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Improving My Hub

  1. Craan profile image85
    Craanposted 4 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,
    I need help passing the quality assessment process with my hub https://hubpages.com/health/Long-Term-E … od-Obesity Would you help me?

    1. TIMETRAVELER2 profile image92
      TIMETRAVELER2posted 4 weeks ago in reply to this

      Hi.

      I took a look, and here are my first impressions:

      Place your first photo beneath your first paragraph.
      Do not title your first paragraph.
      Your Title does not totally match your content.  I think this is your biggest problem.  The  title says the content is about the effects of childhood obesity, not what causes it.  I'd get rid of any wordage other than that that relates directly to the title.  If you want to talk about causes, do it in a different article.

      You should also exclude the "What Can You Do" section.  Again, this does not address the effects of childhood obesity.

      If you want to include these sections, then you'll have to change your title to reflect that content.  Something general such as "What You Need to Know about Childhood Obesity" or something similar.

      1. Craan profile image85
        Craanposted 4 weeks ago in reply to this

        Thank you, TimeTraveler! I made the changes! Hopefully, it will help!

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image95
    Rupert Taylorposted 4 weeks ago

    Couple of guesses.

    There's only one image; more would break up the copy and give a more attractive layout.

    There's a huge gap of white space before your final paragraph that should be removed.

    1. Craan profile image85
      Craanposted 4 weeks ago in reply to this

      Thank you, Rupert! I added 2 more images and updated the description.

 
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