I'd like feedback on my article: Depop

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   jennifercasey0posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Depop (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      My observations:
      
      Lengthen the title.
      
      I have no idea what Depop is and it took a while before I realised it is an app. So you need to make it clear immediately what it is you are referring to.
      
      Now I'm reading further and the app is just part of it, yes? It's very confusing.
      
      If any of your text has been copied and pasted from the company website, you won't get your article approved, so make sure it is all completely original. Also, if you are part of Depop, it will be considered as self-promotion.
      
      Those links might be a problem... and why do you need to include email addresses?
      
      Place your photos between the text capsules instead of bunching them all up together. Consider if you need them all.
      
      HubPages is 'family-friendly' so you might want to remove the F-word.
      
      It's 'customer' not 'costumer'.
      
      The analytics images are poor quality and not necessary to the article.
      
      Good luck.

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         jennifercasey0posted 5 years agoin reply to this

         The text was not copy and pasted by an article. I'll articulate on the details of the app. Thanks a bunch for your feedback!
         PS I included email addresses for users who need any help on the app or questions. They do not have an in app feature to communicate with them. However, if that's not allowed, I'd gladly delete them!

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            Natalie Frankposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            I would also replace the first image as it doesn't show anything, and  remove the pictures of the CEO and Founder as they are relevant.  Remove extra space between paragraphs. There is "submit a request" function so remove emails. You don't need double headers (e.g. Depop Space, LA.) Use a caption instead.  Use only one photo in a section.  For example, you don't need multiple ones for the L.A. section, especially since most of them don't show anything.  I'd keep the third one as the impression of it more inline with a shop of some kind. The first and fourth ones are pretty generic red buildings and the second one is another similar to the third but not as good.  Can you use the photos you've included legally?  Did you take any of them from the site (in which case they'd likely be copyrighted and you can't use them) or somewhere else you can't take them from or have you found photos in the public domain that are licensed as able to be used for commercial purposes?

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               jennifercasey0posted 5 years agoin reply to this

               Thanks a lot! All the advice for me is very helpful. I'm currently editing the article right now to fix these mistakes.

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                  Natalie Frankposted 5 years agoin reply to this

                  I'd be happy to look at it again.  Good luck.

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