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   Ryan Corneliusposted 5 years ago

   Hubpages features articles that pass their requirements but they generate no traffic. I want traffic. Could anyone help give me tips to improve this article. I want them all superb or close as possible so that I could increase my ratings. I just want to be a better writer.
   https://hubpages.com/business/Marketing-Writing-Content

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      Gregory DeVictorposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Ryan, you must break up all of your paragraphs into much smaller components. Readers generally have short attention spans, and they might lose interest in your article because of the long paragraphs.

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         Ryan Corneliusposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you

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         Gregory DeVictorposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Ryan, you have a lot of short, choppy sentences throughout your article that must be combined into longer ones. Perhaps this article can help you to improve your sentence structure:
         
         https://magoosh.com/pro-writing/avoid-i … sentences/

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            Ryan Corneliusposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Great. Thank You. This is very much needed. I was looking for an article about sentence structure.

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   DrMark1961posted 5 years ago

   Ryan, even if you are a great writer that does not mean you will have traffic. It is important, and adimirable, to want to improve your articles, but if you are looking for traffic the first thing you need to do is work on your titles.
   The article on content marketing, for example: why would a reader even bother clicking on it? Type this phrase into a search engine and see how many pages come up. Do you see the difference in the titles?
   Your series of articles on the EnterPainMent industry: do they have any traffic? It is not that they are not worth reading, it is just that no one sees them on their search results. How many people search Google for "Eminem and the Enterpainment Business"? If you titled it "The early Missouri struggles of Rap star Eminem" you still might not get any visitors, but it would be a little different from the thousands of articles about this person.
   My subject matter is a lot different than what you write about but check the titles of my articles on my profile page. Also check titles on the profile pages for Glenn Stok, lobobrandon, and theraggededge. None of them are writing about the same things, but all of them have titles that are show up in the search engines.
   Keep working on those sentences, too. I read several articles on your profile page and appreciate all of the work that has gone into them.

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      Ryan Corneliusposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for that. That is what all hubbers on here need to know.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   Ryan,
   I agree with Gregory. Also, your outline your article with "Basic 1" and so forth, however, you did not mention them in your introduction.
   Also, this is a rough draft that needs a good edit. You are on the right track like Gregory said it's choppy and needs better transitions.

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   Gregory DeVictorposted 5 years ago

   Ryan, here is another link to the same website that I referenced above. This chapter is about how to add sentence variety. I really appreciate the clear, complete, and concise way that everything is explained.
   
   Here is the kink:
   
   https://magoosh.com/pro-writing/sentence-variety/
   
   Good luck!

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