Hub feedback and improvement

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   Gina Welds-Hulseposted 20 months ago

   Hi, everyone!  I would like some feedback and ideas for improvement for my hub entitled:
   What's The Fascination With These Little Round Balls Of Oyster Secretion?
   
   It is eligible to be moved into one of the Network sites, so your thoughts and feedback will be greatly appreciated.
   
   I am looking specifically for feedback on:
   
   Title/Subtitle Capitalization And Sizing
   Spelling/Grammar
   
   Thanks, in advance.

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 20 months agoin reply to this

      I did a quick read, and here are my thoughts:
      
      You are not properly titling your subtitles.  Main words should all be capitalized.
      You have too much white space.  You can eliminate this problem by using wide photos rather than placing them on the side.
      Your ad is not appropriate for your topic.
      Your hub is far too long.
      Your photos are not accredited and do not appear to be well edited for clarity.
      Most of the information you provide, while great, is not really original.  It can be found by anybody wishing to research your topic on the net.
      Finally, your title is too long and it really does not match your content.  You talk more about history than why people are fascinated.
      
      I would separate the article into several shorter ones and add original info and more appropriate ads to them.
      
      Your spelling and structure seem OK, and I think you have a good basis for several articles.  Remember that people who read internet articles have very short attention spans!

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         Gina Welds-Hulseposted 19 months agoin reply to this

         Thank you for your detailed feedback.  I will get to work on those. You've given me more to consider than the original email from HP, but I believe those suggestion will greatly enhance the hub.
         
         Thanks, again.
         
         Gina

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            TIMETRAVELER2posted 19 months agoin reply to this

            I'm sure you'll do fine.  It just takes time to get the hang of things here.  One thing that will help you is to take a peek at a few hubs written by others here to see how they do things.  Good Luck.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 19 months ago

   If you're writing because you want readers to find your Hubs, then I suggest you read my Hub about how to optimise your Hubs to make money (you'll find it on the slider on my profile).   There are several sections of that Hub which will help you.
   
   The most relevant one is the section about titles.  You've made the classic mistake:  you've written the kind of title we were all told to write in high school.  It might be a great title if it were in a print magazine, but it's a dreadful title for the internet. 
   
   In the print world, you write a catchy title to intrigue the reader.  On the internet, you write a title that tells the searcher what the article is about.  That will mean it's more boring, but that's what you need to do if you want people to read your Hubs!

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      Gina Welds-Hulseposted 19 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks, Marisa.  This definitely helps.  Heading to your hub right now!!
      Gina

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