I can’t believe I am going to spend eternity in hell! I closed my eyes as I felt the warmth flood my body. The heat passed from my heart down to my toes and back again. My heart beat faster and faster, like it was going to explode. The rush of adrenaline filled my head and I felt dizzy and blinded all at the same time.

The clouds were spinning and the pearly white gate was getting further and further away. I reached my arms out, trying to grab something - anything - with my outstretched hands. I didn’t want to leave this beautiful place. Yet, I sank down further and further and the heat continued to engulf my entire body!

I opened my eyes back up and saw two older gentlemen and a funny looking lady standing over me.

“It looks like she is coming back to us,” said the man in the mask.

“Ma’am, you’ve been in a terrible car accident. You’ve been out for five minutes. We are now on our way to the County Hospital,” he said. “Don’t worry. We’ll take care of you.”

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      Unknown 4 years ago

      Accept Satan! Ha ha religious bastards. Your dead!!

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @JamaGenee - Ha ha - yes - I think when I first wrote this the Ipad wasn't that big yet! LOL... maybe I will have to write another tale and incorporate the iPad! LOL

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      Joanna McKenna 5 years ago from Central Oklahoma

      Funnny! But it would perhaps be more timely now if you had to give all those answers to a school-marmish angel holding an iPad. Just sayin'... hehe ;D

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @CookwareBliss - I am so glad you like my hubs! That is one of the best compliments any writer can get. And I will agree - those darn electronics always seem to malfunction - so why would this be any different! ;)

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @sgbrown - Thanks for stopping by. I am glad that you enjoyed it and the little twist at the end!

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @janikon - Glad you enjoyed this! Although I have to admit, I hope that isn't what really happens - computers have a tendency to fail on me a lot! :)

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @Seafarer Mama - That is my favorite part of the whole thing... the twist at the end. Glad your curiousity brought you here and it kept you until the end! :)

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @TheLastBabyBoomer - Mine too - for some reason the computer always seems to hate me when I am on a role!

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      @Sholland10 - Glad you enjoyed this. This was actually just a writing prompt that I did once. I loved the way it turned out so I was pretty excited to share it! :)

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      CookwareBliss 5 years ago from Winneconne, WI

      I love your hubs! Great hub and I like that you brought today's technology into your story....does not surprise me that computer would malfunction:)

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      Sheila Brown 5 years ago from Southern Oklahoma

      Great story, I really didn't expect the ending! Voted up and funny! :)

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      Stuart A Jeffery 5 years ago from Toronto, Ontario

      I really enjoyed this story, it made me laugh and I liked the twist at the end. Voted up and shared.

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      Karen A Szklany 5 years ago from New England

      Great story...and very suspenseful. It's funny, I clicked on the hub our of curiosity, but your kept me with you all the way to the end. Great description of the shock of returning to the body after an "out of body" experience. :0)

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      Deborah Turner 5 years ago from Surprise Arizona

      Loved it. That would be my luck after working all day on the computer ...

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      Susan Holland 5 years ago from Southwest Missouri

      God gives us many chances, and boy am I thankful for that. This is truly thought-provoking and makes me self-reflect. Wonderful writing! Votes and shares!

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      Stacy Harris 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      This is probably one of my favorites. I don't even remember how I came up with it... I think it was free writing, but I love this story. Glad you stopped by and brought it to my attention again! :)

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      mythicalstorm273 5 years ago

      I always enjoyed this story. Really a great twist and a very interesting idea!

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      Stacy Harris 7 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      Thanks... glad I was able to twist it enough so you didn't know what was coming :)

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      6 String Veteran 7 years ago

      Whoa...unexpected ending is an understatement.

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      Stacy Harris 7 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      This is probabaly one of my favorite things I have written... it was actually based off a writing prompt - and later I edited and cleaned it up a little. Thanks for the comment... glad you enjoyed it!

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      Lana Lu Who 7 years ago

      ...i loved this one, a lot! My mom had a similar experience when she was 16. She had open throat surgery to remove her thyroid. During surgery, they'd thought they'd lost her. She was legally dead for moments. And she dreamed an amazing dream too, minus the computers...but, was it a dream? Perhaps it wasn't!

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      Rachel Woodruff 7 years ago from Southwest Missouri

      Awesome hub, thanks for sharing.