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I'd like feedback on my Hub: China's Commercial Bike Sharing Services Such As Mo

  1. ehonhdouzi profile image55
    ehonhdouziposted 7 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub China's Commercial Bike Sharing Services Such As Mobike and Ofo. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. SherrieWeynand profile image93
    SherrieWeynandposted 7 months ago

    It's a neat concept, I wish they would start that here. If San Francisco has it, I haven't paid attention.

    That said, I would shorten your title, stop at "Services." There are some grammar issues throughout, but not so bad that someone wouldn't be able to proofread and edit it for you.

    Oh yeah, in your first paragraph, change "post" to article.

    1. ehonhdouzi profile image55
      ehonhdouziposted 7 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, Weynand, thank you, I will edit my article carefully.

      1. SakinaNasir53 profile image97
        SakinaNasir53posted 7 months agoin reply to this

        Hi ehonhdouzi! Welcome to HubPages! smile

        I agree with SherrieWeynand here. Also, I would like to point out this small error from your hub:

        "The sharing bikes are often stolen by people, they stole these bikes to sell or just keep them. Thieves are in any cities of any countries."

        "They stole these bikes" should be changed to "They steal these bikes".

        I hope this helps. Good luck!

 
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