I'd like feedback on my article: What is the Main Cause of Cancer?

  1. Chuck Bluestein profile image62
    Chuck Bluesteinposted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article What is the Main Cause of Cancer?. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Jeremy Gill profile image94
    Jeremy Gillposted 8 weeks ago

    Here are suggestions:

    1) Sprinkle photos/videos throughout rather than putting them all at only the beginning and end.
    2) Watch for grammar errors such as "most of the causes is under your control" (is should be are).
    3) Many of your sentences are awkward and short; try connecting them with conjunctions or semicolons.

    Best of luck.

 
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