I'd like feedback on my Hub: What to Pack on a Trip to Sri Lanka?

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   Thishposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub What to Pack on a Trip to Sri Lanka?. What can I do to improve? Thanks a million!!

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      calculus-geometryposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Thish,
      I think your hub is very interesting and certainly helpful to anyone traveling to Sri Lanka.  However, your hub has English language issues, and that is probably why your hub is not passing QAP. For example, you wrote
      
      You do not have to bring different types of shoes and having one all-purpose pair of sandal can survive you.
      
      which isn't quite right.  A better way to write this is
      
      You do not have to bring different types of shoes and with one all-purpose pair of sandals you can survive.
      
      There are a lot of other sentences with structural problems like this, so you should think about finding an editor or proofreader to help you.  Best of luck.

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         Thishposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         @calculus-geometr , Thank you very much for your time taken to go through my hub and also giving me useful feedback. As per your suggestion i went through the article and corrected some grammar mistakes, typos and and re-phrased some sentences. Hope the hub is better now and hope i will get it featured soon. Thanks again!

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   Thishposted 9 years ago

   Even after doing all these and making it look good still i get the message that my hub is not pass through the QAP. Can someone please please help me what else I can do?

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   Millionaire Tipsposted 9 years ago

   Oh now I want to visit Sri Lanka! It looks like a beautiful country.  I think your hub is well written.  Here is what I would do to improve it:
   
   1.  Add an introduction.  Maybe start with where it is and why people would want to visit, etc. I know the video does that, but some people may skip the video.  You start too abruptly with the first item and an Amazon capsule without telling us the purpose of the hub.
   
   2.  Add a summary. It ends just as quickly with the last item.
   
   3. Check again for spelling errors.  There was a word that I think was supposed to be Columbo (C0l0mbo) in the Travel with Less Money section. I think you write well, but just like everyone else, it helps to proofread and proofread again.
   
   4.  You are trying to sell a backpack, sandals and a camera.  Yes it is possible that people might want to buy these things to go on any trip, but I'm not sure why these products are the best for a trip to Sri Lanka specifically.  I would include a description about why you are specifically recommending these particular products.

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      Thishposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      @Millionaire Tips
      Thank you very much!!!!
      Those were indeed very valid useful suggestions. For a moment i thought why on earth i did not think about these points.
      Thanks again! and really appreciate your help and time.
      I did the changes to the article with your suggestion and fingers crossed to get ti pass through QAP.
      regards
      Thish

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   Thishposted 9 years ago

   Hi,
   Thanks everyone who helped me so far. But unfortunately my hub is not still QAP passed. The email i get from hubpages is that I have Spam elements in my article. But i  cannot figure what they refer as I have not added any spam there. Does anyone understand what it means for having spamy elements and why it is not QAP passed.
   Thanks a bunch!

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