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A Short Poem I wrote called "Separated"

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    trulygiftedposted 6 years ago

    When we broke up I cried
    But were better off separated
    We fuss and fight but I
    Still love you I can't deny
    We used to have fun
    But now we have to say goodbye
    I love you so deeply that it kills me
    But I just got to let it be
    I still think about you all the time
    I wish it could work
    But it can't
    And were better off separated

    1. Rehana Stormme profile image84
      Rehana Stormmeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      This is the first poem I've read today. It's so simple and the short lines really bring out the emotion behind them. The short lines to me are like sobs, short bursts of tears. I like the 3rd line where the line breaks with "but I....". I think you managed to convey your feelings quite well in this poem. Well done smile

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    trulygiftedposted 6 years ago

    Thank you :-)

  3. melodyts profile image58
    melodytsposted 6 years ago

    So sad! Things always happen for a reason.I love your poem, it touches me. Kudos!