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I'd like a feed back on my hub: The Hell there is

  1. Ehimen Aimakhu profile image60
    Ehimen Aimakhuposted 12 months ago

    Please, help me improve on this

    1. theraggededge profile image96
      theraggededgeposted 12 months ago in reply to this

      http://hubpages.com/religion-philosophy … l-there-is

      I shan't comment on the actual content but you can improve your hub in several ways.

      1. Put the Title in Title Case - like that.
      2. Get rid of the ratings capsule - it's just for recipe hubs.
      3. Break the text up into smaller paragraphs. Remember that many people access the web on their mobiles.
      4. Replace the Amazon product with something that relates to the actual content.
      5. Your poll needs a meaningful question relating to the topic.
      6. The hub is very long, so go through it and cut out as many unnecessary words and phrases as you can.
      7. Watch out for capitalisation where it's not necessary. You used an upper case A for alcoholism where lower case is correct.

      I'll let others review the content and grammar issues. I think you have to be careful stating your opinions as fact. No-one can really know anything about heaven and hell.

      Good luck.

      1. Ehimen Aimakhu profile image60
        Ehimen Aimakhuposted 12 months ago in reply to this

        Thank you very much, I'm motivated.

    2. Robert Sacchi profile image87
      Robert Sacchiposted 12 months ago in reply to this

      I read you hub here are a couple of possible improvements you may want to consider:
      "if you show what you advice" it seems you want to use the word advise.
      You may want to layout the poem as a poem, a new line after every punctuation mark.  That would make it read as a poem.

      Good luck.

      1. Ehimen Aimakhu profile image60
        Ehimen Aimakhuposted 12 months ago in reply to this

        Thank you

 
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