Help me with this hub

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   englightenedsoulposted 13 years ago

   http://hubpages.com/hub/Christmas-Trains
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Christmas-Symbols
   
   These are my 2 christmas hub that I would want the 60dcers and others to provide criticsm on.  I would like to know if the on-page optimization is strong, and if there is any way I can monetize it better. 
   
   Thanks to everyone in advance.

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   skyfireposted 13 years ago

   Check the intro para of christmas trains. People who celebrate christmas already know about those things. You've to convince them about these items overall in first para.  Nelle can correct me on this if i'm wrong.
   
   I learned this thing with testing/epic fails. There is a book
   on writing a web copy by maria, that will help in long run.
   
   Your product selection is good. I like the xmas theme seperators on your hubs.

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      englightenedsoulposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for the suggestions skyfire, I would  incorporate them and honestly I am not at all good with sales hubs, lot of learning to do.  I will check out the book too, but can I have the name please??

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   sunforgedposted 13 years ago

   Maria Veloso "writing web copy that sells"

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      skyfireposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      This.

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   englightenedsoulposted 13 years ago

   Thanks SF.  Will download it asap and read.  I cant lose out on christmas!!  Anyways, is there a limit as to how many links I can submit.  I would like criticism on one of my business hub too.

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   sunforgedposted 13 years ago

   idk - trying to see how we can get more 60dc involvement in the process. Was just putting pout feelers on interest.
   
   Its actually a very solid hub - will try and nitpick - but certainly nothing glaring.

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   lakeerieartistsposted 13 years ago

   Sorry, sunforged, just woke up here, but are you asking for critiquing of hubs for 60dc?

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   lakeerieartistsposted 13 years ago

   ES, I am responding to your request on your hubs.

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      englightenedsoulposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Lakeerie, thank you so much for your detailed criticism.  very much appreciated.

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   I checked out the hubs you requested. I'm not the greatest person for advice about what you requested, but things seem pretty well designed and presented, so with that said. Good job!

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      sunforgedposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      hi Cags!
      
      We were trying to see if we could get some uber critical feedback/second eyes on our on page optimization. ES was brave enough to be the first to come under the radar.
      
      Did you happen to notice that although she has used many photos...not one of them has a caption , so she is missing out on optimizing her images for image search and the alt- attribute for basic on page tweaking?

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         Cagsilposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Hey SF, that is why I said I wasn't the greatest person to ask for advice about what she requested. Therefore, since I didn't say it was missing anything would lead to the fact that I overlooked it?

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         saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         aaaa, are the images also need optimization? Can anyone find my hub while searching for an image?

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            skyfireposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            Yes.

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               lakeerieartistsposted 13 years agoin reply to this

               Sorry, I read this thread before the other one.  ES, you can put my critiques here if you want.  I did miss the images though.  That is a great point.  One more reason arrow pointing to your hub.

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         englightenedsoulposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Point taken SF..Now off to optimize my images.  This point from your on page optimization hub completely skipped my mind. 
         
         And thanks Cags for leaving kind comments and checking my hub out!!

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   Anesidoraposted 13 years ago

   Great-looking hub, I read Christmas symbols and rated it up! I love your use of the divider images, and I like the way you highlighted the sales items. A tiny bit of proofreading might be in order, but other than that it looks very nice.
   
   Only thing I'd suggest is trying to work your keywords into your text and headings a bit more. Other than in the first capsule it doesn't show up.
   
   It's a tough draw though, since the subject is broad. Easier to focus on incorporating keywords on narrower subjects.
   
   You know, I somehow decided the Amazon modules looked better left white, and haven't ever thought about it since then. Highlighted the way you did them really drew my eyes to them. Good idea.

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    englightenedsoulposted 13 years ago

    @Anesidora
    
    Thanks for you kind comments and yea, I will proof read it again.  And may be you are right, I should use my keywords a bit more but that may look unnatural, but will still try to incorporate. 
    
    And once again I would like to thank you for providing critique.  I really appreciate it!!

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    LeanManposted 13 years ago

    Very good in my eyes, just the descriptions for pictures missing and titles for some of the amazon capsules also... extra chance for some additional keywords for google...

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