I'd like feedback on my article: Tips for Lose Belly Fat

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   Steven 123 infoposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Tips for Lose Belly Fat (must be signed in to view)

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Here are some things that I noticed. The article and its title contain English errors. You've written a health article but have included no references to support your claims. At the end of the article you encourage people to visit your website, which is self-promotional and not allowed.
   
   In addition, you haven't created a bio to show your qualifications or experience. (The bio is displayed at the top of our articles.) A photo would also be a good addition to the article, as long as it has a public domain or commercial Creative Commons license.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 4 years ago

   Hello Steven:
   
   Your title does not make sense. Do you want to say “Tips to Lose Belly Fat,” or what?
   
   This is a highly competitive topic. When I Googled “lose belly fat,” I received 208,000,000 results.
   
   Did you do keyword research before you wrote this article?
   
   Some of your paragraphs are too long and need to be broken into smaller components.
   
   You have both short, choppy sentences and run-on sentences throughout your article. HP wants near-perfect grammar and sentence structure.
   
   You need to include a graphic or two in your article.
   
   Some of your text should be rearranged into text capsules that have descriptive headings.
   
   You have other grammar issues in your article as well. Again, HP wants near-perfect grammar.
   
   I do not write health and wellness articles, but I believe that you need to add references to the information sources that you have used in a separate link capsule at the end of your article. Also, what are your professional credentials that enable you to write a medical article? (Other authors at HP could help you better than I can on this matter.)
   
   You should also add some personal and professional information about yourself on your profile page. For example, what are your professional credentials? (Keeping the “About” section blank is not a good idea.)
   
   Finally, I strongly believe that you need to become more familiar with HP’s Learning Center. Here is the link:
   
   https://hubpageshelp.com/
   
   Good luck.

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   Steven 123 infoposted 4 years ago

   Thank you for your advise

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