I'd like feedback on my article: Think You’ve Got What It Takes to Be an...

  1. threekeys profile image79
    threekeysposted 2 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Think You’ve Got What It Takes to Be an Ambient Abuser? Take a Look.. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Jeremy Gill profile image95
    Jeremy Gillposted 12 days ago

    Hello, here are some quick suggestions:

    1) Perhaps change the title. As it, it almost sounds like a challenge, as if someone would *want* to be an abuser.
    2) Remove extra white space between paragraphs.
    3) Proofread. Some of your numbered points end in periods, others do not.
    4) The second half of the article becomes text-heavy.
    5) Work on titling capsules. For instance, "Last Thoughts...." is vague, doesn't need the periods, and is misleading (it's the third-to-last text capsule)!
    6) Personally, I'm not a fan of writing in all caps for emphasis; often comes across as screaming.

    Best of luck!

    1. threekeys profile image79
      threekeysposted 12 days agoin reply to this

      Jeremy
      You are the only one who has come back to me. I really value the objectivity and I will now go back and redo.
      Yes I know using capitals is "screaming". That is how I felt. But true, it comes across in a overwhelming way.
      So,  a third title is needed? Ok. Try again.
      Cheers Jeremy.

 
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