I'd like feedback on my article: Family Trip To Langkawi Island Malaysia

  1. Shrouds profile image54
    Shroudsposted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I don't mind if my submission being rejected for several times,as long as I get a kind feedback and help from expert hubbers,thank you in advance.

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Family Trip To Langkawi Island Malaysia (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Jeremy Gill profile image96
    Jeremy Gillposted 2 months ago

    Here are my suggestions:

    1) Proofread. There are a few errors, and many sentences are awkward or could be combined with the word "and".
    2) Engage your readers by using the active voice over passive.
    3) Remove extra white space between capsules.

    Good luck.

 
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