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Haiku you just for you

Updated on March 21, 2011

you

i love you


i need you


i want you


come back now


turn around


return


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      Gypsy Willow 2 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hi Perspycacious, thank you for commenting again on my humble haiku. I appreciate it.

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      Demas W Jasper 2 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      The meaning and intent is clear. I was looking for the 5-7-5 form of the typical haiku.

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      Gypsy Willow 2 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you shanmarie. I appreciate your kind comment. It was written from the heart.

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      shanmarie 2 years ago

      Good one! Says a lot with so little.

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      Gypsy Willow 2 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you Audrey. Strangely enough I am in just that same situation again waiting for him to fly home! All the best! Gypsy Willow.

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      Audrey Hunt 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      The simple messages are sometimes the most powerful. This beautiful haiku testifies to this. Tears filled my eyes. I love what you've written. A heart-felt thanks.

      Audrey

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      Gypsy Willow 3 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you DDE. It was a simple message that worked! Enjoyed your visit.

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      Devika Primić 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      A lovely photo with a simple and meaningful Haiku

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      Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Glad you enjoyed it suzettenaples, it made me chuckle too! Thanks for the comment!

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      Suzette Walker 4 years ago from Taos, NM

      I like your poem. It made me chuckle. You just come out and say it plainly and forthrightly. Love it! Love the photo too.

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      Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you Tess

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      Tess Deleon 4 years ago from At Home

      Simple words, yet very powerful. =) Great job.

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      Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks tillsontitan!

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      Volumes said in a few word! Voted up and awesome.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks MM

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Simply beautiful!!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks, he did.

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      Jim Higgins 5 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Very nice haiku. I hope he came back.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you for your kind words Laurinzo. I appreciate your visit very much.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you for your visit Don. "Less is more" right?

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      Live To Write 5 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      Beautiful poem Gypsy Willow... simple and yet well said. Gonna go and read more of yours now!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hi Michael, thanks for your comment. Where will I find my new story?

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      DON BALDERAS 5 years ago

      This reads so urgent, yet so subtly done. Congrats. I like it.

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      Michael Fielder 5 years ago from North Central West Virginia, where the green grass grows...

      To write a good Haiku, requires a skill with words and imagery that not all posses. beautiful and up... and hidden within are so many levels and subtlties...

      Thank you for this,

      Michael

      (Left a new story for you too!!! heehee)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you for your visit. You would be pleased to walk on that little trail. It is the trail in the Pembrokeshire Coastal Path

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      kidscrafts 5 years ago from Ottawa, Canada

      Nice Haiku! I love the picture too and find that in a way it goes well with your poem....I could see myself in the little trail and turning back!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Well that is a super comment Perspycacious! Thank you very much. I really appreciate it when Hubbers take the time to read and comment on my humble writing! ( I put that in as it sounds a Japanese type of thing to say after a Haiku)

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      Demas W Jasper 5 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      73 Comments, so far, and you answered each one. As impressive as the poem was, I found that impressive, too! 22 feedbacks: awesome (2nd most) and beautiful (the blue ribbon winner.) It's surely nice when Hubbers take the time to click the feedback boxes, don't we know!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you Kathleen. I'll check your hubs too. Haiku are a fun challenge

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      Kathleen Cochran 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      How have I missed you as well? Such an economy of words - but Wow - the message! I appreciate the challenge to say so much with just a few words. Glad to know you.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      OOPs sorry seoendra!

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      seoendra 5 years ago from India

      yes my dear i know that but Gypsy my name is "seoendra":(

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Yes secendra, it was written for a special some one.

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      seoendra 5 years ago from India

      Gypsy that's right......... every had some one spacial like as you explain:)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks Mark. Short and sweet is good!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hey Frank thanks for reading. I appreciate your kind comment. He did come back!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I too loved it.. ") why wouldn't he come back lol thanks for sharing :)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks for the kind comment. You must follow your heart with your writing. The rules are simple.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      I love first Haiku.. really nice...can you teach me?

      I voted up and beautiful

      Happy New year

      Debbie

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you CloudExplorer. I am honoured you call it an Epic Poem

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      Mike Pugh 5 years ago from New York City

      I'm at a loss for words here :) lol. I congratulate you on creating creating one of the shortest epic poems on hubpages I've ever read before. Nice!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks for reading anginwu!

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      anglnwu 5 years ago

      Simple and sweet--just the way haiku should be. Thanks for sharing.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks MM, glad you came by!

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi gypsy, love this haiku, brilliant!

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I actually loved it :) great job :)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Glad you stopped by thelyricwriter, thanks for the kind comment.

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      This was very interesting. Great meaning in few chosen words. Up, awwesome, and beautiful:)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks vocalcoach for the kind comment. It was written from the heart.

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      Audrey Hunt 5 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      Powerful, truthful, and from the heart. Nothing more is needed. Beautifully done. I love it!

      vocalcoach~

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      True :)

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      Elena 5 years ago from London, UK

      Short and Sweet..... :)

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you so much for visiting and the compliment. I really appreciate it.

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      Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

      Your words are so simple, yet they are very striking. I wish my poetry was even an ounce as good as yours is.

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      Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hi andycool, glad you like my Haiku. Now you can write some yourself! Thanks for the visit.

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      andycool 5 years ago from the U.S.

      Now I know what a Haiku poem is... very interesting concept. :)

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      andycool 5 years ago from the U.S.

      Very unique and interesting poem! But I've to G-search now to find out what is a Haiku poem. Ciao!

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hi travel_man! thanks for the visit. I look forward to reading your poems.

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      Ireno Alcala 6 years ago from Bicol, Philippines

      Simple, direct to the point and meaningful. Thanks for sharing. I used to write Haiku poems during my high school years. It brings back my desire to compose Haiku poems again.

      Thanks for sharing. :D

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Hi Nell, didn't need many words to get the message across. Thanks for the visit

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      Nell Rose 6 years ago from England

      Hi, short but very sweet! lol lovely!

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you for visiting my humble poem Movie Master.

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      Movie Master 6 years ago from United Kingdom

      So much said in so few words, absolutely beautiful.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      So true Jennuhlee, thanks for the visit.

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      Jennuhlee 6 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Sometimes a few words is all you need. Beautiful.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks for dropping by multiman, I really should learn more about this poetry form. I just wrote from the heart

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks Eiddwen. I have just returned from Wales where the photo was taken. Thanks for popping in!

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      Eiddwen 6 years ago from Wales

      So very straight to the point and I am not alone in liking this one obviously. I look forward to catching up with many more from you Gypsy Willow.

      Take care

      Eiddwen.

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      Jt Walters 6 years ago

      Brilliant now I get it!!

      Thank you!!

      JT

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      It was meant to be a Haiku with form like a path in the picture :(

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      JT Walters 6 years ago from Florida

      Yes, I enjoyed the poem but was distracted by the free form. It was enjoyable though.

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      Multiman 6 years ago

      Enjoyed your Haiku, though the form is different, there have been developed several other forms of Haiku as well and this tends to fall in the free haiku category. Voted up.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you JadedLove. I like your poetry too. Thanks for the visit.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you b. I appreciate your visit.

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      b. Malin 6 years ago

      How Short, How Sweet, How Beautiful! I look forward to following your Hubs.

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      JadedLove 6 years ago

      Still amazes me how much can be said in so few words. Lovely my friend.

      Johnny Love

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks blueyez!

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      blueyez408 6 years ago from San Jose, California

      Beautiful.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Enough said!!

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      Genna East 6 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Perfectly said, and all that is needed to be said. Well done!

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks Fluffy

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      Fluffy77 6 years ago from Enterprise, OR

      Beautiful, I like it.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks am

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      afro's mistake 6 years ago from dorothys kansas

      wow such a great improvement. without taking away any of the great in-depth meaning of this peom you have merely made it an even greater haiku!

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks for correcting me. I have corrected it!

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      afro's mistake 6 years ago from dorothys kansas

      nice poem, though im sorry to say that this isnt a haiku. a haiku is a japanese poem consisting of 3 lines, the first one 5 syllables, second 7, and then finally the third ending with five syllables. all in all this poem should have 17 syllables but it only has 16.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Glad you were affected by my writing. Words are very powerful. Thank you for the visit!

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      i feel that i must turn around and come back now. how strange

      lovely :]

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks Rebecca, say it as it is I say!

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      Rebecca E. 6 years ago from Canada

      short sweet and powerful, lady e took teh words out of my mouth!

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Cheers Lady_E!

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      Elena 6 years ago from London, UK

      Short and Sweet.

      Thanks. :)

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you for reading my haiku Mr. Hayes. I appreciate your positive comment.

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      Warren Keith Hayes 6 years ago from Bryson City, North Carolina

      Short, very sweet and very direct...your work says the most in such a short period of time. Very powerful and thought-provoking.

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thank you nell for reading and commenting. I appreciate your opinion.

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      Nell Rose 6 years ago from England

      HI, I love this! I think it is because I am getting the idea of Haiku now, before I just thought they were short but profound poems, but now I realise that the most important thing about them is that each word is meaningful, there are no 'waste' words, and that is what makes it so special great example, cheers nell

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Thanks for the visit Ixxy. I appreciate your kind comment.

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      lxxy 6 years ago from Beneath, Between, Beyond

      Even with such brevity, the formatting and accompanying picture do well to make this understated poem stand out. Thanks. :)

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      Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

      Well he did!