I'd like feedback on my article: Summary of the novel “Frankenstein” by ...
Hello Nyamweya,
There are a lot of grammatical problems in the article and sometimes a little confusion. For example,
" Obviously, it needed a companion for it was lonely and Victor was the best candidate for the job."
That reads as though Victor was in line for becoming the monster's companion.
And this:
"Victor’s failure to deal with the trouble that he created is an indication of weakness. He actually pursues the creator and was in a position to destroy it. Having spotted on the window, he aims, shoots but misses."
"Victor's failure to deal with the monster is an indication of weakness. He pursued the monster but when he had the opportunity to destroy it by shooting, he missed." or something like that.
At the end, you mention 'Walton and his crew". Who are these people?
And you also say, "Victor’s suffering demonstrates his quilt..." You mean 'guilt'? A quilt is a kind of blanket
Proofread thoroughly. Read the work out loud because it will help you spot any anomalies. Examine each sentence and ask yourself if it is saying what you actually mean.
Good luck.You're welcome. I'm not an editor, just a writer
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