I need your feedback - How To Start A Business With Great Impact

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  1. kedy profile image72
    kedyposted 14 months ago

    This is my first hub and I need your help to pass the QAP and to make featured on hubpages.

    It is about "How to start a new business with great impact and lower risk?"

    https://hubpages.com/business/How-To-St … Lower-Risk

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 14 months agoin reply to this

      We can't see it via that link, you need to use the link given to you in the email from QAP.

      1. kedy profile image72
        kedyposted 14 months agoin reply to this
        1. Marketing Merit profile image97
          Marketing Meritposted 14 months agoin reply to this

          Hi Kedy. You have 3 Amazon text links to books but don't directly provide any reviews or information about them. My guess would be that this is what is preventing your hub from passing QAP.

          1. kedy profile image72
            kedyposted 14 months agoin reply to this

            Great.. thank you. i'll remove those immediately. any other correction. Did you check rest of things?

    2. erorantes profile image54
      erorantesposted 14 months agoin reply to this

      I like your business plan. Perhaps, you can number each circle to have a synchronized picture and it will be easier to understand your subject. Good luck with your hub. You forgot to mention what kind of website is available  to reach the customers in the advertising section, or what kind of other ways are there to reach the customers to sale the product or service.

  2. theraggededge profile image99
    theraggededgeposted 14 months ago

    Okay... a few things smile

    Your title is not very search friendly. The key phrase 'how to start a business' is going to be overused and impossible to rank for. You need to find a title that will work in your favour for search engine traffic. Shorter is better.

    Your introduction is vague. It is your chance to grab your reader's attention and keep them reading. To be an entrepreneur is certainly not the wish of every person, so this sentence is over-generalising. Determine who your article is aimed at and write for them. So...start by asking questions, "Are you thinking about starting a business....?" Ask a question that people need answered.

    'Makes an impact...' not 'leaves an impact'.

    Tighten up the writing, "Here, I have collected seven effective ways to start a your own business that leaves a great impact on people you are targeting."

    "Here are seven effective ways to start a business with the most impact." Can you see the difference? Tighter writing, using fewer words has the most impact big_smile

    Point 1. You instruct people to create a plan and a strategy. Yes, that's useful, but then you go on to talk about hiring people and delivery. Surely, that will come much later? In this section you should only focus on the planning.

    I won't go into the others as I haven't enough time. However, you must write to the section title. Don't ramble.

    Get rid of that horrible, scruffy image. It's awful. In any case it looks like it's copyrighted. You can't use poor quality or pixelated images.

    Remove the ampersands (&) from your sub-titles. Use 'and'.

    "Don't Give Discounts..." not "Off Discounts"

    Proofread the article properly or get someone to do it for you. There are numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. You can try the free Hemingway app, but don't expect it to do all the work for you.

    Hope that helps.

    Edit: after reading through the hub again, I realise you haven't written to the intro. You have offered seven ways to start a business, but you haven't given seven *different ways* have you? You've given one way with seven progressive tips. D'you see what I mean? Your title could be something like "7 Tips to Start Your Business".

    1. kedy profile image72
      kedyposted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Wow, this is really something I was looking for. Thank You so much for the detailed review. I'll improve the quality and will ask for your review again.

      Thank You So Much.

      1. theraggededge profile image99
        theraggededgeposted 14 months agoin reply to this

        My pleasure. And thanks for the lovely fan mail smile

 
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