I'd like feedback on my Hub: Gods and Glory: Age of Kings review.

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    Pumpkineck Bortposted 23 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Gods and Glory: Age of Kings review. (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. SmartAndFun profile image95
      SmartAndFunposted 23 months agoin reply to this

      I only skimmed it quickly, but here are my first impressions:

      Remove the close-up of the in-your-face woman's cleavage. Not a great first impression, and inappropriate for the article and this site, as well.

      Use only images which belong to you, or you have a legal right to use, and source them so that admin knows you are using them legally.

      Add an introduction paragraph.

      Add more in-depth information.

      Use subheads to organize your information.

      I am not a gamer whatsoever. I hope those who are will chime in with more specific advice.

      You are off to a decent start. Once you get the hang of it here I think you will do fine. It can take a few tries and some getting acquainted at first.

      Edited to add: Write the article as though you were writing it for a professional gaming magazine rather than a casual blog.

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        Pumpkineck Bortposted 23 months agoin reply to this

        Thanks! I appreciate the encouraging words. It was my first attempt and I've gotten some pretty harsh comments. Seems a hateful place.

        1. DrMark1961 profile image97
          DrMark1961posted 23 months agoin reply to this

          People are not being hateful. They are taking the time to give you advice that might improve your hub. If you do not want help, do not ask for it.
          If you want everyone to tell you how great your writing is and that you do not need any improvements, try your friends on Facebook.

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image97
    Rupert Taylorposted 23 months ago

    It's my impression that HubPages does not like personal accounts very much and neither do I. If I'm a typical a typical reader (not a given) and I come across sentences such as these:

    "I linked my Facebook account, steeled my loins and jumped right in! After a battle where I literally did nothing, I found myself in a chat room."

    I'm out of there.
    Sorry, but I'm not interested in the fact that you found yourself in a chat room, and I don't think may other people are.

    1. Marisa Wright profile image97
      Marisa Wrightposted 23 months agoin reply to this

      HubPages hates personal stories which don't offer any useful lessons, but they love personal experiences of places or things. In fact I think HubPages prefers it when you inject some personal warmth and personality into a Hub rather than writing a more formal third person style article.

      However, it's also important not to get bogged down in personal chat, which this Hub does. If you take too long to get to the "meat" of the article, you'll lose the reader.  I felt that was the case with this Hub.

      A good example is a Hub I read, which offered a fantastic tutorial about how to make a type of quilt.  It definitely "adds value" in HubPages' eyes if you can talk about how YOU made that quilt and how you found the experience - it gives the reader confidence that you know what you're doing.  However, this particular Hubber spent the first four paragraphs talking about how she got inspired to make it by a family heirloom blah blah - the average reader wouldn't have stuck with it long enough to discover the wonderfully detailed tutorial further down the page!

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      Pumpkineck Bortposted 23 months agoin reply to this

      It was a review, it had to be a personal account. They also wanted humor. Was my first attempt. I found your "advice" a tad cold and abrasive. Sorry, but I'm glad your "out of here". Marisa, thank you for being polite. I appreciate your input very much.

      1. Marisa Wright profile image97
        Marisa Wrightposted 23 months agoin reply to this

        Actually I've found the HubPages staff can be a bit lacking in humour, especially where photos are concerned!  Which is why I'm pretty sure that picture of boobs is a problem.

        For one thing, it's blurry.  I had a picture of a schnauzer (dog) on one of my hubs and although the picture was high def, its front paw was blurry (because it was in motion). It was just the front paw but it was still rejected.

        For another, the Hub is not about tits.  I'm guessing they do belong to one of the characters but that's not enough of a connection.  To give you another example, I had a Hub about beauty products for scrawny necks (which are called turkey necks, right?).  So I thought a humorous picture of a turkey with a scrawny neck would give the readers a laugh.  Nope, rejected because "the Hub is not about turkeys". 

        So, light-hearted is great but there's definitely a limit.

  3. SmartAndFun profile image95
    SmartAndFunposted 23 months ago

    Well too bad, they already deleted their account. I hope they'll come back under another name and try again. IMHO if they would take a little time to get better acquainted with how HP works and what admin wants, they would do just fine here.

    Looks like they had a knee-jerk reaction to criticism. Maybe after they cool off a bit they will reconsider the advice.

    I think people don't realize how few of us are left here on the forums to give advice. With so many people asking for feedback and so few people to provide it, there is no time for hand-holding and sugar coating, unfortunately. Feedback has become a slap-dash effort; often a link to the learning center is the only response a feedback request gets. This writer actually received fairly lengthy responses and specific advice. Unfortunately, they weren't prepared for the frankness of it.

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      calculus-geometryposted 23 months agoin reply to this

      Wow that's at least the third one.  I didn't get a chance to read this person's article, was it about the same quality as the hubs by "wade rowe" and "imortalone"? Looks like those guys gave up after a couple attempts to get featured, but they didn't delete their accounts.  Those two had trouble with grammar but this guy seems okay judging from his forum posts.  I hope he comes back and learns that he doesn't have to follow advice he doesn't agree with, and that HP forums are full of people giving contradictory and bad advice, LOL. You just need a good filter.

      1. DrMark1961 profile image97
        DrMark1961posted 23 months agoin reply to this

        Maybe this guy and Mort Alone can start a support group together and be friends on FB.

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          calculus-geometryposted 23 months agoin reply to this

          For the longest time I thought his name was supposed to be read as "I, Mort, alone" and then much later I realized he just misspelled "immortal one."

          1. DrMark1961 profile image97
            DrMark1961posted 23 months agoin reply to this

            I like your reading a lot more. With the personality he showed to all of us, he probably is alone.

      2. SmartAndFun profile image95
        SmartAndFunposted 23 months agoin reply to this

        Yeah, I just quickly skimmed it, but as I recall it wasn't too far off the mark. Better than Morty for sure. I guess I missed out on "wade rowe."

        Oh well.


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