I'd like feedback on my Hub: Concepts in modern marketing, every marketer or bus

  1. Chouaib SAAID profile image61
    Chouaib SAAIDposted 22 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Concepts in modern marketing, every marketer or business owner should know (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 22 months agoin reply to this

      It's an interesting, upbeat article. I liked the real-life examples included.

      You should go through and check your grammar and punctuation. You begin sentences/paragraphs with a lower case letter quite often.

          One :Real time marketing.
          Two: The notion of changing the context to influence choice.
          Three: crowdsourcing.
          Four: The long tail.
          Five: Dynamic pricing.

      See what I mean? Inconsistent. The format is messy too. Your sub-headings are difficult to follow, with 'tools' and 'examples' scattered through the piece. I'd take all the text, paste it into Word or LibreOffice and look carefully at the layout. Consistency is a must in a long, complex article.

      Your first sentence is a little unwieldy. Try to make it more snappy so that it invites the reader to carry on.

      Are the images your own or are they free for you to use? They're a little overwhelming, to be honest.

      The other thing that is questionable is that there appears to be two different writing styles. For example, your final paragraph:

      "This five concept should give you a good idea how modern marketing it done, I tried to cover as much I can, and please feel free to comment I want to get feed back to this articles."

      It doesn't seem to be the same writing as the main body of the article. It's obviously written by someone not fluent in English. Confusing.