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The Vampire Challenges

Updated on October 2, 2015

Slave Holes

The vampire sat with her for the better part of an hour, hardly speaking she actually dozed off. He was consumed with pity for the young woman. Humans who tried to help captured vampires escape were forced to work side by side with them around the clock as part of a slave trade. Some vampires would make a meal of these humans, but he did not. He respected these humans, and he would protect them.

Her eyes opened and lingered on him for a moment. Struck by his gift of strength. That made him feel even worse. He was able to continue the hard labor without the need for rest. She wasn’t as fortunate. Her body cried for rest.

He wanted to make sure she got through the night without becoming a meal, or succumbing to exhaustion. He owed her that much for trying to help him escape.

The conditions were intolerable and hostile, but he knew she wanted no part in the exploits of his kind. In the past, she had helped hundreds of vampires escape, that made her practically legendary. However, some of the older vampires did not care for what she did at all. She wasn’t a vampire, and she got no sympathy from them. They just considered her a human meal, and they were aiming to make that a reality.

She squirmed up to bring her lips closer to his ears. "Thank you," she whispered.

"Your welcome," he replied, his voice cracking at her sudden closeness.

She nodded, leaning her head back against his shoulder. It was so intimate, yet they were sitting in a slave hole.

He cleared his throat and allowed her to rest, comfortably.

"I’ll understand, if you get hungry," she said softly.

"I will not," he replied evenly.

She nodded gently, thinking about how most of her family were slaughtered by the vampires when they raided her village. The older vampires led the attack that left her alone.

The sad thing about the attack was that they killed for entertainment and not to feed. Her tiny chin quivered and her tired eyes filling with tears at the memory.

"I’m so sorry for everything that has happened," said the vampire, fumbling for something to wipe her eyes.

Suddenly there was a violent jerk. Then a hand grabbed her feet and pulled her into one of the slave holes. The vampire tried to save her, but the chains did not permit it. He couldn’t go after her. He struggled to free himself, but there was nothing he could do. He heard her screams and it echoed through his head. He failed her and he had to live with that. Shuddering in sympathy, he closed his eyes.


© 2011 Frank Atanacio


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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you scarface...:) and thank you Vin :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal


      this is very interesting story about the hunter and the prey.

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      Scarface1300 4 years ago

      451 words of brilliance... You pulled me in hook line and sinker.

      SLAVE HOLES, now this is what I call a Short Story.... Voted Up and Awesome

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks til I took a crack at it LOL ...

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      Mary Craig 5 years ago from New York

      This was really interesting and moving. I was so sure he would save her then so sorry when he did not...but not sure who I was more sorry for! Really a great short story that gets the reader right in the middle in the blink of an eye.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks rahul for visiting the slave holes :)

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      exciting... unique.... unpredictable..

      in short... simply Atanacio Stuff :)

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Senoritaa and Valley Poet for visiting my Slave holes and thank you Sunnie day for dropping by too :) bless you all

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      Sunnie Day 5 years ago

      Very exciting story Frank...can't wait to hear the next part of the story.

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      Valleypoet 5 years ago

      I guess not all vampires are willing to become vegetarians; or show any respect for those that are willing to give it a go!!....Frank this is another great short story, like ALUR I'm not really into vampires, but you made it an interesting read and left me wanting more!

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      So you are into vampires, too! Sad ending, and like all others, hoping that's not an ending.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Lathing for visiting with me and thank you too Alur.. :) bless you both

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      ALUR 5 years ago from USA

      I can't quite get into vampires, but this part of a story is intriguing enough to make me want to know more. Write, write and keep writing!

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      LaThing 5 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Chilling, and gripping story!! Fascinating .... Yes, need to continue!

      Excellent, Frank! Voting up and awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks for stopping by Poetvix :)

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      poetvix 6 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      And then... I neee to know what happens next! Awesome!