I would like some feedback on my hub

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   Jason mackenzieposted 5 years ago

   Hi, I would like some feedback on my hub 'Window Cleaning Facts Every Property Owner Should Be Aware Of' that can be found here - https://hubpages.com/living/Window-Clea … -Aware-Of. Thanks in advance...

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   FatFreddysCatposted 5 years ago

   When I click your link it sez "that page does not exist."
   
   Sorry, I tried. (shrugs)

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      Jason mackenzieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Here it is - https://hubpages.com/living/Window-Clea … e-Aware-Of

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   Jason mackenzieposted 5 years ago

   Hi, in fact it happened to me too just now. Let me find out why and then will get back on this one. Thanks for trying...

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      It's okay, you've added a full stop to the link. Here you go: https://hubpages.com/living/Window-Clea … e-Aware-Of

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         Jason mackenzieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Hi, many thanks for sorting this out for me, truly appreciate. regards...

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   Kierstin Gunsbergposted 5 years ago

   Hi Jason, I took a look at your profile and didn't see this particular article. Is it published yet or is it still in the writing/editing stage?

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      Jason mackenzieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Here it is - https://hubpages.com/living/Window-Clea … e-Aware-Of

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         Jason mackenzieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Sorry - https://hubpages.com/living/Window-Clea … e-Aware-Of

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   Jason mackenzieposted 5 years ago

   Hi theraggededge...did you check it out? Any feedback/comments?

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I haven't yet. Will try to get to it later.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Jason,
      
      Okay, here's my feedback.
      
      Some of your sentences are a bit long-winded and wordy. Keep in mind you are writing a simple 'how-to' and not an academic paper. I think it would benefit from a good pruning. More words does not mean better writing. In fact, the opposite is true.
      
      Also, in non-fiction writing - never use a long word where a short one would do.
      
      Remember who your readership is... people looking for information on how to clean windows are likely to be young home-owners or renters. They're not looking for War and Peace.
      
      Do you really mean to spray the blinds with antiseptic? That would smell awful. No-one wants their home smelling like a hospital.
      
      Don't overdo the drama... I don't think a few mould spots in the corner of a window is 'truly disturbing'
      
      Does that help?

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   psycheskinnerposted 5 years ago

   While there is nothing exactly bad about the hub, I struggle to find any advice that would not be completely obvious to any person capable of walking and chewing gum at the same time.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 5 years ago

   Am I the only one still getting a "page does not exist," even on the "corrected" link(s) in subsequent posts in this thread?
   
   (shrugs) I give up.

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   DzyMsLizzyposted 5 years ago

   Also got the 404 error....

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   Maybe Jason's working on it.
   
   You don't need to unpublish a hub to edit it

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    Jason mackenzieposted 5 years ago

    Hi theraggededge, thanks for your feedback and intend to implement it today itself, sincere regards...

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    Jason mackenzieposted 5 years ago

    FatFreddysCat and DzyMsLizzy...thanks for trying, appreciate your efforts. At present this hub is oscillating between edits and assessment. So that could be the reason for it not showing up...thanks anyway...

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