I would like to improve this article

  1. Ivan Hernandez profile image90
    Ivan Hernandezposted 6 days ago

    The article is seriously lacking in style.

    https://hubpages.com/politics/10-Reason … Presidency

    How Do I Improve it?

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image99
    Rupert Taylorposted 6 days ago

    Hi Erick

    There are several problems with your article, so here are a few suggestions.

    I understand your anger, but I think it obscures the point you are trying to make. Try to deal with proven facts rather than allegations.

    Here are a few other issues.
    "I do have to admit, but Russia's pretty intelligent." Wouldn't "Russia is a very intelligence player on the international scene" be better?

    "Since the Cold War, Russia's (has been) trying to outsmart and outdo us,

    "LGQBT Community" Standard style is LGBTQ.

    "More than half of all countries depend on the US for advice." That's a very bold statement that needs to be supported a respected source.

    "When he visited The Pope in Vatican City, he was not impressed. Donald Trump didn't do anything about them, the police did ..." Those two sentences are totally unrelated and jarring.

    "If you look at his staff, most of them are gone." Most? Certainly, some have gone, but not most. The sentence would carry more weight with some names - Flynn, Bannon Preibus, etc.

    Hope this helps

 
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