Please critique my new hubpage
critique: a brutally honest review given of one's writing with the hope it will help the author grow and become a master of their craft
Now, that's not the official definition, but that's *my* definition, so I'm going to be brutally honest, but I'm also going to help you grow and if you read up until the end ... I promise to make it all feel positive with hope (I swarez it!)
Okay, let's start with the fee of the article. It's a bit stiff and formal and reads more like something in a text book. However, the best articles are informal, breezy, and inviting to the reader, so as to keep them reading. A reader wants to feel like they are having something discussed with them, rather than being told something.
i.e.
'Dogs require a lot of care. XYZ is a med that cures everything. That's why vets recommend it.'
Now, that's informative, but that's all it is. And this is fine ... provided you are willing to fulfill the role of someone's encyclopedia and care nothing about adsense. Now, come here while I whisper this into your ear ... give 'em something they'll enjoy. Make it coversational, like so ...
'We all know that dogs require a lot of care, but did you know they have a medicine caled XYZ that cures everything? Amazed? I know I was. Arthritis, dermititis, heartwork, roundworm, you name it. Let me give you some some great info on this wonderdrug!'
So much less informal and so much more inviting ... and so easy to do.
Challenge yourself. Pretend you are totally excited by what you are about to discuss and you want to infect another person with your excitement! Talk to them informally and try to get them buzzed as well. Then ... write what you would say to them, write down the responses you would anticipate, then write down your replies. When you are done with this, cross out their replies and reword for it to make sense ... only supplying the pieces of their responses to make it all make sense.
Does it work?
You bet your sweet bippy it does!
Why?
It's a bit of psychology at work... You see, by doing this you are anticipating what will be going through the reader's mind and you will be answering the questions that you assume they will be asking. The reader will be pulled into the article because you will be answering their questions as they occur, which will make them impressed with your knowledge of the topic and will build enough trust that they will consider you an authority on the topic and might click an ad.
Written in a dry manner they perceive it's just material drawn from elsewhere and they get frustrated when it doesn't answer their questions, that's why conversational articles sell over the crowd very well.
Trust Yoshi on this one!
So, now that I've beat you up a bit I need to put you all back together again. Luckily, that's an easy one as you do appear to have a good amount of worthy information to deliver and you seem to know what you are talking about. If presented well, this material will work well with the masses.
Also, I agree ... no disclaimers at the beginning ... always save them for last - or for a moment where they come directly into play. Even then, deliver them as part of your conversation with the reader.
Remember, if the reader is involved then you have what you want ... an interested reader. Now go out there and win one for the Yoshi!Does that mean I gotta put it in a hub?
once again, ya make sense ... I'll do it this weekend when I have off work.
- I'll be watching to make sure you do.
As a newbie I'm still learning and, unlike other forums that I participate in, I'm amazed at the level of friendliness and helpful advice to be found here.
Yoshie - I wish that there was a way of bookmarking your excellent advice - I await your hub on the subect with much anticipation
Suki
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