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I'd like feedback on my Hub: 5 Great Excuses To Eat Dark Chocolates

  1. premjayaram profile image79
    premjayaramposted 6 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub 5 Great Excuses To Eat Dark Chocolates. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. chasmac profile image99
    chasmacposted 6 months ago

    The title is much better but same problems as before with the article. - Too many grammar errors.

    Look at your first sentences. "Are you a CHOCOHOLIC? Well, if you do then great news!"

    It's "...if you ARE" not ".. if you DO". The clue is in the opening question "ARE you...?"

    And in the next sentence

    "Did you know that studies have found that chocolates contain more than 300 components that is beneficial to your health."

    That's a question so should have a question mark. Also ... 300 components that ARE (not "IS") beneficial...

    You have many similar errors.

    1. SakinaNasir53 profile image87
      SakinaNasir53posted 6 months ago in reply to this

      Hi premjayaram! smile Welcome to HubPages.

      I agree with chasmac here. Also, I noticed that you have misplaced points 4 and 5. Do correct the numbers there. Remove the Amazon capsule and see if your hub gets featured.

      I hope this helps. Good luck!

      1. premjayaram profile image79
        premjayaramposted 6 months ago in reply to this

        Thanks Sakina
        Good luck with your writing too smile

        1. SakinaNasir53 profile image87
          SakinaNasir53posted 6 months ago in reply to this

          You're most welcome and thank you! smile

    2. premjayaram profile image79
      premjayaramposted 6 months ago in reply to this

      Hi Chasmac
      Thanks for your feedback.

 
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