I'd like feedback on my Hub: The Joy of becoming a Mother... and what no one tel

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  1. Empathsoul profile image51
    Empathsoulposted 16 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub The Joy of becoming a Mother... and what no one tells you! (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Jason mackenzie profile image61
      Jason mackenzieposted 16 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, a sentence that caught my attention was this one - A far as the mother child bond...Did you mean 'As far as...'?

      The line preceding this - Some Stuff They don't tell you... - could be highlighted and treated as a heading.

      Thanks, regards...

      1. Empathsoul profile image51
        Empathsoulposted 16 months agoin reply to this

        Okay. Thank you for pointing that out.

  2. Luke Holm profile image97
    Luke Holmposted 16 months ago

    Just a few things I saw immediately: 1) Capitalize all major words in your title, 2) Narrow your title down or get rid of ellipsis, 3) Create sub-headers for your text boxes, 4) Mom/Mommy/Mother isn't a proper noun unless you are naming someone specific, 5) Make the "stuff they don't tell you" section (the one with all the bullet points) a separate section.  Overall, though, I thought your hub was informative.  I think the sub headers will be very helpful for your audience smile Keep up the good work and good luck!

    1. Empathsoul profile image51
      Empathsoulposted 16 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Luke. Thanks for your feedback. I removed the ellipsis. I thought it added a little flair to it. I guess not. I'll incorporate subheaders.

      1. Luke Holm profile image97
        Luke Holmposted 16 months agoin reply to this

        Empath, I think the ellipsis definitely adds flair and tone, but I wonder how it would affect your SEO?

        1. Empathsoul profile image51
          Empathsoulposted 16 months agoin reply to this

          Yes I see what your saying. didn't think about that.

  3. Rupert Taylor profile image99
    Rupert Taylorposted 16 months ago

    As Luke pointed out Caps are not needed on mother and your opening sentence has a grammar problem:

    "Being a Mother isn't just carrying and caring for a life and its [should be it is of it's} more than just giving birth to a child.

    Also, do you have permission to use the illustrations? They must be free of copyright restrictions and properly credited.

    1. Empathsoul profile image51
      Empathsoulposted 16 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you for your feedback. I created my own illustrations online. If I add them do I say the source is the site name or do I put Me/Myself as the source... If I use a google pic how exactly would I get permission. Thanks in advance.

      1. Marisa Wright profile image97
        Marisa Wrightposted 16 months agoin reply to this

        If you use a Google pic, you are potentially breaking the law.   You need to go to the original source of the picture, contact the person who owns the website where it's shown, and ask them if it's OK to use the picture. If they give you permission, be sure to keep a copy of their email as proof.   If they say no, you can't use it.  If they don't reply, you can't use it (silence is not approval). 

        It's much easier to use a site like Pixabay.com - all their photos are free to use and you can customise them however you like.

  4. Marisa Wright profile image97
    Marisa Wrightposted 16 months ago

    Off topic because it's not relevant to getting the Hub featured, but it worried me that you say things like:

    - You instantly fall in love the second you meet each other
    - Regardless of your upbringing your motherly instincts will automatically kick in

    I've known mothers who haven't bonded with their baby for several months, and whose motherly instincts haven't automatically kicked in.  They have felt worthless and depressed because they were promised throughout pregnancy that they would form an instant bond.  As a result, they feel like they must be an awful person and a terrible mother, and often they suffer in silence because they're too ashamed to admit how they feel. 

    I guess what I'm saying is that it's one thing to reassure pregnant women that they'll be fine when the baby arrives, but there's a balance between reassurance and honesty.

    http://www.postpartumprogress.com/when- … aby-enough
    https://www.seleni.org/advice-support/a … -your-baby

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 16 months agoin reply to this

      I agree, Marisa. I had an emergency C-Section on my first and when I came round, they gave me this baby and he could have belonged to anyone. I felt no 'rush of joy' or anything. I felt dreadful and would have happily left him in the hospital when I came home. However, over the next four months I fell completely in love with him.

      Hearing and reading stuff about the instant bond made me feel less than human at the time.

 
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