My first poem on hp. Did I do it right?

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   TessSchlesingerposted 17 months ago

   I don't usually publish poetry on hubpages because, from experience, fiction and poetry don't do to well. However, with so much happening that appears to be propelling us to WWIII, I felt I wanted to share this poem.
   
   http://hubpages.com/literature/A-Poem-a … ible-Thing
   
   My issue is that I'm not sure how to best present poems on HP.
   
   What works best?
   
   Thanks.

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      Jodahposted 17 months agoin reply to this

      I just read your poem and the presentation is fine. You have added additional text which is good. HubPages likes you to add a video but not essential. That's up to you.

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         TessSchlesingerposted 17 months agoin reply to this

         Okat. Thanks  I would love to be able to do a video reciting the poem but have no idea how to do it.

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            Jodahposted 17 months agoin reply to this

            You can video yourself reciting it, put it on YouTube and then copy and save the link on the hub. Saying that, I have not done that. I have had other people recite my poems on YouTube videos though.

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               TessSchlesingerposted 17 months agoin reply to this

               That's just it! I wouldn't know how to video myself, and I'm very camera shy. What I would like to do is do some sort of power point presentation, do a voice over of the poem, and then convert it into a video. Unhappily, I don't know how to do that.
               
               Who does your videos for you?

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                  Jodahposted 17 months agoin reply to this

                  I submitted one poem to a writers festival where you could have it read by a professional actor and put on YouTube for $15 or they'd make a short movie out of it for I think $150. However since then, my son reads them and puts them on YouTube for me. He doesn't video himself just chooses an appropriate picture and does a voice over.

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      Farlin Ninangposted 17 months agoin reply to this

      I just read your poem from your given link and I must say that it lacks of something. I can't just really directly say what's lacking but check your poem again and again and you'll see the missing piece that I have said. But then, good choice of words.

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         TessSchlesingerposted 17 months agoin reply to this

         I assume you're a troll because you joined 35 hours ago. Your opinion has little worth when you have no idea why you're saying something. I take it as malice.
         
         What I was asking about was the presentation of the poem - how it is laid out.
         
         Jodah gave me the kind of information I was looking for.

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   Will Apseposted 17 months ago

   My mother groaned my father wept.
   Into the dangerous world I leapt:
   Helpless, naked, piping loud;
   Like a fiend hid in a cloud.
   
   If you think the above poem is OK, you should forget about poetry right now, lol.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 17 months ago

   The last link to more rhyming poetry is unlikely to be approved, as it's not related to the main topic of the Hub.

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      TessSchlesingerposted 17 months agoin reply to this

      Aha. Thank you. I will remove it.

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