I'd like feedback on my article: Waking up to Failure Every Day.

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   Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years ago

   I would like help with improving my article.
   
   https://hubpages.com/literature/Waking- … -Every-Day
   
   Can you help me? Thank you in advance.

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      theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      No. Even the title is too depressing
      
      Like the rhymes though.

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         Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks. This is my first poem.

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   Mary Florenceposted 3 years ago

   Let's try, "Waking Up To Failure Every Day" instead of "Waking up to Failure Every Day".
   
   Capitalisation

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you. I will Correct it.

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   Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years ago

   How do I improve this article further?

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      theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      It's not an article, it's a poem, so you have it how you like it. It's your creation and as long as the spelling is okay, then it should be fine. Is there a poetry category to put it under?

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         Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         2-line poems. Actually, no. There isn't. What do you call 2-line poetries?

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            theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Stanzas? I don't know much about poetry.

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               Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

               I made a stanza, but there's no category for Stanza.
               
               I rearranged the poem into a stanza.

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                  Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  I've rearranged the poem into a sonnet: A 14-line poem. 3 rows of 4 lines each and 2 lines at the end followed by a note at the end.

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   eugbugposted 3 years ago

   Is this autobiographical?

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, but It's an autobiographical poetry. What do you call that?

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         eugbugposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         I don't know. What do you define as failure?

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            Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Not accomplishing your goals. Letting yourself be negative. Having medicine. Having no chance at independence.

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               theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

               Well you accomplished writing some poetry. How many people do that? Not many.

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                  Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  I made a sonnet. Come check.

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               eugbugposted 3 years agoin reply to this

               Well you learned to walk and read and write. They're all achievements and successes. Success doesn't have to be composed of wondrous achievements. Life is all about baby steps and not so baby steps and positive mental attitude.

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   theraggededgeposted 3 years ago

   Do you know what the best bit is?
   
   This: "Erick Hernandez rarely writes poetry, but when he does, it is a masterpiece."
   
   I love it

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you. That's why It's going to Letterpile. As soon as my 14 days expires, I can publish it.

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   theraggededgeposted 3 years ago

   Could you write another poem?
   
   Finding happiness in the small things? You know, like breakfast, or TV, or your HP friends?

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