For the life of me, I cannot figure out why this piece doesn't work

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   Marisa Wrightposted 8 years ago

   OK here's my take.
   
   The title is too long.  Always remember that Google shows less than 70 characters of a title in the search results, so anything longer is superfluous.
   
   Solaras has some good advice in this post:
   
   http://hubpages.com/forum/post/2852249
   
   What strikes me here is that you promise to tell people how to get rid of bed bugs, but within a paragraph you're talking about how to tell whether you've got them.   Some people will get impatient with that, thinking, "I already know I've got them, tell me how to get rid of them!" - they will click back to the SERPs and look for a more helpful article.
   
   So, decide whether you're writing a Hub about getting rid of them, or about deciding whether you have them.  Maybe it's worth two separate Hubs? 
   
   I'm laughing right now because I tried typing "Do I have bed bugs" into Google and got "Do I have bed bugs or fleas?" (which sounds like a good title for a Hub, I can imagine that's a common question) but I also got "Do I have bed bugs or am I paranoid?"!!
   
   Notice that if you edit this Hub, it will probably be unpublished because you include a steam cleaner without saying why you recommend that particular model.  Ditto the bed bug spray.
   
   Overall, I feel the Hub needs to be reorganised as it doesn't flow in a logical order.

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      TessSchlesingerposted 8 years agoin reply to this

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         Marisa Wrightposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         There's nothing wrong with covering everything. It's the ORDER in which you do it that's important.
         
         The important thing is to meet people's expectations first.  Give the information you promised, and don't waffle around with other stuff.
         
         If, AFTER you've met their expectations, you want to go into the background of the subject or offer further help on other aspects - that's perfectly fine.

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