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Not a typical day…

  1. paradigmsearch profile image90
    paradigmsearchposted 4 years ago

    I gazed out the motel front window across the desert towards where Los Angeles was. It was fairly early morning. The air was crisp and clean.

    “Did I get far enough away in time?” I wondered. I turned towards the television to check out the news.

    Then came the flash. It was an airburst.

    “Safe!” thought I.

    Then I saw the rolling dust cloud...

    I dived down below the window and huddled against the wall.

    The impact shattered the window, slamming the glass shards across the room.

    The roaring got louder…

    I was wrong.


    The above was an actual dream I had awhile back. When the roaring got louder is when I woke up.


    The above is a post I made on B. I so thoroughly enjoy fiction writing. But I strongly suspect I am lousy at it. This is a solicitation for advice.

    1. CraftytotheCore profile image82
      CraftytotheCoreposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      You had me going there for a minute!  I was ducking myself.

    2. moonlake profile image90
      moonlakeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Sounds good to me.

    3. Chris Neal profile image78
      Chris Nealposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Actually pretty good! I enjoyed it!

  2. Marcy Goodfleisch profile image96
    Marcy Goodfleischposted 4 years ago

    It kept me reading!  I want to know what happens next.

  3. Mighty Mom profile image85
    Mighty Momposted 4 years ago

    Had me scurrying to Merriam Webster to look up "airburst."
    Very compelling!

  4. Doodlehead profile image79
    Doodleheadposted 4 years ago

    I think if you go to the nearest PIZZAMYHEART and get a slice you will find yourself quickly thinking more clearly.   It has happened to me.