Your Ecstasy
I wanted your ecstacy
So bad
I wanted it everyday
Everynight
You drew me near
I lost control
My love for you
Was suspended
By the strings
That held me
In mid air
It was a steady silence
That kept me there
Waiting
Waiting
Waiting
For you
Until I was driven insane
Couldn't take it any longer
The flesh of madness
Grounded up and beat up
Into nothing
Leaving me lost
In this dark hole
That you have left me in
My heart screamed out
NO
But you kept on
Until the madness was gone
Leaving me
Sinking into the ground
Farther and farther
Down
You left me to
Fend for myself
Take care of myself
Abandoned
In a prison
Behind these walls
I wait
For the sunshine
To come
It never does
The rain pours in
Covering me with
It's slick wetness
I hope it will wash away
What you left behind
Even the rain can't wash
Away the pain that you
Have dug deep inside me
An unborn child
That can never be born
I wanted you to take it away
You never came
You only stayed away
Comments
So powerful;so sad and what comes through is how talented you are.
This has to have that vote up;take care and enjoy your day.
Eddy.
Oh you took my breath away with this one..
So sad but loved the emotion it composed..
Caroline, Powerful!
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Eiddwen, Blaise25, & Stessily thank you for your kind words and compliments. I am glad this poem brought out some kind of emotions in you. And thank you for all your support.
Wow, This is deep..Very well rhymed, and yes, powerful...
This work had a nice pace to it. A bit of perhaps 'frantic', perhaps, an evasive notion of something so close, yet out of reach.
Awesome and wow it took my breath away.
Wow, this is breathtaking. You write superbly. It can be close and intimate, yet measured and firm. It is hard to show our pain in writing, and not all writers can do it. You have been through things and you express the so well. You should be published, I would buy your writing no problem.
Hi Caroline,
My first thought was powerful too and the noticed it was a common thought amongst the comments left her. I always enjoy your poetry whether it is dark, painful and sad, to happy and uplifting. It's all a work of art.
Hi Caroline
"My love for you
Was suspended
By the strings
That held me
In mid air"
Amazing imagery.
Beautifully done.
Voted up and away!
Have a good weekend.
You took me in a different direction and I could feel the deep sadness.Very moving.
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@ Always thank you I am glad you liked it!
@ Mckbirdmks thank you for the great compliment!
@ GypsyRoseLee thank you always good to see you!
@ Astra thank you very much! That is one of the best compliments! You need to get published too. Always great to see you. :)
@ Cara thanks for stopping by. I am happy you liked it and what a great comment.
@ Sueswan thank you for stopping by and commenting.
@ Dream On thank you very much!
Caroline, simply beautiful.. so sad and powerful.. I hope you know I am a big fan of yours..
Blessing to you
Debbie
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Thank you Debbie. I am a fan of your passionate writing too.
Extremely vivid, and full of imagination. I loved how you repeated "Waiting" in three lines. It certainly defined the true meaning of waiting.
Voted up and beautiful. I'm not a poetry fan, but this was very good and twist to an ending I was not expecting ... well written.
Thanks for SHARING.
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@ Senoritaa thank you so much for stopping by and commenting!
@ Brett thank you for stopping by!
Very powerful, laced with agony and sorrow. Brilliant...
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Thank you very much A.A.!
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