I'd like feedback on my article: Clive Cussler, Author

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   powers41posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   
   I made several changes today and I hope it shows improvement.  Can someone re-check my article please.  Christmas day eastern time 3:40  PM
   Here is my article: Clive Cussler, Author

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   psycheskinnerposted 5 years ago

   Your article needs more structure.  Have separate text modules with headings like: biography, books, NUMA. Put full sized pictures next to the most relevant section of text.  Also more info, it would be reasonable for a reader to expect a full list of his books, best seller and award achievements etc.

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      powers41posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so very much.  I will edit again and inserting a list of some of his books is a great idea.  I am so glad to be here learning to have great articles to submit.  I will now edit and submit again.  You Hubbers are great with advise.  Thanks again

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   Hi, Frances. You should proofread your bio and the article carefully in order to catch several errors. The article begins with a sentence fragment, so this needs to be changed as well. As Rupert has said, boldface text shouldn’t be used in the article. There’s also no need to write the name of the museum or the writer entirely in capital letters.
   
   The use of multiple text capsules would be a good idea, as psycheskinner says. Full-width photos (with a suitable license) would look better than small ones. In addition, placing the photos between text capsules would look better than grouping them together.

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   powers41posted 5 years ago

   Alicia, thank you so so much.  I am striving to be perfect and you are giving me the best  ways to do that!

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   After a quick go through these appeared"
   
   
   "... it would serve him well for many of his plots in his novels
   
   . While his wife ..." You've hit return in front of the period.
   
   "He and Barbara had married in 1955 and were together almost fifty years toll (till) her death in 2003."
   
   
   "The Carpathia sunk the 17th of July 1918 after being torpedoed by Germany off the southern Irish coast." It was torpedoed by a German submarine not by the country.
   
   Captain Arthur Henry Rostron (was) awarded a medal for rescuing the survivors of the Titanic.
   
   These sorts of errors look sloppy and readers may conclude that if the writing is sloppy probably the research is too.

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      powers41posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      How can I ever thank all of you and your help to make me pay attention.  Thanks so much.

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   Jodahposted 5 years ago

   Hi Frances, you received good advice here already. You do need to proofread the article as everyone has said, and change the images to full width ones.

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      powers41posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Again thanks for all the advice given.

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