OK, I edited and reorganized my first hub. So, what do you think now?

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   Butch Toolposted 9 years ago

   OK, I went through and added lots of text boxes so I could insert the Amazon ads and pictures more aesthetically. I also updated the content a bit to try to make the keywords not seem so awkward. Additionally, I broke the large blocks of text into smaller sections (some are still fairly big, but considerably better than before) and added some italic font to the main points. What do you think? Thanks.
   
   http://butchtool.hubpages.com/hub/Corpo … nd-Forever
   
   
   P.S. I also added quotation marks around "bestest" since I want to show that it isn't an accidental grammar error. Does anyone know if saying "bestest" friend vs. bestest friend" changes the way google looks at that as a keyword? I know that when I search it seems that periods existing on the given sites don't always matter in the results, but I am not sure about whether quotations in the content matter (I know if you search with quotations it makes a difference to the results, though).

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      LongTimeMotherposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Hello BT. I didn't see your hub before your recent edit, but I just took a look at it now.
      
      I don't really understand why you chose to use the term 'bestest'. I doubt anyone googling for advice about corporate gift baskets would include 'bestest' in their search term. What do you see as being the appeal in that word?
      
      Instead of using such an ungainly word, I suggest you replace it with 'New Best Friend' or something similar ... and drop the word 'forever'.
      
      I didn't watch the video, but I wouldn't be including the word 'racist' in this type of hub. I suggest you should try and find a different video.
      
      Also, I see no advantage (and a few disadvantages) to relying on italics. You could quite simply break a few of those paragraphs into two, and then the point you are trying to stress would be more obvious (ie positioned at beginning or end of a paragraph.)
      
      A good writer doesn't need to rely on italics. Present your information as clearly as you can, and have a little more confidence in the ability of readers to understand what you are saying.
      
      Good luck.

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         Butch Toolposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for taking the time to respond. I will go through and update it pretty soon.

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Butch:
      
      I really like this article, but here are some improvements to consider:
      
      only use "." when you have a list.  (This is probably a typo on your part)
      Your title is way too long...something like "Corporate Gift Baskets | Choose Them Carefully" gets the idea across without all of the frills.
      
      The same is true for your capsule headings.  You need to shorten them.
      
      I also would get rid of bolded and italicized words, their use is no longer good for online articles.
      
      Also, make your ads full width to match your photos.  This makes your article more mobile device friendly.
      
      You are not exactly attributing your photo capsules correctly:  you must name the photo, it's license and where it came from on the first line and the URL on the second line to do it right.
      
      None of these are major corrections, but all will enhance your article and make it score and rank higher.  Good job!

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         Butch Toolposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the suggestions. I went through and made some modifications, but I may change it more later when I have more time.
         
         With regard to the photo capsules, I simply entered the source in the "Name of source (optional)" and site link where I found it in the "Source URL (optional)" as are the options when I go in to the editing page. I see 3 boxes asking for the "Caption (optional)" (which I assume is the text describing the picture), Name of Source, and Source URL.
         
         It seems that the system automatically put the caption first and source on the lower line, as well as making the Source Name automatically the link for the Source URL. How do I change this?

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            TIMETRAVELER2posted 9 years agoin reply to this

            You cannot change it.  All you have to do is put the correct information on each line.  Although the word "optional" appears, it is not a good idea to avoid or partially negate using proper accreditation.  There is a section on this in the learning center you ought to read because it explains this much better than I can.
            
            So, you have your photo,, the name, license, and other info on line one, the http on line two, and the caption in the box after line two.  How it comes up on screen is how it should look.  For example, you would have the photo, the source as shown in the following example, and the http, but only the caption and the source line will appear under the photo of your post.
            
            
            An example of a teardrop trailer. (caption)
            Source: Liftham, CC-BY-3.0, self pub, via commons.wikimedia.org (source line)
            
            I avoid doing as much of this as possible by using photos from Pixabay and Morguefile, which are free public domain photo sites that do not require accreditation.  Saves me a ton of work, and they have great photos, all of which you can edit.

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               Butch Toolposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               Maybe I am misunderstanding what I am doing wrong....isn't that how my photos are appearing? With the caption followed by the source?
               
               For example:
               "Now this is a nice, healthy fruit basket. Lots of variety to suit anyone's taste. A good example of how intriguing and unique corporate gift baskets can be. (caption)
               Source: By BGalore, via Wikimedia Commons"
               and
               "A colorful assortment is always nice when used as company gifts. Things that don't spoil will always be welcomed, as they are easier to re-purpose, if needed.
               Source: By Cullen328, via Wikimedia Commons"
               
               The source name is hyperlinked to the website source.
               
               I am not sure exactly how what I am doing is different than what you are referencing in your example. Do you mean I have to actually include the http://whicheverwebsite.com in the source name so it shows in the text of the source section even though it is already hyperlinked to that site?
               
               So, in one of the examples from above, I would need it to be:
               "Now this is a nice, healthy fruit basket. Lots of variety to suit anyone's taste. A good example of how intriguing and unique corporate gift baskets can be. (caption)
               Source: By BGalore, via Wikimedia Commons at http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File% … .jpg" ?

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                  TIMETRAVELER2posted 9 years agoin reply to this

                  If it is required by the site, you must show the license as well as the other info you mentioned..  There is another thread here by Catherine Giordano that just showed up that it explains all of this more clearly.  Kristy Kirwan, one of our moderators, does the explaining.  Maybe that will clear this up for you.
                  
                  Also, you really need to read the info in the HP learning center about this and refer to it as needed.  That is how I found out I was doing it wrong awhile back.
                  
                  I would also suggest looking at the images in some of the hubs by Writer Fox and Patty Inglish to see how they do it.  They are two of the best writers on this site.

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               Butch Toolposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               Oh, actually, I realized that maybe I need to include the CC2 or CC3 or whatever category of sharing the photo is under. Is that the main part I'm missing?

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