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  1. Erudite Scholar profile image61
    Erudite Scholarposted 6 years ago

    Hi hubbers,
    I would like Feedback on mt article https://hubpages.com/health/How-to-lose … -naturally

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    1. theraggededge profile image83
      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      You need to cite your qualifications in order to show you have authority in the topic of diet and nutrition.

      So what do you think your article adds to the general pile of millions of weight loss articles out there? What new and inspiring advice can you give? I'm not seeing anything different. Check #2 in your 12 Mistakes I Made on Hubpages article.

      There are too many images and not enough words. Especially of weightlifters -- they are not what most of us want to look like.

      There are grammar and punctuation issues. There is always a space after a period/full stop.

      Subtitles should be in title case.

      Where's the information about fats, good and bad? You've ignored a whole food group.

      You still have 'vivacious' in your 'About the author'. Vivacious is an adjective usually applied to girls and women, and means pretty and lively. It looks silly. The word you need in connection with reading a lot is 'voracious'. Or you might use 'enthusiastic'.

      You keep asking for feedback but you don't make any changes even though people have told you all this previously. Why bother asking?

      Hope that helps.

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      1. lobobrandon profile image67
        lobobrandonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

        Why bother helping? He does not even reply to say thanks or give any indication that he wants to make the changes. Actually making the changes is another story.

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        1. theraggededge profile image83
          theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

          I know. I shan't do it again. I was just wasting time and putting off writing my own article hmm

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          1. lobobrandon profile image67
            lobobrandonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Haha. I tend to do that too. All the time I spend here on HP, if I were writing hubs I'd have more than 20 total published hubs big_smile

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