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I'd like feedback on my article: Top 10 Kuroko no Basket Last Game Players

  1. Otakudiscuss profile image61
    Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Top 10 Kuroko no Basket Last Game Players (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Automobile 180posted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      There are some issues with grammar, don't tell about low quality pic. Keep posting on forums and the hubbers will guide you to make it better each time. Use websites like polish my articles to know about grammar mistakes. Good luck

      1. theraggededge profile image100
        theraggededgeposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

        No, don't keep posting multiple requests for feedback on the same hub. It drives people nuts. Use one single thread.

      2. Otakudiscuss profile image61
        Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thanks for the tip.

  2. pen promulgates profile image56
    pen promulgatesposted 6 weeks ago

    The major issues that catch my eyes are the images, the links, and your grammar.

    Are the images legal to use?
    Images must have creative Common license. Otherwise, you must take the permission from the source and cite too.

    There are grammatical errors in the article: examples:
    'These 3 players was really good,' The verb should be were not was

    `Midorima made Nash Gold Jr. and the Jabberwock team so impressed when he shoot a whole court shot' it should be 'when he shot'.... Keep the same verb format

    'He has lots of dunks and some feats,' should be `he had`

    Like these there are many errors. The problem is you switch in verb forms and tenses for no reasons.

    Remove the outgoing link to Facebook and another one too.

    Hope these help
    Good luck

  3. Jeremy Gill profile image96
    Jeremy Gillposted 6 weeks ago

    Pen's right; mainly fix your grammar. A few other tips:

    1) Have confidence in your writing. At one point you ask the reader to "correct you if you're wrong." If you're unsure of something about the series, usually a quick google can confirm (it's not at all unusual for us to do research with our articles).
    2) Alter the spoiler alert to something more-natural sounding.

    Glad to meet a fellow anime author, and best of luck.

  4. Otakudiscuss profile image61
    Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks ago

    Thanks for your feedback's, I really appreciate it. I will try my best to fix my grammar in my future post. This is just my first time writing a blog and I'm not really great at writing (English is my second language).

    1. Jeremy Gill profile image96
      Jeremy Gillposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      I'm not trying to discourage you, but HubPages will be more difficult for anyone without a mastery over English since it's an English-centered website.

      That said, if you're willing to put in the time and effort, or have a friend who can proofread and help, kudos to you.

      1. Otakudiscuss profile image61
        Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thanks bro. And yeah HubPages will be difficult for me because I don't have mastery in English but this site just fits for me because this site is for beginners and here i might learn where or what I did wrong in my article and to improve my grammar (from you guys-es help). And I'm still learning at school though, not to be brag but I'm better than 40% of my classmates at English writings and reading (I'm 16 btw, sophomore).

        1. Jeremy Gill profile image96
          Jeremy Gillposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

          That's a good, optimistic attitude to have. If things progress far enough, you could eventually qualify for Google AdSense, where you'd start earning small amounts of money based on the views you receive. And even if not, the experience you gain may be worth it.

          1. Otakudiscuss profile image61
            Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

            if you don't mind me asking, how long have you've been using HubPages, and how much do you make per month? (right now and your first month)

            1. Jeremy Gill profile image96
              Jeremy Gillposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

              No problem, I don't mind at all. I've been using HubPages for almost three years.

              It took me more than a month to get into AdSense (you need a portfolio of solid, Featured Hubs, anywhere between 10-30), so I earned zip the first month. Even once in, it began as a few dimes a week, and it'll increase (or decrease) depending on how many views your writing can attract over time.

              Basically, the eventual financial compensation is a nice perk, but it can't replace an actual job. Anyway, like pen said, that's a long-term goal; for now, focus on getting a feel for Hubs and how they're written.

              1. Otakudiscuss profile image61
                Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

                alrighty, and thank you

  5. pen promulgates profile image56
    pen promulgatesposted 6 weeks ago

    HP is not a site for beginners unless they are good at writing error free materials. Anyone who writes well, good enough to pass the QAP, is welcome at HP. I advise, you read the hubs of other Hubbers. You will get the idea how the articles are magazine-style, media-rich and informative.
    I don't think you will need much reworking. Just enough polishing and you can write well. Every sentence you write, read it and sense if it makes sense. If it is complete and sensible, it's a correct sentence, otherwise not. It's not about using fancy words. It's about using the right words.

    1. Otakudiscuss profile image61
      Otakudiscussposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thanks, I actually read some article of the other hubbers to learn something. And I'm not good at fancy words, I don't understand a lot of fancy words until I hear them and search its definition.

 
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