I'd like feedback on my Hub: The Blind Beggar of Bethnal Green

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   John Welfordposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub The Blind Beggar of Bethnal Green (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi John,
      
      I'd suggest you remove the links and add some more content. The hub is a bit short - there must be other stories you could add? If you can find some, then I'd also change the title to "Stories of Bethnal Green", or something else that people might be searching for.
      
      Hope that helps.

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         John Welfordposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the suggestions. However, I added the links because I thought that was a way of improving a Hub!

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Not any more. HP wants to see your article stand alone - it certainly doesn't want you sending visitors off to other sites. They will allow some judicious links but if the hub hasn't got past QAP, it's often the links which are the problem.

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      Jason mackenzieposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi...may I compliment you on a riveting narrative. However, does it meet the requisite word count? And one sentence I found to be particularly long-winded - 'The story was first told in the 15th century, although it did not appear in print until 1765.....'. How about breaking it down into 2 sentences? Hope I have been helpful, thanks, regards...

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         John Welfordposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Jason, Thanks for your comment, although the piece in question is now "up and running". What precisely is the requisite word count? I don't think I've seen this stated anywhere. I don't have a problem with the sentence you mention - to break it up would surely cause a disjoint in the meaning. However, I am grateful to you for taking the time to say what you did!

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            I agree, the sentence is fine as it is

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   Glenis Rixposted 7 years ago

   The story of the blind beggar is interesting and your hub is well written. In order to pass the quality assessment criteria you might find it useful to address the hints at appear at the top right of the page when you are in editing mode.
   
   Also, I think the hub needs to be more focussed, as It currently is a little confusing for the reader  and difficult to categorise. At the beginning I thought that it was going to be about gangland but then it became focussed on early English history and mythology. If your intention was principally to write about the story behind the myth then you could exclude the information about the Krays (which could be the basis of a separate hub) and provide more information about the man behind the story. If you intended to write more generally about the East End ( which doesn't need to be enclosed in quotation marks, as it is a proper noun) then it would be a good idea to include a map of the area and more photographs. Hope this helps.

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      John Welfordposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Glenis, Thanks for taking the trouble to comment, although the Hub in question is now up and running. I would love to have provided more information about the blind beggar and the son of Simon de Montfort, but there really is none that could be offered - he is a very shadowy figure! To many people the Blind Beggar is a pub with a sinister reputation, so the purpose of the article was to provide an explanation as to why it has the name that it does - the whole point is to bring the stories together, not split them up!

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   Jason mackenzieposted 7 years ago

   Hi, I think hubs need to be 700+ words, which your hub must be since it has been approved. Regarding the sentence - my reason for pointing out was with readability in mind. That said if you are okay with it, then be it so. Cheers!!!

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