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   iyoung03posted 12 years ago

   Hi,
   
   I was wondering if you could give me any feedback or constructive criticism about these or any of my other hubs.  I really don't know seo that well and I feel like my writing skills are a little rusty.
   
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Starting-an-In- … re-in-Ohio
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Ideas-for-Making-Extra-Money
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Tips-and-Tricks … ut-of-Debt
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/at-home-pedicure
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Beauty-Tips-on-a-Budget

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      mskillsposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Hi iyoung03, I'm new here but I'd be happy to provide some input.
      
      I chose your hub on how to do a pedicure at home.  Yeah, I'm a guy.  And no, I've never had a pedicure in my life.  In my humble opinion, that makes me a perfect candidate for your how-to.
      
      My first impression is that your writing skills are, in fact, not rusty at all.  While I have not idea what a pumice stone looks like and would probably sprinkle epsom salt on my fries if I saw some sitting nearby, the intro had me pondering on why I haven't considered a pedicure before (... well, other than the blow to my esteemed manhood.)
      
      The list of materials needed to make the most of the at-home pedicure is nicely organized, and the actual directions are fool-proof (I have some experience as a fool.) 
      
      Overall, this hub seems like it has all of the makings of generating some great traffic and income.  If I were to change one thing, it would be to change the title into something a bit more eye-catching, like "How  to enjoy a professional quality pedicure while lounging at home" or something to that effect.   
      
      If your other hubs are of the same quality, I don't think you have much to worry about.  The SEO aspects are certainly something to investigate, but I'll leave that for someone who is a bit more savvy.

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      kschangposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      I checked your "get out of debt hub". A few suggestions:
      
      1) Need more details in "take stock of where you are".
      
      A lot of the people in debt are simply spending more than they take in, often on impulsive purchases and splurges they often are not even aware of. Thus, you need to encourage a couple more concrete steps, such as
      
      a) ask for receipt EVERYWHERE you spend money, and KEEP the receipt.
      
      b) keep a MONEY JOURNAL on where every penny went. Track how much money (including spare change) one starts with every day, then at the end of the day, track changes.
      
      That, combined with daily receipt posting, will give one TRUE appreciation of where the money went.
      
      The monthly bills are not a problem: you know how much they'll be from month to month pretty much. It's the little things, like $5 Caramel Macchiado you must have in the morning that adds up (and are virtually never counted).
      
      2) You basically need to know where the money went before you can reduce the expenses. Just setting a budget won't help if one does not realize where the money went, and thus cannot set a realistic budget.
      
      3) You didn't deal much with the psychological incentives and preps. Keep reminders around the house, like "I will reduce my debt by $5000 in by New Year's Day", do periodic personal audits (mark them on calendar), little personal motivations, and so on. It's a long-term commitment, not a short-term rush.

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   iyoung03posted 12 years ago

   thanks for the feedback.  I'll consider sprucing up the title.

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   iyoung03posted 12 years ago

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   iyoung03posted 12 years ago

   Thanks for the tips, I may integrate some of them when I update my hub.
   
   I welcome more feedback please.

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   iyoung03posted 12 years ago

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