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Revenge, Inc. Part 23: A Short Story

Updated on June 29, 2011

Author's Note

Hello everyone and welcome back. I know that many of you have been anticipating this installment and want to find out who this "new girl" is. As I've said before, I've been anticipating these next few and final installments for a long time now for the past five months. Rest assured, the the work here is fresh and was just recently completed only a few hours after I hit "save" for the very first time. I actually wanted to make it a bit longer, but the proceeding parts will have to wait until next week or so. As always, I hope you enjoy it. Fans and Followers of mine will notice a similarity with this new girl's namesake and it's no coincidence as I'm dedicating this work to her. Her dialogue became that much easier for me to write as I'm familiar with the way she talks.

I'd like to give a special thanks to my good friend Kiera7 who is an avid reader like many of you here at HubPages, who got her husband hooked on reading this as well. She apologized to me earlier for making mention of reading this installment in her opinion, prematurely. Well, my friends, I by no means was going to cheat you out of NOT writing a new installment this week or any other week for that matter and I wasn't planning to take a week off! Both Christmas and New Year's fell on a Friday and I still was able to crank out an installment. I wouldn't have it any other way. So thanks, Keira7! It's friends like you that keep me motivated to deliver every single week!

I'd like to also thank Cris A for supplying another great pic for this week's installment. I smell a great book cover if you ask me!


Now, if you are just stopping in to see what all the Hub Bub is all about, I thank you but would also like to urge you to read this series from its beginning, from Part One. Please click on the corresponding link below and thank you for reading me!

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

Revenge, Inc. Part 6

Revenge, Inc. Part 7

Revenge, Inc. Part 8

Revenge, Inc. Part 9

Revenge, Inc. Part 10

Revenge, Inc. Part 11

Revenge, Inc. Part 12

Revenge, Inc. Part 13

Revenge, Inc. Part 14

Revenge, Inc. Part 15

Revenge, Inc. Part 16

Revenge, Inc. Part 17

Revenge, Inc. Part 18

Revenge, Inc. Part 19

Revenge, Inc. Part 20

Revenge, Inc. Part 21

Revenge, Inc. Part 22

A Chance Meeting

From the face of this woman who I couldn’t place, I looked to my father who wasn’t at all surprised by her being there. Truth be told, I was the only one that was surprised in the entire church. A part of me felt that I should know her, but I didn’t. Another part of me was angered by the fact that he deliberately let this woman inside St. Augustine's to meet me. At a time he and I agreed that there would be no outsiders and yet here she stood before me. What was he up to? He did the favor of introducing me to her before I could even ask.

“This is Rayna, Marak. For the past year she’s been visiting me and confiding in me all of her confessions—most of which concerns her occupation in which she must keep secret so as to not betray the trust of those she cares for. Surely, you can understand that, can’t you? The other part…”

“What do you do?” I asked her.

“I work as a counselor for battered women,” she said and continued smiling at me.

“Mary of Grace? On Park side and Washington?”

“That’s the one.”

“…As I was saying,” my father interrupted. “The other part involves you.” I turned and looked at him and so in the process had broken eye contact with Rayna.

“How so? And how is it she knew where to find me?” I asked, more curious than ever. My father then looked at Rayna and gave her a slight bow.

“That’s not for me to tell you, Marak. Perhaps you should ask her yourself. So with that said, I will leave the two of you alone.” He then turned around and walked away. Rayna’s eyes were downcast for a time as the sound of my father’s footsteps faded away in the distance. She looked up at me.

“To answer one of your questions, I didn’t know where to find you. Until I began meeting with your father, I was taking my work home with me, so to speak, carrying the burden of other battered women with me after leaving Mary of Grace. I just didn’t know who else to turn to. That was when I met your father while walking down Clancy Street. As soon as he saw me, he just knew that something was wrong. He then asked if I’d like to walk with him, which of course led me here.”

“Wait a minute, you said other battered women...”

“Yes, I too was a victim once. My life completely changed as a result of it. I wanted to help other women like myself who had been abused years ago in every sense of the word.” She paused and looked into my eyes, searching me. It was almost too much for me to bear. I could’ve looked at her all night and yet could have not looked at her at all. “You don’t remember me, do you Marak?” I shook my head.

“No, I don’t.”

“Please, think back to a four-story building, 141 Division Avenue, four years ago. What did you do that night?” It was vague, it was history. I couldn’t remember. Or maybe I didn’t want to remember. Each day, there were more things I’d much rather forget. It was better that way.

“I haven’t a clue what your talking about.” Rayna then reached into her purse and bought out a four-inch piece of razor sharp steel and showed it to me. I knew what it was immediately, as the owner of a weapon only could. Rayna held it tight as it were a knife.

“Do you remember this? You gave it to me that night. You told me, ‘This will keep you safe so keep it near you at all times’ and that’s exactly what I did. That was also the last time I saw you.” The memories were indeed flooding back, but I was fighting to not let the images in...Rayna was screaming. “Look at me! Remember? Four years ago! Imagine me four years younger…What do you see?”

Father of Mine

Her voice haunts me still. Over the past four years, I did well to forget her cries, to forget her sounds. If I carried on every sight and sound this city has revealed to me, I would need to be locked up just like the rest of them, because I would be losing my mind. The sounds of her pleas are inescapable and painful to hear, like long sharp nails slowly scraping a chalkboard. It sends shivers down my spine. There’s a strong odor of malt liquor—the cheap shit you get at the corner store for two bucks. What I couldn’t understand was how in the surrounding area of 141 Division Street not come to aid this girl, this terrified little girl? Has everyone turned a deaf ear to every atrocity around them? And then of course there’s the unspeakable question, the question no one, no even the perpetrator is able to answer—with the judge to his right and the District Attorney in his face and the twelve member jury looking on—why he was doing what he’s doing and all he could do in response is swing his head over to one side and begin sobbing, as if anyone is going to take pity on this bastard, this low-life scumbag who calls himself her father. My hand is on my katana and is at the ready, but I’m too late to undo what’s already been done...


A teenage girl is on her back against a bare floor, her jeans are down around her ankles and her panties are torn away hastily. A naked man three times her age and twice her weight is on top of her, wanting her, and forcing himself inside of her despite her struggles to break free. He has a hold of both her wrists, pressed firmly against the wooden floor of the apartment. Her legs are everywhere, squirming and kicking to no avail. She was simply no match for this drunken gorilla. A stream of blood had formed.

“It’s for your own good, baby…Who better but me, huh? You’re going to lose it one way or the other.”

I wanted to throw up when hearing this, but that of course would’ve slowed me down. That’s the last thing I wanted to do. I wanted to move as fast as could and drive the point home…A squeak on the floorboard was initially the only sound I made, but that was all.

“What the…?”

I kicked him so hard that his head actually hit the floor board and bounced back up. Just as soon as I made impact, he was off the girl and rolling over in agony. I looked over and this girl was wiping away her tears and was doing her best to dress herself. I found a blanket nearby and wrapped her in it. “Keep yourself warm, okay?” She responded by giving me a nod. I then walked back to her father.

I was just getting started.

He was well over two hundred and twenty five pounds, but to me, he could’ve been half that. I flung him around like a rag doll—across the room and into the kitchen—where I began remodeling it with his face. I shoved his head through every cabinet door. When he was close enough to reach for a knife, he did and thought it would help him. What an asshole. I simply slapped it away and then slapped him repeatedly for even trying to fight back. When he didn’t ‘get it’ the first attempt, he tried again by swinging at me. That was when I threw him head-first inside the refrigerator and destroyed just about everything in there in the process. I then punched him in the face which caused him to fall to the floor. I then picked him up and while looking at his blood-stained face, I thought to castrate him but instead, I kneed him in his problem area. He was cradling himself in pain.

As he laid motionless, the girl looked on and didn’t look away. She was still curled up in a blanket where I left her. By then her tears had dried but her healing had yet to begin. I reached into my scabbard and pulled out my katana. Having lifted him up by the roots of his hair, I placed the blade against the nape of his neck.

“NO!” She screamed. “Don’t kill him!” Of course her father at this point was begging and pleading for me to stop and was urging for his daughter to talk some sense into me. But to me, he was already a dead man. Whether it be my hand or someone else’s n Valhalla Prison, it didn’t matter. He was a dead man regardless. They don’t take kindly to pedophiles. I didn’t give him a year to survive in such a place and even if he did make it through his first year, he’s going to wish he was dead. I placed my katana back and began binding his arms and legs together, hogtying him.

“I’m sorry,” the bastard said to me. He actually began to cry.

“Why are apologizing to me, you sick fuck? Apologize to her! If she wasn’t in plain view, you’d be a red puddle on the sidewalk by now.” I looked at the girl. “Where’s your phone?” She pointed and I made a phone call.

“Captain Lenore? Yeah, Felix. Pedophile. Downtown., 141 Division Street, fourth floor. She's scared and needs shelter.” I placed the phone in the cradle and found her looking at me.

“Are you a cop?” I shook my head.and walked towards her.

“No, I’m not.” I reached the fold of my sleeve and brought out a shuriken. “Listen, this is for you. This will keep you safe at all times so keep it near you.” She took the shuriken and did her best to smile.

I came out the way I went in. As I leaped from one rooftop to the next I played the entire event over and over again in my mind. When I got back to apartment, I sat down and saw that my hands were shaking. It was at this moment that I realized I'd been crying for some time.

Everything Happens For a Reason

“So you do remember me?” Rayna said. I nodded my head.

“I didn't forget about you..” I paused and looked at her. “So how did you find me? My father?”

“Well, no...Not exactly. You see I saw you that night for only a moment before you turn to leave me before the cops came. My father was on the floor and I was in the corner, doing my best to hold on. From the moonlight outside the window, I saw your face. And just like you tonight, I didn’t at the time recognize you but I remembered you from somewhere. I just didn’t know where.”

“No one ever sees my face.”

“In time, it came back to me, your face…I remembered where I saw it. It was in the newspaper, in an article about a man who killed himself over the loss of his daughter—a girl I went to school with. But how could that be? You were supposed to be dead!”

“So what happened to you afterwards?”

“I was sent to foster care for a couple of years and then went off to college when I was no longer a minor. It took time for my scars to finally heal. Life happened, Marak.”

“And your father?”

“He died in prison two years afterwards. I never went to see him and burned every letter he wrote me….And don’t change the subject, okay?” I smiled.


“So now my dreams took over and they were all of you. I went to the library to look up the archives of you and your story, about Haley’s disappearance and of course of your suicide. The facts were in front of me, yet I still refused to believe. I knew what I saw that night and knew that you were alive, somehow. I confided all of this, my dreams of you, my work with the women at the shelter, my father raping me…All of it, to your father. It felt good to talk, to say all the things I couldn't say to others. I also told him how a stranger came to my rescue one night when I was sixteen and in turn, your father did his best to hide his knowledge of you But over time, a bond of trust developed between the two of us. You could say I bribed him with baked goods and in turn, he steered abused women to me, for shelter and for empathy. After so many years he admitted to me that he knew you and that was when he made the decision for us to finally meet again.”

“So you’re saying I was set-up?” She laughed.

“If you really want to call it that, then yes. That just sounds so…I don’t know, negative.”

“Okay, I don’t’ understand. Why did you want to see me?” Again, her sweet laughter.

“Haven't you been paying attention? I mean, isn’t it obvious? I had to know. I had to be sure. Seeing you that night four years ago and seeing you now...It all makes perfect sense to me.”

“What makes perfect sense?” Rayna walks over and takes both my hands in her’s.

“That I’m in love with you, Cody.”

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      dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      I'm so happy that you came back as well, Valerie and at just the right time :D I'm sure you have a lot to catch up on.

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      valeriebelew 7 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

      Cody finds love again, just as I receive my new modem. Great to be back on-line. (:v

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thank you so much! I always new readers to this series. It means a great deal to me that anyone takes their time to sit down and read my extensive work, as I worked hard to write it and YOU worked hard to read it. I truly appreciate your comment and that you read this. I hope to "see" you by its conclusion. Thank you so much :D

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      Winsome 8 years ago from Southern California by way of Texas

      Whew! I hadn't read any of the installments so I began tonight and it's 12:58 and I'm done. Love what MyWebs said "A real mouse clicker" It certainly was and now I see where your strength lies...the dialogue and narrative are compelling and seamless. If you listen you can hear me bowing with hands clasped and pointed in your direction. =:)

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hello, Maita! I'm so sorry I didn't respond sooner as I had many obligations to tend to today (including the entire week). I'm glad you stopped in and of course am just as excited about Part 24. I just finished writing it--I wrote it one single sitting and it took me exactly four hours. I hope you like it. Salamat.


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      prettydarkhorse 8 years ago from US

      It is Friday-- weekend, HOORAY!! and your next imnstallment is here soon again, I am excited what you will come up with, no pressure hehe, Salamat DOHN, Maita

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thanks, Rebecca. I'm hoping I'll reach it before the end of the month as that was my goal all along. Thank you!

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      Rebecca E. 8 years ago from Canada

      dohn-- very good I must say, I've got my eye on your profile and it looks that you'll be hitting another big milestone very very soon, my congrats in advance,

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      I'm so glad that you liked this TFT. As I said before, I haven't written anything like this before, but this is going better than I had expected. I think the comments speak for themselves ;) Thank you as always, my friend.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      A cross-dressing ninja? Ha! I'm not touching it! Thanks, Cris! I always try to write in a fashion that is unpredictable (for the most part). I'm pretty good at predicting the ending to most of the books I read, so if I can't figure out the ending, neither can my reader (hopefully).

      I share in your sadness, my friend. I don't want this series to end either, but alas, it must one day, lol. Thanks as always!

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thanks, Rebecca! I really hope it happens. I might have to use a pseudonym as this work is completely different to what I'm accustomed to writing. Truth be told, I've not written anything like this before.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Geez, buddy. What more could I have asked as a comment from you? I think the toughest thing for me to do after finishing this book is trying to top it or maybe I'll be a one-trick pony? Ahh, who knows! Thank you so much for that, buddy ;)

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      Truth From Truth 8 years ago from Michigan

      Some really solid writing Dohn. I love this new twist, your story has a great pace. Thanks so much for sharing it with everyone.

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      Cris A 8 years ago from Manila, Philippines

      Your narrative is so seamless and convincingly told that even if you suddenly decide to make Cody/Marak a woman "in reality" your readers would still buy it - but please don't! Haha

      Another entertaining installment my friend. This is one ride I would be saddened to get off of. :D

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      Rebecca E. 8 years ago from Canada

      Dohn121-- once again anttoher awesome installment, yes I smell a book here!

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      cosette 8 years ago

      "I was just getting started."

      love that.

      just when i think i know what is going to happen next, a stunning plot twist propels me in a whole new direction. i'm smiling at how wonderful thou art...

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hmmm...You know, you're the only one that's asked that. I can't really say yet, my friend, but rest assured, this series is indeed nearly over :( I'll email you with more info...

      Yes, yes, yes! You're not the first to make such a request. Cody/Marak certainly deserves such a fate, right? Only time will tell. I thank you so much for taking on the herculean task of reading this ENTIRE series darn near in one sitting! Hats off to you. I'm flattered that you did so.

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      Anthony Goodley 8 years ago from Sheridan, WY

      This was sure a real mouse clicker, I just couldn't stop clicking to find out what happened next. Now I must stop though as I'm caught up and must wait for the next part.

      I'm really hoping this girl lives and we have some sort of happy ending here. About how many more parts do you think are left in this series?

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thank you, Tammy. That particular scene was on slow-bake for the last couple of months! I'm just glad that I don't have to write it again. I felt awkward and uncomfortable doing so.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      I'm sorry about that, Paradise7. I did mention that four years passed since Marak's return to Valhalla. I can understand why some would get confused :(

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      Tammy Lochmann 8 years ago

      Ha! I couldn't figure it out about the name Rayna, then it finally donned on me that is the name of the girl in your avatar. This was really riveting I definitely cringed at the rape scene. Well done!

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      Paradise7 8 years ago from Upstate New York

      I got lost on this one, have to go back and re-read a couple of the earlier ones.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Wow! Thank you, Maita. As I've said before, I've been anticipating this chapter/installment for months now but this is the first time I actually wrote it down. It seems that my style of writing is always the same...I wait until the last minute to jot down what I've previously conceived in my mind. No, it's not very practical, but it works for me. I was wondering when you would read this as you're usually one of the first to read every new installment!

      In writing this NOVEL I thought about the women in my own life and thought about how they molded me and made me who I am today. No, fortunately, none of them died, not in the physical sense of the word. They will always be alive in my memory. I cherish every single moment with them as I've been in love with several girls several times over :D I thought it fitting that Cody find someone months ago in which he could love...I can't say much more as I don't want to spoil the ending ;) There are several factors that must be tended to before we reach the end, but we're close.

      I think that the way you interpreted this installment is exactly the way I had originally intended. It brings me great joy to hear your feedback (as always) because you admonish the fact that you truly read and felt the emotions of the characters and are aware of the plot line as a whole. Gosh, you truly are indeed a "fan."

      I had no idea that Rayna meant "Queen" in your language, Maita! What a coincidence! She certainly rules over me (but I'm no King, lol). I'm so glad that you read this, Maita. Salamat.


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      prettydarkhorse 8 years ago from US

      Oh my goodness Dohn, This is a perfect ten again,

      that was just so touching, I could almost feel the longing in her voice, that she was in love with you, I could imagine Cody this time -- happy and the smile in his face, see I could imagine them, I like a scene like that when a woman want to tell the man they love that they do love them-- the first move and to tell them that they are in love with them-- it takes courage and pure love,

      And the way you describe the place, you are excellent Dohn, I remember you describing Valhalla again and I can vividly see the place, I can imagine the place by the words you use to describe it, just like 141 Division Ave.,you have a way with words, you describe them vividly, living nothing to the imagination

      And call it destiny, all powers out there making you meet again with her, things happening for a reason but there must be some plans that they see each other again. I think she was looking for you all those years and longing for you, I also think it was love at first sight, a love which Rayna cant forget.I can also see that he is longing for her, and even if you didnt share waht he feels about her seeing her for the first time again, I think he longs for her, because of the scene when he first saw her walking down the St. Augustine Church.

      Do you know what Rayna means in my language, "Queen" Dohn, I love the name, it brings back memories to your other love stories hehe. I can relate to that name as I vividly remember what you shared with Rayna" -- your love..

      As I said overll I gave a perfect ten again,

      Thank you so much, Last night when I was reading yourr other latest articles, i didnt see this one, but now it is good waking up to this installment, It is the first thing I checked out,

      Thank you and Salamat, Maita

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hey, juneaukid. Yes, I can see why some readers may be a bit confused. The current story takes place four years after Cody/Marak's return to Valhalla, thus six years after the death of his daughter. His first year back (his return to Valhalla, he "meets" her for the very first time. I realize that much of this story is told in flashbacks. I'm sorry for the confusion, but I intended it this way. Thanks as always for reading. I always look forward to hearing from you.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thank you so much, Ron. That's exactly what I like hearing! I'm so glad that you're reading this. Thank you so much for stopping by and commenting.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Ha! Thanks, Pamela! I love the fact that I keep you guys interested in what happens next. I was once told by my Creative Writing professor that writing stories that are "episodic" is a bad thing. However, in this case, I have no choice! Thanks again :D

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thank you so much, Amber! It's great to see that you're following this. I hope to see you next week! Cheers.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hahaha! Hey, Emie! That's so funny that you made mention of the fact that you wanted to be the first to comment! I always try to do the very same. One Hubber in the forums mentioned that I might be more than one person (hint???) because every time he goes to comment on someone's hubs, I'm almost always the first to comment!

      Hey, what can I say? She's the love of my life and really did inspire "Rayna" and her character. I thought it only fitting that I name her Rayna as well (which of course isn't her real name).

      Yes, I thought about that, but I gave clues as to this fact: "Everything Happens For a Reason." I'll try to keep Rayna alive as best I can ;)

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hey, DM! I think I might've came up with a new "Hub" word, what do you think? Yes, you are correct about Marak. He's everything I'd want to be and almost everything I'm not. Although I've only been writing books for ten years, he is, by far, my favorite character. Only time will tell if I'll write more stories about him :D Thanks, hot stuff ;)

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Ha! No one makes me blush more than you, Keira7! Cris A is a good friend of mine and yes I have read that hub! He never ceases to amazed me with his profound talents. I do my best to keep up with everything he does.

      You've given me new found hope in my writing and my abilities. It's friends such as yourself that assures me that I do have a place in the publishing field. I can't ask anything else of you, my friend. Bless you and thank you for all of your support. I appreciate all that you do.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Hello, Elena. I fought with the idea of whether or not I wanted to convey such controversial subject matter as the age gap between the two is very big. Time will only tell as to what will become of the two of them. I'm happy that you enjoyed this! I really do like this book cover as well. It's much "darker" than my original and is much more fitting, I think. Thank you!

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      Richard Francis Fleck 8 years ago from Denver, Colorado

      I enjoyed the intense action of this segment. I can't remember if this story goes back four years ago? If it does just a brief reference to her might be in order in a much earlier segment. Cheers!

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      rprcarz50 8 years ago

      Thank you for this latest edition. Really made me keep on reading . That's what I like


      As Always Also a2z50 Keep on Hubbing

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      Pamela Oglesby 8 years ago from United States

      Awesome chapter. I loved it and can't wait to see where it goes from here. Keep writing!!!

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      Amber Allen 8 years ago

      Hi Dohn

      Another great chapter and I am looking forward to the next.


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      emievil 8 years ago from Philippines

      Darn it! I thought I was going to be the first to comment this time. *sigh* been busy writing a new hub I guess :). Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Rayna eh. Now why wasn't I surprised she'll be here dohn :D? This is an interesting twist. But can you please give Marak a partner who will not die on him? Pleeeaassseeee :).

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      Justine76 8 years ago

      I love "Hub Bub" at the beginning..hahha!

      I can really sense your passion for righting wrongs done to innnocent people in this one, Dohn. The bit of Marak in you, maybe? And a bit of sarcastic humour still to.."his problem area". Another great chapter!!

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      Keira  8 years ago

      Hi my lovely friend and thank you. You making me blush.:) I feel so privileged by what you said.:) You are adorable.:)

      My husband said that you have some reel talent. I always know you have that special gift.:) We love your installment its fantastic. Brilliant work as always my wonderful friend. Cant wait to read you more. Btw, I have been reading some of Cris A hubs, I love what I have read so far, one of his work its about a painter Rosa Bonheur and the photos that he put there are incredible. He is good with pictures and every one that you have in "Revenche" are well choosed. Thanks again my wonderful friend. Have a very nice weekend my brilliant writer. Bless you bro.

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      Elena 8 years ago from London, UK

      Mmmmh, this is a deep Chapter. A bit hard to read in some places, but obviously it must have been hard for you to write too. (the sad bit about Rayna).

      The Story is unfolding very nicely. I was just thinking of the last words Rayna said to Cody. She seems very young, like a baby sister to him. It would be interesting to see his reaction in the next episode. He's probably thinking "Holy Smoke!". lol

      Thanks Dohn, another excellent Chapter.

      Best Wishes.

      Ps. Another nice book cover.

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      Thanks AARON99 for being the first to comment and thanks for the compliment. Will do, my friend ;)

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      AARON99 8 years ago

      Thanks for the new instalment dohn. You have written a wonderful piece. Keep writing more.