Pls help me to improve my article

  1. kevin10love profile image60
    kevin10loveposted 2 months ago
    1. Jeremy Gill profile image87
      Jeremy Gillposted 2 months ago in reply to this

      Here are suggestions:
      1) Proofread. There are several grammar and spelling errors. Make sure tenses align.
      2) Separate your text blocks. You kind of did this, but make the headings stand out by putting each in a separate text capsule.
      3) Spread pictures. Help freshen things up by dispensing pictures/videos/tables throughout the article rather than just at the beginning and end.
      4) Be careful what you say. Maybe it was just hyperbole, but some of the information here seems dubious, like the claim that too much emailing reduces IQ to 10.

      You have lots of work to do, Kevin, but it's possible this could become featured with loads of editing. Best of luck.

      1. kevin10love profile image60
        kevin10loveposted 2 months ago in reply to this

        Thank u for your valuable comments will make changes and post again

 
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