I'd like feedback on my article: 10 of the Creepiest Psych Episodes Ever Aired

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   Ali-Key Swanmieposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? I can't get it to pass the boot camp inspection thing. Thanks!
   
   Ali-Key Swanmie
   Here is my article: 10 of the Creepiest Psych Episodes Ever Aired (must be signed in to view)

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   A thorough proof read is called for. There is an it's that should be an its.
   "... baffling murders cases ..." should be murder.
   
   The outbound links might be a problem. HubPages doesn't like writers to send readers away from the page. You can include links to sources at the end of the text.
   
   Amazon capsules have to be accompanied by personal recommendations based on the writer's own use. I'm shaky on this because I never use Amazon capsules having found them not worth the bother.

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      Ali-Key Swanmieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the feedback! It's so helpful to have some else's perspective; I worked for such a long time editing that I missed the simplest errors while proofreading. I will proofread again and also correct the links, as well as look deeper into the Amazon capsules. Thank you again!

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   Natalie Frankposted 5 years ago

   If you include an Amazon product it has to be something you have personal experience with and have indicated that as well as what you thought about it.  HP seems not to like Amazon capsules as much as links so use a link instead.  Good luck!

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      Ali-Key Swanmieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for the tips! I will clarify that I've purchased, and will check out links vs. capsules.

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   Natalie Frankposted 5 years ago

   Another quick tip regarding your subheadings. I would use heading 3 not heading 2 for them as you don't want them to be of a similar size to your title and you don't need to use them because of using several levels below them.  The other thing with your subheading is all the numbers which makes them a little confusing.  For Example:
   
   1 Season 1 Episode 7
   
   Maybe try this instead:
   
   1) Season One, Episode Seven
   
   Or maybe this:
   
   1) “Who Ya Gonna Call?” Season 1, Episode 8
   
   Or to maximize on the name of the show for search purposes you could possibly go with one of these:
   
   1) Psych: “Who Ya Gonna Call?” Season 1, Episode 8
                                       or
   1) Psych: “Who Ya Gonna Call?” [Season 1, Episode 8]
   
   Good luck

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      Ali-Key Swanmieposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Ooh, all very good tips! Thank you again!

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         Natalie Frankposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         You're welcome.

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