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Updated on January 19, 2013
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Playful teasing. That’s how it began. Then flirting. Like grade schoolers. The boy that pulls the girl’s hair and runs away. The girl that pushes that boy on the playground. Then high school. Him to her “Do you ever shut the F-ck up?” Her to him “Get out of here. You stink like gas. Don’t you have a truck to fix?”

She was right. He wasn’t supposed to be hanging around the office. Not unless he was working at his desk, which on rare occasion he did. Mostly he just surfed the internet for hot rods he dreamed of buying and tricked out bikes he dreamed of riding. She didn’t understand why he wasted all that time looking. He could build one ten times better if he just put his mind to it.

She didn’t want him to stay away. She didn’t mind the smell. To her it was intoxicating. Gas and exhaust. Dirt and sweat. Cigars. And him. She could feel his presence the second he stepped foot in the door. Sometimes before. She craved it like oxygen.

She knew when he was behind her without turning around. Before he even spoke. Before he tugged her hair, placed a hand softly on her head. He could tell with one look when she was having a bad day. A sleepless night. A project behind schedule. Somehow he knew his touch made her feel better, though she never said it. She didn’t want to admit she was struggling.

He could see right through her. Lately those little shows of affection did more than calm her nerves or push away her tears. They quickened her pulse. Changed her breathing. He knew. And it fed him.

A hand on her shoulder, her waist. Standing too close. Closer. Pressed against her. She tensed, surprised. He walked to his desk and sat down. “That was my cell phone.” “Good. I was disappointed”, she shot back trying her hardest to hide the change in her voice. The teenagers at play again.

“Come over here.” She walked to where he was sitting. Expecting him to need help with a purchase order or some other office item. Intelligent and talented as he was, he never graduated high school. Book learning was never his thing. He turned his chair towards her and smiled with a mischievous smile. She replied with a coy smile of her own, and by moving closer. Until his knee was just between her legs.

She stood there. Looking him straight in the eyes, daring him to make a move. He put his hand just below her knee. Moved it up under her dress. A little higher. Now to her thigh. She took a step back. “Chicken.” “Oh, really?”

She moved back to her position in front of him. A little closer this time. He started just above her knee. Slightly up her thigh. Barely touching her. She kept her gaze locked with his. Not moving an inch as he continued. He stopped. “Now who’s chicken.” She went back to her desk.

She felt him behind her. He didn’t speak a word. Just pulled her back over to his corner of the dirty office. Before she could think he pulled her to him and kissed her. She felt it in every cell of her body. To her very core. He kissed her neck. His hands holding her as if to keep her from getting away.

She stopped and stepped away. “We can’t. What about her”. “So what?”. He grabbed her and started again. Kissing harder this time. Again she pulled away. “Now what?” “I don’t want to.” “Oh yeah? It doesn’t feel that way.” He looked at her, and there was that smile. He pulled her to him again. Holding on to her tighter this time. She started to pull away. Not this time. He wasn’t going to let her.

She didn’t say a word. Because she did want to. Only she was afraid. She wasn’t sure she could handle him. His gruffness. His strength. His rawness. What if he was more than she could take? Would she end up broken?

He overtook her. They were like two starved animals finally thrown a meal. She was surprised at how well she stood up to his strength. He was as rough as he looked. Yet there was something gentle in the touch of his hands, the way he pressed against her, the softness in his breath. It was their first time together, but he knew just where to touch. Just how soft, or how hard, to press.

They barely made a sound. Hardly anything was disturbed. Yet it seemed as though the universe was exploding. It was over in a matter of moments. A good thing. Any longer and they risked being consumed in the fire of their passion.

They went about their work as if it never happened. Not a word was said about it. Only glances. Smiles. Touches. Interspersed with moments of violent passion.

And that is how it continued. Until one day it simply came to an end.

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      schoolgirlforreal 2 years ago from USA

      I felt that. familiar. been there. :)

      Sometimes just a person's Voice over the phone....

      ;)

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      Dana Strang 2 years ago from Ohio

      kenneth avery..... I am sorry, I have not been keeping up like I should... Thank you for the comment. This was my first attempt at this type of writing and I am so thrilled to see that I "got it right".

      I will be sure to make a visit to your hubs when I can.

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      Dana Strang 2 years ago from Ohio

      schoolgirlforreal - thank you hun! still up and down. but more ups lately :)

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      Dana Strang 2 years ago from Ohio

      diogenes - Wow, Bob. Thank you. That really means a lot. I have not been popping in as much as I should. I have had a lot of health and personal setbacks and for some reason can't seem to make it back to writing. I am going to try. Comments like yours remind me how much I love it.

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      diogenes 2 years ago from UK and Mexico

      Hey, Dana...if you are still reading comments on this old piece which is still, deservedly, making the rounds.

      It is evergreen and one of the most gripping and well written examples of the type I have seen on here.

      As a poet, I find that just occasionally I write something that seems as perfect as it can be and they stay for life: such is this jewel of an article.

      Bob

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      Kenneth Avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama

      Hey, Dana,

      I did not see your response to my comment. Guess you were busy. This is and always be a terrific piece of writing.

      Keep it coming.

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      schoolgirlforreal 2 years ago from USA

      Good evening, friend :)

      Hope you're feeling better! xo

      Lova ya and nice story

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      Kenneth Avery 3 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama

      Hi, Dana,

      Pure reality through a keyboard. Wow. Nice work. Voted Up and all of the choices. You made a twinkling-moment feel so real. In short, you nailed it.

      I ask you to visit my place and check two of my hubs and then be one of my followers.

      I would love it.

      Sincerely, Kenneth/ from northwest Alabama

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      New ideas?

      Sounds yummy whatever it will be.

      Until then, I will wait, with bated breath (whatever that means!)

      LOL

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      THANKS ROSE! I have to admit that I come back and read this one now and then.... THIS WAS MY FIRST FICTION SHORT STORY! I admit that the characters are heavily based on people I know. That helped a lot. I stayed away from dialogue because I didn't know how to make it sound real. AND as far as storyline I drew from real life and fantasy. It was easy to write. HARDEST THING is trying to come up with new scenes. so IF ANYONE HAS ANY IDEAS I WOULD LOVE TO KNOW ABOUT THEM.

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      Hi Dana,

      Is this the 3rd or 4th time I've read this? Lol! Anyways, where you got your lovely fictional ideas from I am glad you gave me some idea. It helps my perspective this time around, since sometimes I indentify with lots of things, yet now, as I have a different perspective, I don't identify with it 100% but I am impressed with your creative writing here, really well done, yet ruff like you said!

      It's a sunny day here, have a great weekend!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      writinglover - thank you! I get so excited when people like my work. not because I want to be liked, but because I want to give people something good. I am still working on recreating the "magic" of this one.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Cat- I am so glad you liked this. it took me a while to get up the courage to write it. I am so glad I finally did it because people seem to enjoy it. yay!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from Lost...In Video Games

      This was simply amazing! Voted it up beautiful!

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      DanaTeresa,

      Holy macaroni! I had no idea what I was getting myself into! I just had to dump out my coffee because I became so warm and overwhelmed; I no longer needed to the coffee to wake or warm me up! I think I'm going to some local offices with applications today :D

      This is excellent; kudos to you dear!!!

      So up + others... sharing too!

      Cat

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      blondey - thanks doll. i have said this a billion times, one of these days i will change those photos, i will let you know when i do. then we can read it again :)

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      Your favorite, our favorite, everyone wins!

      Just checking in, see you latear!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      pinto2011 - I am thrilled that you liked this so much. I admit, I do revisit this one now and then. It is one of my favorites.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      lovedoctor926 - thanks a bunch for the votes. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      acaetnna - you have the right idea with that shower! i am thrilled with the responses that you guys want more. that means i got it right! feels good to put aut good work, and to know that i gave you something you enjoyed.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tillsontitan - THANK YOU! I am so happy I wrote it. It is one of my favorite hubs. Now I just have to figure out how to do it again, and again. and ..... It is fun!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      MichaelJohnMele - LOL! I wrote 2 sequels to this (Their Disagreement, Their Lunch Break). They are ok... If I could recreate this magic on demand I would do it all day long!

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      Subhas 4 years ago from New Delhi, India

      You have written something which I will need to come back and read again. Very well crafted.

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      I loved this. voted up awesome! Going to check out the next part to this sequel.

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      acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

      Oh wow ... a shower with hubby and then bed I think!!! Great work. Shame about the ending ... rather abrupt and I SO what it to continue!!!

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      It isn't good Dana it's fabulous! Everything a story should be. You grab us with the little teasing at the beginning and then we can't stop reading as we see them get closer until...but then you let us down, and not too gently "Until one day it simply came to an end."

      Its a good thing you didn't talk yourself out of posting this, it is really a masterpiece from start to finish. I agree with everyone; more, more!

      Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and shared.

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      Michael John Mele 4 years ago from Seffner, Florida

      Whew...is it hot in here...or is it just this hub? Girl you have to write more...you can't leave us hanging like this...you're being a tease.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      khmazz - this is one of my all time favorite hubs! there are two more in the series and i just haven't made the time for more. i really should.... thanks for stopping by!

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      Kristen Mazzola 4 years ago from South Florida

      Great writing! I cant wait to see what comes next!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      blondey - nice to see you. your comments are so much fun! ... i am currently trying to decide if i take the affair out of the office or not. hmmm.

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      Dana,

      still waiting for the next one, patience is not my virtue, lol, just kidding. This was such a dynamic piece....tasty very good work. Actually, I would give it a 9 on a scale of 1-10 you are romance book material! Keep filling our minds with this feminine porn. We love it. xo Goodnite.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      torrilynn - Thanks for reading my story. I am glad you liked it.

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      torrilynn 4 years ago

      Dana,

      really nice poem that you have here

      very sensual and offers lots of visualize with

      the way you strung your words together

      thanks for the read

      Voted up

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Escobana - Nice to se you. I am so happy you enjoyed this. I have to admit I go back and read it for fun sometimes. It is one of my favorites.... Thanks a bunch for sharing! :)

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      Escobana 4 years ago from Valencia

      Such a passionate and hot story. I was clinging to each and every word of it, holding my breath....

      Jeez....this was a nice way to start my morning!

      Up, awesome and definitely sharing:-)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Hi Bill! - Thank you. It took some guts to write this, but I just couldn't rest until I did. I enjoyed the process and it is still one of my favorites.Now to learn how to recreate the magic!

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      Bill Holland 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Very nicely done, Dana! This stands alone as a quality piece of writing. Whether there is a part 2 or not, this is done quite well.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      MartieCoetser - Exciitng is right!!! Maybe it is better they come to an end before the excitement fades. There are always the memories!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      tsmog - THANKS!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Rahul! I am very glad you liked this. I was so nervous about writing it. I am glad I did. And I admit, I will go back and read this one every now and then. ;)

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      Martie Coetser 4 years ago from South Africa

      "They were like two starved animals finally thrown a meal...."

      A Fling like this is quite exciting. Sadly, they end just the way they begin: unexpected...

      Enthralling!

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      Tim Mitchell 4 years ago from Escondido, CA

      Nice!

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Awesome writing Dana... from the start to the finish... In the end... you leave the reader craving for more .. :)

      Enrapturing story telling :)

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      You think?

      This was incredible.....

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      lovedoctor926 - took me a while to get up the nerve to write this. do glad i finally did it!

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      This was a really good story. too bad it had to come to an end. Looking forward to part 2 of this series.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      xstatic - I am always interested to see what the fellas have to say about these. I try not to make them too skewed towards women, but I am one after all and that is bound to show.... The wrter in me is doing such a happy dance knowing she did a good job :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      barbergirl28 - I am also glad you decided to begin at the beginning. I would hate for you to miss this one. It's my favorite. Or maybe the second one is. Hmmm. Maybe I should just write another one that is better than them all. :)

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      blondey - You really should try fiction! I admit it is not easy. It takes me a lot of time because I havet to let it sit, then go back to it and read it as if I was reading another person's writing. That is the only way I can tell if I am making a mess or not!

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Wellllll....!! That was interesting, just as you indicated it would be. Good writing, as has been said.

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      Stacy Harris 4 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      Wow - I have to say... I was going to head to the third and decided to head through the entire piece and start from the beginning. Glad I did!

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      Rosemary Amrhein 4 years ago from Boston, MA

      Well, I can relate to that, I might try fiction, now that you've inspired me.

      This was the bomb though.really. I felt like it was me there...wow!

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      freedomspirit - I am shocked I can write fiction. I was always so bat at it. I could never come up with ideas, reallt bad at it... THEN I went with the old cliche of "write what you know".. My characters are based on me or people I know. The plot lines are based on real exoeriences (of mine or others) and then I change and add to them. Evenutlaly I hope to get good enough to write pure fiction... I am glad I am doing well so far....

      Thank you so very much for your input! It is a huge help.

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      freedomspirit 4 years ago

      Lol! This prob is the best one. It's great you can write fiction, I'm not good at it, I've tried a few times.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      freedomspirit - Thank you! This is definitely my favorite of the series. I am still waiting for lightning ot strike a second time.

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      freedomspirit 4 years ago

      Excellent job, Dana, very well crafted for sure.

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Rolly A Chabot - Glad you liked this. It took a lot of guts for me to finally write this one. Once I did,it opened me up to writing a lot more freely.... I am working on the third one at this very moment.... I am having a hard time keeping it hubpages friendly. uh oh!! :)

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      Rolly A Chabot 4 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Dana... oh my well written and very real in so many ways... you have a gift... continue to use it...

      Hugs from Canada

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      bottle of wine and hot bath right now..lol

      great job.. I will check out the other one

      Debbie

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      Debbie - I was totally nervous about writing this one. I am so glad did... Part 2 is published: Their Dosagreement. It doens't have quite the same magic, but it will warm up a cold night.... I am wrkingon a third, and trying to think of a way to tie the titles together...

      enjoy that wine. or shower. oh heck how about a bottle of wine and a hot bath :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Dana oh my word.. now I need a cold shower or a glass of wine.. I love it.. yes where is part 2?

      I am sharing

      Debbie

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      Dana Strang 4 years ago from Ohio

      girishpuri - thank you. I had a great time writing this, and even reading it a few times myself!

      Their Disagreement is a continuation of this story. I am well overdue for the next one!

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      Quite an interesting and suspenseful read here, Very interesting hub.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      rajan jolly - so glad that you enjoyed this! really. it took a bit of courage for me to publish it. i wasn't sure itwould be well received. boy am i pleasantly surprised. i see that you read the second one as well. thanks a bunch for the votes.

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 5 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      You have a very fresh and arresting way of writing Dana, compelling one to go on till the end. Love your style.

      Voting it up and awesome.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Thanks maria! A few people seem to think I could be a romance novelist. Maybe?!... thanks for the votes! I have to be careful not to make these too hot - if u know what I mean. :)

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      Maria Jordan 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Then I shall have to read a hundred more, Dana...!

      You've got the knack... voted UP & AB and HOT... Hugs, Maria

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Mary - Thanks for the vote! I am surprised at the responses I am getting from this. It makes me want to write a hundred more!

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      Mary Hyatt 5 years ago from Florida

      Icouldn't wait until the ending! Great story. Did you ever write a sequel????

      I voted this UP.

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Dana,

      Part Two! I think we are winning the voting here! :) Great story Dana!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      KDuBarry03 - Thank you. this was my first attempt at anything like this. I really enjoyed it....Part 2 is on the way thanks to Linda's persistence, a conversation I had last night, and some quiet time to write today. Should be out soon!!

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      KDuBarry03 5 years ago

      A very beautiful story, Dana! I agree with sunshine, definitely looking for Part 2!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      LOL! now you are using my own advice (and Nike's) on me. Very clever! I can feel the pressure! Keep squeezing, maybe I will get squished down a dress size or two!

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      "Just Do It" :)

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Way to light a fire under my butt! I think I will give it a shot. I write most of these im my head before my hand touches the keyboard. So at the very least I will be doing some excellent daydreaming! :p

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Where is Part 2?

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Seb rock! Thank you for visiting!! Next time we talk I will tell you the ending. Everyone else will have to wait. And wait. :)

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      Cave johnson 5 years ago

      Awesome dana. It really was. But i really want to know why and how it stopped.

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      Anjili 5 years ago from planet earth, a humanoid

      Do men have such an obvious signature tune like "Gas and exhaust. Dirt and sweat. Cigars and smell?" Just observing.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      sarahbeth006 - just saw that you are a newbie. Welcome to hubpages. hope you like it here !

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      sarahbeth006 - Thank you so much foe the compliments. I was trying to walk that think line between romantic passion and expilcit sex. Guess I did it... glad you can relate on a personal level. :) sometimes that makes stories even better when we have our own experiences that we can share along with the author's... there will definitely be more romance stories. Another one has already begun writng itself. Hope it comes out just as good!

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      sarahbeth006 5 years ago from Maryland

      Fantastic. I like that it was romantic, emotional, and realistic, but not explicit. I can also relate to it on a personal level, which makes it that much more appealing. It does stand on its own, but it is yours so if there is more I am sure it will be just as good.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Docmo - THANK YOU so much for taking time to read this. I was a little shy about it, but after reading some of your beautiful work I thougt how silly I was being. There is nothing wring with writing about what is purely human emotion. Then I wondered if it was any good. Seems that it is. I am seriously thrilled about that. I so much want people to read and enjoy my writing..... I have a cousin that is publishing a novel and is already writing a second. She offered me some guidance if I want to puruse this seriously.

      Thanks for the votes and for the encouragement. Wish me luck! :)

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      Mohan Kumar 5 years ago from UK

      Oh wow. I loved the way it started and reached a crescendo - raw, no meandering, just animal enough but just the right level of emotion and passion. You are good at this and should write more - maybe not the same story but another ! Really liked the way it teased, pulled and played but did so naturally. There was nothing contrived about this. Voted up Dana- across and away!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Poetoc Fool - thank you so much. i am just as pleased to know it was well written as i am to know you liked it. i want to give somethingto me readers, but the academic in me wants to produce good writing. you comments are much appreciated.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      teaches - thanks! perhaps i will branch out to writing romance novels. you know, the pink ones with fabio on the cover :)

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      Poetic Fool 5 years ago

      Yes, this was very well-written and certainly intriguing. No problem holding my attention here. I loved the ending too. It's perfect as it is.

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      Dianna Mendez 5 years ago

      Quite an interesting read here, Dana. Very suspenseful and leaves a reader wanting to turn the page to the next chapter. Keep it coming!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Barnsey - Again, Thank you! it took a little bit of guts to post this and i am glad i did. no more of that shy girl! Have a great weekend.

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      Barnsey 5 years ago from Happy Hunting Grounds

      Intuition is my middle name, lol, this is why you are so good at grabbing your readers, honest emotion simply relays better than the imagined. Using honest experience to back up your talent is a trick not everyone can pull off, another reason you have 101 followers! Rock on!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Barnsey - Thank you for reading. I meant that sincerely. When it was finished and I was reading it over I was wondering what you would think about it cuz I know you can offer a perspective that I don't have. I am beyond thrilled that you liked it. I could do a happy dance!. You are also very perceptive. I am impressed. I am a horrible fiction writer. This is my way of easing into it. There. I admit. It is not entirely fictional. And yes. That ending is a bitch! :)

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      Barnsey 5 years ago from Happy Hunting Grounds

      Very impressive, Dana, it gripped me and wouldn't let me turn away until the ending, which made me ruefully shake my head. Affection repressed is the most fiery and passionate when it finally comes to fruition and you have relayed that perfectly. I don't know, girlfriend, somebody might need some experience with this sort of thing if they are going to write about it beleivably, which you did, lol, just sayin'.

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      ExoticHippieQueen -

      I am so glad you liked it. I mean it. I have vener written anythign like this. I was afraid it might be a flop. Thanks for taking the time to comment! :)

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      ExoticHippieQueen 5 years ago

      That was very good! Took me to the very hot end.......

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Sunshine and Jools -

      Thats 3 votes for a part 2 to one vote for none. Hmmm. I am so glad you liked it enough to want to read more. It was written with the intention of ending. BUT I could easily write a second in a way that it would stand on its own yet tie into that one. I will keep it in mind. This one started writing itself in my head and I just had to get it out. I think if a part 2 starts writing itself I will have no choice :)

      Thanks guys for reading!

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Bob - Thank you so much! I really appreciate the time you put into your comments and I respect your opinion.... I am glad to see that I was able to get across what I hoped - romantic and erotic... Did you notice no "I" or "me"! :)

      Thank you fo rthe votes. And thatnk you so much for sharing this. I am horrible at promoting my work. I would love for more people to read it. I get sich a joy from reading the works of others. If I can give that same joy to readers I will be so happy.

      Thanks again.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      No, it can't come to an end....part 2 please!

      Voted up.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Bring on Part 2! I'm looking forward to what happens next! Well done!

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      diogenes 5 years ago from UK and Mexico

      Dana: This is SUPERB drama. NO part 2, 3 or whatever. The ending was as good as the build-up and the conclusion. It was romantic and erotic and I loved it!

      The protagonists went the full circle, from flirting to consumation and it was handled with a very deft hand.

      Top votes and I have some people to send this to...it was that good.

      Bob

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      Dana Strang 5 years ago from Ohio

      Rosemary - Thank you. I was a little shy about posting it until I realized that I was being silly... There could easily be a part 2, maybe even 3.... I guess it depends on how well received this one is.