I'd like feedback on my Hub: Communism and Socialism - an overview.

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    kitty9posted 9 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Communism and Socialism - an overview. (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Kitty,

      Your hub needs an introduction. You start off with an abrupt list of bullet points. An intro tells the reader what the article is about, why it is important and what they can expect to get out of reading it.

      In fact, there are way too many bullet point lists. You might think of taking some out and writing them as paragraphs. At the moment there is no 'human voice' in the article, just a staccato barking of facts. It almost looks as if you have copied them from a textbook or Wikipedia. This is not allowed.

      Check your grammar and writing for typos, "Karl Marx is a German philosopher who did not picked up a gun."

      Hope that helps.

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        kitty9posted 9 months agoin reply to this

        Thanks a lot

 
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